Haiku 4

distant thunderstorm
horizon is grumbling
day lilly closes

©Donna Jones

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Michael Dom

Date: 7/11/2013 7:22:00 AM

I am glad I came back to enjoy this flower. :-)

Bl Devnath

Date: 7/5/2013 11:51:00 AM

Beautiful imagination worded nicely. A great picture drawn with little ink. Loved always, bl

John Posey

Date: 7/3/2013 4:42:00 AM

This one is bound for Haiku Heaven... Where all good little haikus go... I love it... Jake

Debbie Duncan

Date: 6/26/2013 12:14:00 AM

love the haiku Donna ;}

Timothy Hicks

Date: 6/21/2013 1:15:00 AM

Day lily... what a fine description of the sun! Makes me think the sea is swallowing it whole. Sorry I haven't been very responsive lately... been busy at the stadium!

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 6/20/2013 10:09:00 PM

this is great. LIke Harry says, a clever one.

Harry Horsman

Date: 6/18/2013 3:59:00 PM

another warning of the impending storm, clever Haiku,,,like this

Donna Jones
Date: 6/19/2013 6:18:00 AM

Appreciate that Harry..:-)

Nette Onclaud

Date: 6/17/2013 12:28:00 PM

yesss...your creative shift in the end works magic, donna... a striking 'ku so well done!..:) huggs

Donna Jones
Date: 6/17/2013 4:13:00 PM

Thank you a nette..

Eileen Manassian

Date: 6/17/2013 10:25:00 AM

HI MD....I'm missing ya! :( Where you hiding???? I'm so proud of this. You've gotten this haiku thing down pat! I still can't get it right!!! Just coming to send my love your way!

Donna Jones
Date: 6/17/2013 4:01:00 PM

Hey you....thanks....I've been here! In my yard and garden and kitchen!!!!! And checking in on you from time to time....thanks for checking on me too...

Richard Lamoureux

Date: 6/17/2013 8:10:00 AM

Excellent Haiku, I admire people who get this style. I can't seem to get my head around it. Well done Donna.

Donna Jones
Date: 6/17/2013 3:57:00 PM

Hi Richard...don't really know if I do or not either...just all the time I have to write right now...I would rather read when I'm on here...is there such a thing as a one line poem?..that would really be something for me right now!...by the way thanks.....:-)

Mustapha Mohammed

Date: 6/17/2013 6:02:00 AM

Nicely penned dear Donna.xoxo

Donna Jones
Date: 6/17/2013 7:20:00 AM

Thank you ever so much...

Russell Sivey

Date: 6/16/2013 8:19:00 PM

This is such a natural write...it flowed so perfectly, one beat off the other, I just love the image you presented inside this poem my friend! I truly loved reading this enlightening piece this evening, Great Work!!

Donna Jones
Date: 6/17/2013 7:32:00 AM

Thanks Russell...it popped into my wannabe haiku head while I was scrambling around securing the yard for a sudden storm last night. I laugh now at that phrase after that contest! I'll always be a wannabe but don't care! Haha.....I'll just keep on trying! Thanks for your support