thriveni c mysore Poet Diminished Hexaverse

Grounding

Mist covered tall trees
Myna on a wire
Sunshine mugged by clouds
Smoke of factory
Road snaking uphill

Cold numb fingers
Chill wind on face
Dry thirsty throat
Eyes yearning more

Humming wind
Rustling leaves
My breathing

Wet soil
Wet wood

Bread

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Paula Goldsmith December 18, 2024 at 8:35 AM Congratulations on your win. What a wonderful "Grounding" write/story. I enjoyed reading it. Have A Very Blessed Merry Christmas.......... thriveni c mysore December 18, 2024 at 8:36 PM Thank you so much dear friend. I am glad you liked it. I am grateful to you for the Blessings. happy writing to you too, Cheers.

Sara Kendrick December 17, 2024 at 4:08 AM I want to personally thank you for your entry in my contest. Very descriptive scene painted. Congratulations on your winner. Way to go. Sara K thriveni c mysore December 17, 2024 at 9:26 PM Thank you dear poet for this lovely contest. I am grateful to you for your precious time, effort and congratulatory message. Thank you for the placement. Means so much to me. Thank you.Cheers!!

Valsa George December 17, 2024 at 4:04 AM Hi Thriveni, back to your beautiful poem to congratulate you on your win. thriveni c mysore December 17, 2024 at 9:24 PM Thank you dear friend for sweet return with sweeter compliments, Thank you very much for your blessings.Cheers!!!

Anne-Lise Andresen December 16, 2024 at 9:15 AM - Great written ... congratulations, thriveni :) - hugs thriveni c mysore December 16, 2024 at 8:28 PM Thank you dear friend for this pleasant visit and lovely words. Appreciation from you means a lot to me, thank you for today's joy. Blessings, Cheers and Hugs too

Marilene Evans December 16, 2024 at 9:01 AM Congratulations! Excellent imagery!!! Four senses working in a cold walk outside and getting in with the taste of bread to warm up. Blessings. thriveni c mysore December 16, 2024 at 8:25 PM Thank you dear friend for your sweet words. hmm humble bread it is, you got it - I am grateful to you for your blessings, Happy Holidays dear poet. Cheers!!

Reason A. Poteet December 16, 2024 at 5:22 AM nice progression, Thriveni... I like the random alliteration too. My imagination soars to fix a more concrete scenario and I settle on a difficult trip walking home enjoying various sensations and finally hunger satisfied at home. Thanks for a beautiful hexaverse. thriveni c mysore December 16, 2024 at 8:23 PM I am grateful to you for your kind visit dear poet. You just made my day by your pleasant generous words dear poet. Thank you very much, your visit is a blessing for me! Cheers.

Paul Callus December 8, 2024 at 1:46 PM I really like the staccato imagery in this diminished hexaverse, Thriveni. Well done. All the best // paul thriveni c mysore December 9, 2024 at 4:45 AM I am grateful to you for your kind words dear poet, means so much to me. Thank you for this precious visit and Blessings.

Andrea Dietrich December 6, 2024 at 10:51 PM I really like how you did this. It's such an interesting challenge for us. thriveni c mysore December 7, 2024 at 4:37 AM Interesting it is, yes dear poet. I am glad you like this poem. Thank you for your kind visit dear poet. Cheers.

Valsa George December 5, 2024 at 9:37 PM Beautifully composed. An apt entry for the contest. All the Best Thriveni... thriveni c mysore December 6, 2024 at 4:36 AM I am so grateful to you for your kind visit and words dear poet friend. Your wishes is blessings to me. Thank you. Cheers.

Sotto Poet December 5, 2024 at 5:59 AM I really like how you composed this poem with many metaphoric layers and fine wording thriveni c mysore December 6, 2024 at 4:35 AM I am honored by your visit and words dear poet. Thank you. Blessings & Cheers.