Graveyard Scene - Six Words

Derelict tombstones lying at death’s door. Contest: Six words Sponsor: John Lawless 02~22~16
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A   Avatar
February 26, 2016 at 11:55 AM
thank you for the nice reply. LINDA
Cheema Avatar
February 25, 2016 at 10:46 AM
A deep write! Congrats on your placement, Jan!
Allison Avatar
February 25, 2016 at 12:52 PM
Thanks so much Balveen:-) hugs Jan xx
Sage Avatar
February 25, 2016 at 7:36 AM
that's a great write with just six words...congrats
Allison Avatar
February 25, 2016 at 12:52 PM
Thanks so much White Sage:-) hugs Jan xx
A. Sharma Avatar
February 25, 2016 at 1:27 AM
Congrats on ur awesome win Jan.. powerful six words.
Allison Avatar
February 25, 2016 at 3:38 AM
Thanks so much for dropping by I do appreciate your support Dr Sharma:-) hugs jan xx
May Avatar
February 24, 2016 at 2:43 PM
Powerful line Jan...Congrats on your win
Allison Avatar
February 24, 2016 at 3:05 PM
Thanks Joseph:-) hugs Jan xx
Gentry Avatar
February 24, 2016 at 1:32 PM
Congratulations on your win! Excellent!
Allison Avatar
February 24, 2016 at 1:59 PM
Many thanks Susan:-) hugs Jan xx
Haight Avatar
February 24, 2016 at 12:35 PM
Jan, congratulations on your win! Hugs, Sandra
Allison Avatar
February 24, 2016 at 2:00 PM
Many thanks Sandra:-) hugs Jan xx
La France Avatar
February 24, 2016 at 11:27 AM
Jan, such depth and darkness in six words, quite wonderful, dear friend ~
Allison Avatar
February 24, 2016 at 2:00 PM
Many thanks Broken Wings:-) hugs Jan xx
Hicks Avatar
February 24, 2016 at 12:54 AM
Quite the play on words, Jan. What a turn in mood from your adorable grook I read last time ... perhaps poets are notorious for mood swings ;) In any case, congrats on your placement in the contest! I wrote mine a day too late ... was surprised by how quickly it filled up!
Allison Avatar
February 24, 2016 at 2:02 PM
My muse is like a temperamental teenager I never know what she will come out with next - I loved the challenge her and there is still humour here in the end of the poem:-) These contests fill so quickly I am pleased I placed so well:-) hugs Jan xx
A   Avatar
February 23, 2016 at 5:10 PM
Jan, Congrats on your "SIX WORD win." LINDA
Allison Avatar
February 24, 2016 at 2:02 PM
Many thanks Linda:-) hugs Jan xx
Dietrich Avatar
February 23, 2016 at 4:02 PM
congrats, my friend. Clever and funny!
Allison Avatar
February 24, 2016 at 2:02 PM
I went for dark yet with some humour here Andrea:-) hugs jan xx
Roper Avatar
February 23, 2016 at 12:38 PM
Back to congratulate you!!!! Hugs Eve
Allison Avatar
February 23, 2016 at 3:40 PM
Thanks so much Eve:-) hugs Jan xx
Devnath  Avatar
February 23, 2016 at 12:31 PM
Congrats on your win my lovely friend, bl
Allison Avatar
February 23, 2016 at 3:40 PM
Thanks so much BL:-) hugs Jan xx
Boddie Avatar
February 23, 2016 at 12:27 PM
this is so profound and I really like the sound of this gem I just found....jan, the soup is lucky to have you around....;)
Allison Avatar
February 23, 2016 at 3:40 PM
Thanks so much Eric:-) hugs Jan xx
Callus Avatar
February 23, 2016 at 12:11 PM
Top marks for these winning six lines, Jan! One of the best I have read so far! Congratulations:) hugs // paul
Allison Avatar
February 23, 2016 at 12:16 PM
I got a 4th place Paul:-) Hugs Jan xx
Crisci Avatar
February 23, 2016 at 12:02 PM
Greetings, Jan. Congratulations on your deserving win in John Lawless' contest. Humor is part of life and we also see in your Six Words...they are words of wisdom and awareness coming from your beautiful soul. Thank you for your kind comments. Have a terrific Tuesday. Hugs, Andrew.
Allison Avatar
February 23, 2016 at 12:17 PM
Thanks Andrew - there was a degree of humour in the poem but I am not sure everyone saw is a dark but also humourous write:-) hugs Jan xx
Mcdonnell  Avatar
February 23, 2016 at 11:07 AM
Nice
Allison Avatar
February 23, 2016 at 12:17 PM
Thanks Karl:-) hugs jan xx
Roper Avatar
February 22, 2016 at 9:11 PM
Great! Good luck in the contest!
Allison Avatar
February 23, 2016 at 12:18 PM
Thanks Eve:-) hugs Jan xx
Dietrich Avatar
February 22, 2016 at 4:04 PM
I reallyl like this, Jan. Hope you score!
Allison Avatar
February 22, 2016 at 4:23 PM
Thanks Andrea - I did actually go for humour here too with the gravestones lying at 'death's door' lol maybe its my British humour and few will 'get' it lol:-) hugs Jan xx
Vaso Avatar
February 22, 2016 at 3:45 PM
Welcome to the dark side :)
Allison Avatar
February 22, 2016 at 3:47 PM
ha ha ha I thought if I can't beat you I'd join you lol:-) hugs Jan xx
Leiser Avatar
February 22, 2016 at 3:39 PM
Great description in a few words, Jan. Great write :)
Allison Avatar
February 22, 2016 at 3:43 PM
Thanks so much Laura:-) hugs Jan xx
Andresen Avatar
February 22, 2016 at 1:57 PM
- Deep and well done, Jan ! - Luck in contest - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
Allison Avatar
February 22, 2016 at 2:00 PM
Thanks Anne Lise it is actually quite a challenge i have so many 'one liners' whizzing round my head it is difficult to know which one to choose!:-) hugs Jan xx
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