Home » Poems » Richard Lamoureux » Greater Consciousness

Greater Consciousness

I dripped between the cracks 
Of my own convoluted mind
fearful and excited at the same time
Wandering in the small large spaces
Wondering what I might find
Searching for sharp barbed tiny bits
Those unreconciled  "it's"
All the things I thought were the pits
The words that made me feel like the shits
You may try and see
the me 
the he 
the one who wants to be
More filled 
Less empty
Fully engaged and free
More noteworthy 
A symphony 
Less occupied 
More open and kind
Instead my thinking and blinking never quits
Why do I spend so much time doing this
While others seem so contented in their bliss
I sit in a black ink colored shadows
instead of enjoying my lover's kiss
Looking for the unknown underlined 
Intertwined with the unkind
The visions of one metaphorically blind
caught behind
The veil of my mind
The answers
The Consciousness I was seeking
Words I am unable to keep speaking
Yet now I've begun being 
Now I'm truly seeing
It's within God that I'm breathing
No longer seething 
My heart is calmed
He slows down it's beating
Light within my tiny big spaces
No more sadness
He removes all traces
I now see forever
My mind no longer races
I travel in peace to inner places....

Post Comments

Poetrysoup is an environment of encouragement and growth so only provide specific positive comments that indicate what you appreciate about the poem. Negative comments will result your account being banned.

Please Login to post a comment

Debbie Guzzi

Date: 9/21/2015 2:40:00 PM

So nice to read your verse this afternoon, Richard. Light & Love

Skat A

Date: 9/4/2015 6:11:00 PM

Richard, Congratulations on your win.... SKAT

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 9/5/2015 9:05:00 AM

Thanks SKAT

Fariq Yusoff

Date: 9/2/2015 11:54:00 AM

Beautifully written.... Congratulations!

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 9/5/2015 9:05:00 AM

Thanks Fariq.

Dr. Upma A. Sharma

Date: 9/1/2015 1:59:00 AM

Wonderful write and a superb win Richard! Big congrats!

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 9/1/2015 8:31:00 AM

Thanks Upma.

Eileen Manassian

Date: 8/31/2015 7:13:00 PM

Congrats, my dear, on your first place win. Fantastic. So proud of you....

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 9/1/2015 8:31:00 AM

Hi Eileen, thanks for the congrats. I'm pleased this was chosen.

Eve Roper

Date: 8/31/2015 5:42:00 PM

A lot of emotion all funneling to one objection, “God”. Wonderful write, Rick, a 7 and congratulations on your win. Hugs, Eve

Anu Nayak

Date: 8/31/2015 1:30:00 AM

dear Richard, wow!!!!! this is the greater consciousness touching the real streaks of enlightenment....the experience of the highest order! hearty congrats on your great win!!! awesome:).......love, Anu:)

David Fisher

Date: 8/30/2015 1:02:00 PM

This was such a great read...entertained for the whole ride. Way to go on the contest!

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 8/30/2015 1:33:00 PM

Thanks David.

Carrie Richards

Date: 8/30/2015 12:04:00 PM

What a insightful, introspective poem this is, Richard! Well deserved win !!! congratulations!! Sorry, if my comment slipped up or down a notch !! But thank you so much for reading my own and the nice comment !!

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 8/30/2015 12:06:00 PM

My pleasure Carrie.

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 8/30/2015 12:05:00 PM

I think you have me confused with another poet. This is Richard. I am however pleased that you enjoyed my poem.

Kp Nunez

Date: 8/27/2015 1:03:00 PM

Once again, you've given honor where honor is due. I just know He will also honor you. Awesome perspective, Rick. PS. Sorry for late comments, as you can see, I'm still playing catch up. hugs!

James Peranteau

Date: 8/25/2015 9:32:00 PM

Ooooch....with this tetimonial dear poet, don't ya go read'n my last write....*sm...great write Richard....have a blessed day sir...much love, james

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 8/26/2015 7:31:00 AM

Much appreciated James, you as well.

Cecilia Macfarlane

Date: 8/25/2015 8:44:00 PM

Richard, I enjoyed immensely this journey through your mind and the awareness that you found. You rock! Hugs

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 8/26/2015 7:32:00 AM

Thanks sweet Cecilia!

Demetrios Trifiatis

Date: 8/25/2015 8:31:00 AM

Your "Thesis" dear, Richard a masterpiece of self knowledge and of inner light. At the core of our being the spark of wisdom waits for that moment for to ignite our being and set it aflame becoming thus a part of greater consciousness! An insult just to grade you with a seven. An A+ would be more appropriate!

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 8/25/2015 8:41:00 AM

You are kind Demetrios.

Rob Carmack

Date: 8/25/2015 12:43:00 AM

Great progression in this poem Richard.

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 8/25/2015 7:47:00 AM

Thanks Rob.

Sandra Haight

Date: 8/24/2015 1:11:00 PM

Wonderful, Richard. I thoroughly enjoyed your words that image the painful journey to your amazing God-loving greater consciousness and peace from beginning to end. Best wishes -- yours is right on for this contest! Sandra

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 8/25/2015 7:49:00 AM

Thanks Sandra, I'm pleased you enjoyed this piece.

Emile Pinet

Date: 8/24/2015 11:42:00 AM

Your playful manipulation of words is witty and clever. You have a solid sense of meter and have all the technical knowledge to pull this off seamlessly....but you go beyond technique and pour your heart into your work. Well done. Emile. #7

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 8/25/2015 7:50:00 AM

I wasn't sure where I was going until I got to the end. Thanks for this great comment Emile.

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 8/23/2015 6:45:00 PM

wow, I love how you attempted this challenge. You brought it home, A home run for greater consciousness. Very nice poetry. It almost flows like free verse with the shorter lines!

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 8/23/2015 9:08:00 PM

Yes, I do tend to move into rhyming with many of my free verse, with this one I just started sooner. I'm glad you like it Andrea.