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Poetic Form: Alliteration

Inspired: 2023 September 28

*2nd Place*
Gnarled, Graceful, Green Words
Contest Judged: 2023 October 03
Sponsored by: Constance La France

Stanzas/Vowel Sound/Syllables/Rhyme Scheme

1st: "I" - 10, 10, 10 - a,a,a
2nd; "E" - 5, 5, 6, 5, 5, 6 - b,b,c,b,b,c
3rd: "A" - 6, 5, 6, 5 - d,e,d,e
4th: "E" - 4, 4, 5, 4, 4, 5 - f,f,g,h,h,g
5th: "O" - 4, 3, 4, 3, 4, 3, 4, 3, 4, 3, 4, 3 - i,j,k,k,l,l,l,l,l,m,m,m
6th: "E" - 7, 7, 7, 7 - n,n,o,o
7th: "U" - 5, 5, 2, 5, 5, 2, - p,p,q,r,r,q
8th: "E" - 8, 8 - s,s

Image: Green Japan by Giphy

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Ivory pilots night's idyllic sighs, like timely climbing sky--untying cries, lights espying irises gliding rise. Evening lean sleeping, beacon competing, concedes pleasing keen scenes, appealing leaping, sincere esteeming, green treat sweetly redeems. Trailing rays draping shapes, maple framing trace, claiming plains facing lakes, bravely wades gauged space. Green fields teasing, --thieving seething, weeds beseech release, feel they cheated, leaves defeated, ease sense peaceful wreaths. Yellow roses, showy floats, potato groves, grown rows notes, tomatoes hold, closely wove, flowering show, sloping globe, drove lonesome road, banjo tone, broken myPhone, coasting home. Reeling breezes freely sweep ... weakened peels, eternal sleep ... green trees reach needed relief, complete healing frees fig leaf. Humans muse Cupid, blew flutes, spooking unicorns, smooth tunes moody blooms, grew blue, jewel unique forms. Severe events fleecing green dreams, precede teaching seeding extremes.

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Constance La France

Date: 10/8/2023 11:44:00 PM

Hilo, wonderful poem and congratulations on your win in my contest, Constance

Hilo Poet
Date: 10/9/2023 1:52:00 PM

Aloha, Constance! I welcome your thought-filled sharing and am pleased to have been part of your contest my friend! Mahalo, William

Karen Jones

Date: 10/5/2023 10:23:00 AM

Congratulations on your win!

Hilo Poet
Date: 10/5/2023 10:30:00 AM

A kind thank you, Karen, Aloha, William

Anisha Dutta

Date: 9/28/2023 11:14:00 PM

Evening lean sleeping....... Green field teasing thieving seething...... Reeling breezes freely sweep... So well chosen words , phonetic...... With amazing picture. Have Great Days.

Hilo Poet
Date: 9/29/2023 10:27:00 AM

Namaste, Anisha! I am blessed by your graceful nature of my noted phrases my friend. Mahalo, William

Ink Empress

Date: 9/28/2023 10:49:00 AM

This is very creative how you’ve written this poem, i love the wordplay and imagery and flow of this. Especially the ending really a good out for me. Very unique and refreshing to read such beautiful lyrical lines, that are captivating. “ jewel unique forms” “Healing frees fig leaf” brilliant. Loves this.

Hilo Poet
Date: 9/29/2023 10:09:00 AM

Aloha, Ink Empress! I extend my courtesies for your mindful expressions ... you honor me with your welcoming presence my friend. Mahalo, William