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Flibbety Shibbety Gwendolyn Geritrude Blackened the windows with curtains so plain. Neighborly aesthetic peri-precautiously people all decided she was insane. Robert Dixon My attempt at Double Dactyl. Let me know what you think. Constructively.

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Jason Talbott

Date: 11/14/2011 3:16:00 PM

I only learned of this form this morning so I don't claim to be an expert. This is very well written but I spotted a couple of stress problems. The first in line 5: aesthetic is not quite a dactyl. You would have to pronounce it AES-thet-ic, while the natural pronunciation is aes-THET-ic. Also, in line 7: decided, again is not a dactyl. Here you would have to pronounce it DE-cid-ed, and the natural pronunciation is de-CID-ed. But what you have here is an enjoyable read. Good work!

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 10/9/2011 6:55:00 PM

Robert, good attempt,,, ~ENJOYED YOUR POEM,,have yourself a wonderful Sunday~ ;-) take care,..p.d.

Nancy Jones

Date: 10/9/2011 6:48:00 PM

hah!! what I think is that this is one of the most difficult forms out there andya did a decent job with it. Happy eve~N

Nancy Jones
Date: 10/9/2011 6:50:00 PM

and ifya wanna see one i did, soupmail me and i'll direct ya towards it