Haiku 33

I'm still learning, Deb!! I read Caleb's comment. Thank you, always! Love, Annalise

This is brilliant.......and a lovely connection.The sugar and the snow...can see them both, lovely! I am still learning from you.....and did some revision on my own entry. And...a soupmail for you!

I likes this one: the contrast of hot porridge with cold snow outside!

Since I am not sure but think that porridge is oatmeal that would represent old dirty snow the dusting of sugar would be maybe powdered sugar which would be fresh white snow.You are comparing your morning cereal or food to the new snow outside?.I did not really get an ahHa though.I hope that you continue to have power.I know that it must be hard to be without power and glad that you are on the grid.I hope that you get to get out soon provided that you want to get out.Thanks for stopping by..Sara

hi Debbie , not an expert, but i like what i see..

the leap as well as the juxtaposition to lead on the reader's mind is amazing,,, loved it Debbie

Ok, so its not 5-7-5, which is ok as long as you have short, long, short...17 syllables or less...right? Unless one speaks Japanese...then I suppose the rules are not so much rules as they are guidelines. And the cutting line is great...it does not continue the second line, but cuts it. Also you eat porridge for breakfast...hence the morning...and snow is the sugar... giving another meaning...like snow would dust the morning ground (porridge).

oohh - I like this one Debbie!

I am finding here the same what Eileen has commented below.Good one.

I think it's wonderful, Debbie! The Aha moment comes in the last line where one understands that this is an analogy. The porridge symbolizes the brown earth and the sugar the snow. Very nice way to lead the mind! I really really liked it! I know that the first line is to be 5 syllables the middle 7 and the last 5...you haven't kept strictly to that...are you alluding to that in your question? I'm enthralled!