Haiku 33

slush mounds on the asphalt's shoulder -- wet mail

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Poet Destroyer A

Date: 5/7/2014 12:00:00 PM

soup mail...again

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 5/7/2014 11:59:00 AM

if line two of the haiku is suppose to be an action then this isn't a true haiku. on the asphalts shoulder is merely describing its position and though you could argue that its an action by being where it is i would consider that a stretch at best. Debbie, I'm trying to understand, the subject here..... SLUSH MOUNDS..... I hope the new example i sent you is much better.... Linda

Connie Gildersleeve

Date: 2/1/2013 6:49:00 AM

Just so it doesn't freeze and you slip and fall. Winter and it's slush. Great haiku 33 Debbie. Warm Smiles, Connie

Harry Horsman

Date: 1/30/2013 2:18:00 PM

keeping an eye on yours now Debbie, so i can advance my knowledge.. like this,,

Elizabeth Wesley

Date: 1/28/2013 8:58:00 PM

Wet boots and socks too, describes the end of my walk today perfectly. When will it end?

Audrey Haick

Date: 1/28/2013 8:07:00 PM

: ) I love the clever twist, Debbie...never saw it coming!! Great job as usual. Love, Annalise

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 1/28/2013 6:59:00 PM

That'll do it!!

Mehnaz Veetil

Date: 1/28/2013 5:55:00 PM

I admire your haikus. Love the twists in line three. Thanks for sharing. I tried and ended up with 5,7,5 syllable count.