Haiku 24

two mountains:
one in the distance,
one in the lake

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Paul Callus

Date: 4/29/2020 3:17:00 PM

An excellent reflection, Timothy. Would be inspiring, especially if it were Mount Fiji! Regards // paul

Timothy Hicks
Date: 4/29/2020 7:21:00 PM

THAT would be a sight to see!

Matthew Anish

Date: 5/12/2013 10:20:00 PM

Short and to the point! Keep it up! Peace & Blessings Matthew Anish

Timothy Hicks
Date: 5/12/2013 10:46:00 PM

Thanks again Matt. For the most part haiku is stronger when it's more straightforward. I'm pleased you like it!

Charmaine Chircop

Date: 5/11/2013 3:44:00 PM

Reflections well expressed.I can picture this beautiful image in my mind Timorhy..Lovely

Timothy Hicks
Date: 5/11/2013 11:35:00 PM

Thanks for stopping by Charmaine!

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 5/10/2013 8:32:00 PM

wow Timothy, i like the reflection of the mountain in the water. The imagery is perfect, and i must say one of the best haiku I've ever read... I'd rate your poem with a 10 but, we are only allowed up to 7... I wonder what the image in the lake would look like, if I stood over it, and skips some rocks over the imagery on this page already.... would i be making a mountain shake... he he~ JK... Linda

Timothy Hicks
Date: 5/10/2013 10:13:00 PM

That's a huge compliment PD! Glad you liked it... and I was almost wondering the same thing. Mountain shaking is easier than you think... just have to stretch your sense of logic a bit ;)

Richard Lamoureux

Date: 5/10/2013 6:13:00 PM

My powers of observation must be diminished, I didn't realize you were talking about a reflection. Good thing I read Tim's comment. Great job Tim!

Timothy Hicks
Date: 5/10/2013 10:11:00 PM

Ha ha... yes, haiku can be a bit strange if you are not connecting with the image. They are similar to riddles at times.

Eileen Manassian

Date: 5/10/2013 3:07:00 PM

This is amazing, Timothy! :) Sweet and to the point! Yet..I wonder..how my life is reflected to others. Lovely...leaves one wondering.

Timothy Hicks
Date: 5/10/2013 10:10:00 PM

You add your own to the spice to the haiku... I like that :) When it's in the middle of summer and the lake is still like glass... the picture just takes your breath away.

Tim Ryerson

Date: 5/10/2013 9:50:00 AM

Perfect...the reflection of the mountain in the lake...Your poetry is growing by leaps and bounds Tim...Don't know what this dude below is talking about...Let it stand! - Tim

Timothy Hicks
Date: 5/10/2013 10:33:00 AM

Wow, thanks Tim! It does seem to flow better with the 'and'... it encourages me to know you think I am improving :)

Tim Ryerson
Date: 5/10/2013 9:57:00 AM

Not trying to be a know-it-all jerk here Tim...But consider taking out the word 'and' in the last line and its perfect

Painted Hunter

Date: 5/10/2013 6:10:00 AM

Great haiku, Timothy. To answer your question, the books are very small with very thin pages...2 or 3 books per pocket, and pockets over the whole body...even the upper arms(though only one book thick there) 100 is just a guess, but you could fit at least that many....LOTS around your stomach, chest, and back. But really, one looks ridiculously too fat for their head in this outfit..ha...the grace of God can be the only answer to getting away with it so many times.

Timothy Hicks
Date: 5/10/2013 10:30:00 AM

Thanks for the explanation. It was a fantastic story and even more amazing because it's non-fiction.