Greeny

I went a searchen for da green eyed monster
Yet da big fella was nowhere in site
They'd said he was really quite fearsum
He'd often appear on a saderday night

I went out wit my little woman
That sweet gal o mine lookin so fine
If ya asked me to give er a ratin
She'd be a ten or at least a nine

Da more dat I got inta ma drinkin
Ma senses dey became super fine
I noticed sum good lookin fella
Eyen dat special woman o mine

The vessels in ma neck started poppin
My eyes began glowin a sickly green
I got up frum ma chair started screamin
Dats right I started makin a scene

Ma little woman she was sum embarrassed 
That yung fella smashed me in da face
Tank goodness she came to ma rescue
It's a good ting she had a can a mace

It seems I'd been mad about nutin
Dat young fella had been on a date
Ma wife told me dat I'd bin right silly
She was quite sure dat his date's name was Nate

Tankfully dos green eyes dey turned back ta blue
Da colour now is gone wit out a trace
except for da red and da black an blue
dat now is coverin dis here old face


For Verlena Walker's Green Eyed Monster contest

Copyright © | Year Posted 2014



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Date: 1/3/2015 10:40:00 AM
Interesting and fantastic write on the theme of jealousy, congrats on the win, Richard
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Date: 1/3/2015 2:14:00 AM
Congrats on your fine win Richard... huggs
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Date: 1/2/2015 11:33:00 PM
RICHARD, Congratulations on your win. Awesome "Green-Eyed Monster, poem." Love LINDA
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Date: 1/2/2015 3:32:00 PM
Dropping back with my congrats Richard-) Hugs Jan xx
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Date: 1/2/2015 2:53:00 PM
As a winner of my contest, I congratulate you! Verlena
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Date: 12/17/2014 4:19:00 AM
truly very beautifully painted richard
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Date: 12/15/2014 1:28:00 PM
Loved this one! Merry Christmas from the Eastman's, Dragon, Grandpa Troll, the kids and yes... even Hubby.
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Date: 12/13/2014 1:55:00 AM
Wow dat is der best I've read....Seren
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 12/13/2014 10:45:00 AM
Thanks Seren.
Date: 12/12/2014 9:55:00 AM
This is so original and fun! Towards the middle it kind of made me think of the Hulk.
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 12/12/2014 10:03:00 AM
Ha ha, I can see that.
Date: 12/10/2014 3:22:00 PM
EXCELLENT way to do this theme. Wish I had thought of this superb idea!!
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 12/10/2014 5:09:00 PM
Thanks, it was a fun one to write.
Date: 12/10/2014 2:30:00 PM
wonderful Rick what a fantastic pen gl in contest hugs 7
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 12/10/2014 2:33:00 PM
Thanks Shadow! Hugs to you as well.
Date: 12/9/2014 10:34:00 PM
Talk about creative, this is great Richard, loved the style and the story!
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 12/10/2014 7:19:00 AM
Thanks Arthur, I'm pleased you enjoyed it.
Date: 12/9/2014 2:23:00 PM
Smart idea for a poem Richard. Your accent really helped the syllables along. Very poetic! I liked the read.
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 12/9/2014 2:59:00 PM
Thanks Trevor, I had fun with this one.
Date: 12/9/2014 1:42:00 PM
You got the lingo down pat my friend. Enjoyed this fine creation. Giving it a very solid 7 and good luck in that contest.
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 12/9/2014 3:01:00 PM
Thanks kind friend I appreciate the nice comment and the 7.
Date: 12/9/2014 10:57:00 AM
Because of my enthusiasm, it seems I forgot something: My seven!
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 12/9/2014 3:01:00 PM
Thanks, the enthusiasm is greatly appreciated. ;0).
Date: 12/9/2014 10:29:00 AM
What a hilarious story! What a fantastic language! What a marvel of a poem! I loved it from the first to the last phoneme! Extraordinary! I seldom am so enthusiastic about a poem but this one this is it to be! A seven times seven! I think it should win, without second thoughts! Bravo, Richard!
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Date: 12/9/2014 9:20:00 AM
Ever so funny!! Glad your english is up to snuff. Hope it is a winner. See you in a couple of days love Mom
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 12/9/2014 3:03:00 PM
I was waiting to get an email with all the corrections. I'm sure you ave yer werk cut out fer ya wit dis wun.
Date: 12/9/2014 5:19:00 AM
Richard, Looks like you got the winning poem here for Verlena's contest!! (I likes dat' kin' of englis' writin' and projectin' wat youse dinks!!) This one's a keeper for me, that is, A FAV!! And a 7+++++!! Good Luck in the Contest!! Best Always, Gary (P.S. I really like Greeny's English!!)
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 12/9/2014 7:51:00 AM
Thanks Gary!
Date: 12/8/2014 10:33:00 PM
Your charm and wit shine brightly in this tale -- duck next time.
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 12/9/2014 7:52:00 AM
Thanks David.
Date: 12/8/2014 7:52:00 PM
Greeny is a goody. I'm sure Greeny will have better luck in the contest then he does out on the town.
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 12/8/2014 8:18:00 PM
Here's hoping you are right. Thanks David.
Date: 12/8/2014 5:58:00 PM
: )Hilarious..I really enjoyed your takeon on this.Very entertaining.I have an ice-pack which can come un handy next time : ).Great story Richard!Charma.
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 12/8/2014 8:19:00 PM
Thanks Charmaine, it is finished now if you would like to give it another look.
Date: 12/8/2014 5:34:00 PM
made me smile Richard:-) Hugs jan xx
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 12/8/2014 8:21:00 PM
Thanks Jan, have another look it is now finished.
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