Gwen

Flibbety Shibbety
Gwendolyn Geritrude
Blackened the windows with
curtains so plain.

Neighborly aesthetic
peri-precautiously
people all decided
she was insane. 



Robert Dixon
My attempt at Double Dactyl.
Let me know what you think.  
Constructively.

peopledouble dactyl

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Jason Talbott

November 14, 2011 at 3:16 PM

I only learned of this form this morning so I don't claim to be an expert. This is very well written but I spotted a couple of stress problems. The first in line 5: aesthetic is not quite a dactyl. You would have to pronounce it AES-thet-ic, while the natural pronunciation is aes-THET-ic. Also, in line 7: decided, again is not a dactyl. Here you would have to pronounce it DE-cid-ed, and the natural pronunciation is de-CID-ed. But what you have here is an enjoyable read. Good work!