Richard Lamoureux Poet Rhyme

Greater Consciousness

I dripped between the cracks 
Of my own convoluted mind
fearful and excited at the same time
Wandering in the small large spaces
Wondering what I might find
Searching for sharp barbed tiny bits
Those unreconciled  "it's"
All the things I thought were the pits
The words that made me feel like the shits
You may try and see
the me 
the he 
the one who wants to be
More filled 
Less empty
Fully engaged and free
More noteworthy 
A symphony 
Less occupied 
More open and kind
Instead my thinking and blinking never quits
Why do I spend so much time doing this
While others seem so contented in their bliss
I sit in a black ink colored shadows
instead of enjoying my lover's kiss
Looking for the unknown underlined 
Intertwined with the unkind
The visions of one metaphorically blind
caught behind
The veil of my mind
The answers
The Consciousness I was seeking
Words I am unable to keep speaking
Yet now I've begun being 
Now I'm truly seeing
It's within God that I'm breathing
No longer seething 
My heart is calmed
He slows down it's beating
Light within my tiny big spaces
No more sadness
He removes all traces
I now see forever
My mind no longer races
I travel in peace to inner places....

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Debbie Guzzi September 21, 2015 at 2:40 PM So nice to read your verse this afternoon, Richard. Light & Love

Skat A September 4, 2015 at 6:11 PM Richard, Congratulations on your win.... SKAT Richard Lamoureux September 5, 2015 at 9:05 AM Thanks SKAT

Fariq Yusoff September 2, 2015 at 11:54 AM Beautifully written.... Congratulations! Richard Lamoureux September 5, 2015 at 9:05 AM Thanks Fariq.

Dr. Upma A. Sharma September 1, 2015 at 1:59 AM Wonderful write and a superb win Richard! Big congrats! Richard Lamoureux September 1, 2015 at 8:31 AM Thanks Upma.

Eileen Manassian August 31, 2015 at 7:13 PM Congrats, my dear, on your first place win. Fantastic. So proud of you.... Richard Lamoureux September 1, 2015 at 8:31 AM Hi Eileen, thanks for the congrats. I'm pleased this was chosen.

Eve Roper August 31, 2015 at 5:42 PM A lot of emotion all funneling to one objection, “God”. Wonderful write, Rick, a 7 and congratulations on your win. Hugs, Eve

Anu Nayak August 31, 2015 at 1:30 AM dear Richard, wow!!!!! this is the greater consciousness touching the real streaks of enlightenment....the experience of the highest order! hearty congrats on your great win!!! awesome:).......love, Anu:)

David Fisher August 30, 2015 at 1:02 PM This was such a great read...entertained for the whole ride. Way to go on the contest! Richard Lamoureux August 30, 2015 at 1:33 PM Thanks David.

Carrie Richards August 30, 2015 at 12:04 PM What a insightful, introspective poem this is, Richard! Well deserved win !!! congratulations!! Sorry, if my comment slipped up or down a notch !! But thank you so much for reading my own and the nice comment !! Richard Lamoureux August 30, 2015 at 12:06 PM My pleasure Carrie. Richard Lamoureux August 30, 2015 at 12:05 PM I think you have me confused with another poet. This is Richard. I am however pleased that you enjoyed my poem.

Kp Nunez August 27, 2015 at 1:03 PM Once again, you've given honor where honor is due. I just know He will also honor you. Awesome perspective, Rick. PS. Sorry for late comments, as you can see, I'm still playing catch up. hugs!

James Peranteau August 25, 2015 at 9:32 PM Ooooch....with this tetimonial dear poet, don't ya go read'n my last write....*sm...great write Richard....have a blessed day sir...much love, james Richard Lamoureux August 26, 2015 at 7:31 AM Much appreciated James, you as well.

Cecilia Macfarlane August 25, 2015 at 8:44 PM Richard, I enjoyed immensely this journey through your mind and the awareness that you found. You rock! Hugs Richard Lamoureux August 26, 2015 at 7:32 AM Thanks sweet Cecilia!

Demetrios Trifiatis August 25, 2015 at 8:31 AM Your "Thesis" dear, Richard a masterpiece of self knowledge and of inner light. At the core of our being the spark of wisdom waits for that moment for to ignite our being and set it aflame becoming thus a part of greater consciousness! An insult just to grade you with a seven. An A+ would be more appropriate! Richard Lamoureux August 25, 2015 at 8:41 AM You are kind Demetrios.

Rob Carmack August 25, 2015 at 12:43 AM Great progression in this poem Richard. Richard Lamoureux August 25, 2015 at 7:47 AM Thanks Rob.

Sandra Haight August 24, 2015 at 1:11 PM Wonderful, Richard. I thoroughly enjoyed your words that image the painful journey to your amazing God-loving greater consciousness and peace from beginning to end. Best wishes -- yours is right on for this contest! Sandra Richard Lamoureux August 25, 2015 at 7:49 AM Thanks Sandra, I'm pleased you enjoyed this piece.

Emile Pinet August 24, 2015 at 11:42 AM Your playful manipulation of words is witty and clever. You have a solid sense of meter and have all the technical knowledge to pull this off seamlessly....but you go beyond technique and pour your heart into your work. Well done. Emile. #7 Richard Lamoureux August 25, 2015 at 7:50 AM I wasn't sure where I was going until I got to the end. Thanks for this great comment Emile.

Andrea Dietrich August 23, 2015 at 6:45 PM wow, I love how you attempted this challenge. You brought it home, A home run for greater consciousness. Very nice poetry. It almost flows like free verse with the shorter lines! Richard Lamoureux August 23, 2015 at 9:08 PM Yes, I do tend to move into rhyming with many of my free verse, with this one I just started sooner. I'm glad you like it Andrea.

Laura Leiser August 23, 2015 at 3:36 PM Your poem touches the emotions of being so very well, Richard. And that only God can bring peace and meaning to life, well done! Richard Lamoureux August 23, 2015 at 3:55 PM Thanks Laura, He is definitely my source of peace.

Eileen Manassian August 23, 2015 at 3:12 PM :) Again....a testament to your faith, Richard. Thank you for reminding me of the journey. Soupmail Richard Lamoureux August 23, 2015 at 3:56 PM Thanks for the heads up, I have made the changes. Hugs Rick.

Wilma Neels August 23, 2015 at 10:16 AM Those comforting thoughts He brings to our lives and the perfect timing thereof.. I love this Richard ;) Richard Lamoureux August 23, 2015 at 3:57 PM God is truly good! Thanks Wilma.