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Green With Envy

Barefoot as I walked on the beach As a flash of light came from the east It drew a fading line in the night sky As I ran towards it as if I could fly Several months before the rush of August It came to me like an unlikely comet Just like I dreamed it would be Out of my reach, across the sea Oh lustrous fallen star I wanna be where you are Ditch my life and live in the shade Of this heavenly mark you have made Relinquish all my hopes and dreams Risk it all on one of my wild schemes Build sand castles in a crater by the sea 'Till the tide washes it away and face turns green Wasn't aware of how hungry I'd become Or that my legs would tire so fast and start to numb All night searching for the comet that had fell Looked back at my distant home and bid it farewell It was pass the break of dawn, my breath was cold I followed my compass and watched the day unfold With sores on my feet I bottled all my determination With passion I clinged to my ever-growing imagination Oh lustrous fallen star I wanna be where you are Ditch my life and live in the shade Of this heavenly mark you have made Relinquish all my hopes and dreams Risk it all on one of my wild schemes Build sand castles in a crater by the sea 'Till the tide washes it away and face turns green But it wasn't meant to be ~ life of a fallen star and me You were a glint of light in my wildest dreams But it wasn't meant to be ~ just another wave in the sea Driven by the moon, draws me in just to turn me green Green with envy For the Star Contest Hosted by POETESS DARKLY

Copyright © | Year Posted 2013




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Date: 4/27/2013 10:56:00 PM
This is superb. These two lines caught my breath....Ditch my life and live in the shade/ Of this heavenly mark you have made. Awesome! I love all things celestial! :) BTW...just a pointer...It's cling....clang...clung. ;) I answered your response on A Bit Naive...also on my poem...the kiss of dawn....my favorite time of the day! Pure bliss! :)
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Timothy Hicks
Date: 4/28/2013 9:05:00 AM
I figured you would enjoy this one... with all it's "celestial-ness"... lol. It's pretty crazy how many different conversations we are having all at once!
Date: 4/27/2013 11:25:00 AM
- Timothy ...... what is a quality poem (?) .... just like this I think! - A poem that you can be proud of, whether it will win or not - (Then must "judge" be blind, green and toothless ..... kidding) - Have a great weekend. - oxox / / Anne-Lise :))
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Timothy Hicks
Date: 4/27/2013 1:30:00 PM
Green and toothless... never heard that expression before... haha! You are such a likable person Anne!
Date: 4/27/2013 7:27:00 AM
I see a Golden star beside your name for this one. A sure winner. This is well expressed.
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Timothy Hicks
Date: 4/27/2013 1:29:00 PM
I am humbled by your words. This one was really fun to write, for I didn't really know where it was headed...
Date: 4/27/2013 4:11:00 AM
Beautiful imagery of sea and sky. I really enjoyed reading this exceptional gathering of words. Keep 'wishing upon that star'
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Timothy Hicks
Date: 4/27/2013 1:28:00 PM
Thanks again Kim... your comments always brighten my day.
Date: 4/27/2013 4:08:00 AM
Hope this does well in the contest Tim. Tae care, Richard
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Timothy Hicks
Date: 4/27/2013 1:28:00 PM
Thanks Richard!

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