Haiku 10

the frog sits beside the cat's water bowl-- a jay swoops

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Arthur Charles Ford

Date: 9/15/2012 2:44:00 AM

good imagery debbie. if titled, you can call it "Food Chain".(LOL) thanks. check me out at:www.thepoetbandcompany.yolasite.com; wewuvpoetry@hotmail.com

Bl Devnath

Date: 9/11/2012 12:02:00 PM

Hi! friend, enjoyed your nice imagination. I have replaced 'a fly' with 'a man' and 'district' with 'the world', pl. read again. Loved always, bl

Joy Wellington

Date: 9/8/2012 2:46:00 PM

Now I wonder who the jay took with it...hpmmm...the frog or the cat? great imagery here. Love it. One love. Joy Wells

Nathan D.

Date: 9/7/2012 8:03:00 PM

You still have it' the action i love'

Jack Horne

Date: 9/7/2012 3:16:00 PM

Yep, the contest is over, but I was just wondering how it could have been a proper haiku moment - maybe something like: smiling children pick the large pink flowers - - i sneeze? Thanks for all your help and advice, Debs. I must log off now x

Jack Horne

Date: 9/7/2012 2:40:00 PM

clever haiku, Debs. I never did think of anything satisfactory for the hayfever/blossoms haiku. Any suggestions? (for me to learn for next time, I mean). I'm still wracking my brain...