Premiere Contest WinnerGoodbye, My Love

After the snowfall but before the lily blossoms, you were this woman who left by choice. All natural decisions made from a place of despair. Darkness consumed you as you fell into an addiction with expressions of deep sorrow and remorse. step by step by step, taking steps- foot by foot by foot... Slower than a run, yet faster than a turtle, closer and closer towards your oblivion. Into mysterious unconsciousness I whispered... "goodbye, my love"...as you walked away. After the spring but before the leaves, I found you drained of energy. Completely exhausted into nothingness, and through it all, you still loved me. Seems like yesterday we walked side by side; you me the gentle breeze- You need not ask for forgiveness, sweetheart, it has been granted long ago, and before you were gone I already whispered... “goodbye, my love"...as you walked away. After the sun but before the rain, you tore out the pages from your favorite book. You wrote it at such a tender age. Too young to understand, yet too old to make believe. Big brown eyes, wearing a ball cap on your head. Smiling while hiding and running while crying. I couldn't handle this defeated hopelessness you wore on your sleeves with patches sewn on to cover up the burn holes... I sit at your grave once again. No tears, no laughter, no guilt- I stood up and whispered... "GOODBYE, MY LOVE"...as I walked away. I wrote this during a difficult grieving time in my life. It had been almost 6 years since my sister took her life. She was always saying goodbye, and it was finally time for me to say goodbye and let go of the guilt and sorrow. There's nothing like losing someone you love to suicide. I couldn't decide which poem to enter today. My sister led me to this poem, I can feel it (that is exactly why I picked it). This was written on my 1 year anniversary here at PS. Written: September 27, 2016
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Ashley Avatar
April 6, 2019 at 8:41 AM
Laura, the sadness of your heartbreaking poem is so beautifully presented with your incredible poetic talent and the all encompassing love of one sister for the other. Congratulations on your excellent win. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan
Scars Avatar
October 11, 2019 at 7:12 AM
thank you sweet Susan, so sorry for late response! :)-luloo
Roper Avatar
April 3, 2019 at 9:53 PM
Beautiful imagery and well written, Laura , congratulations on your win. Hugs Eve ~`*
Scars Avatar
October 11, 2019 at 7:12 AM
thank you sweet lady! Sorry for late response :)-luloo
Hamilton Avatar
July 15, 2017 at 3:26 PM
Terribly sad, but I remember this winning once or twice before, congrats again, even with the very best poets competing with their best writes this still shines, a worthy placement, and I think also your best!
Scars Avatar
October 11, 2019 at 7:11 AM
awww I am sooo sorry for the late response, better than never! Thank you dear John for all your inspiration and kind words throughout the last 4 years here. You are the best :)-luloo
Rodrigues Avatar
July 15, 2017 at 7:30 AM
A big hug... A beautiful expression of love and forgiveness, sweet Luloo! Congrats on your most deserved win!
Scars Avatar
October 11, 2019 at 7:10 AM
thank you sweet Kim! Sorry for late response :)-luloo
Barden Avatar
July 15, 2017 at 7:07 AM
So pleased to find out this was yours, Laura Loo, as I just adored the exquisite phrasing and heart-wrenching story ... this touched my heart very deeply, and is just wonderful! Congrats on SIXTH PLACE, and thank you so much for entering my contest! :-)
Scars Avatar
October 11, 2019 at 7:10 AM
sorry for late response! THANK you so much dear Greg, sorry I never showed my gratitude, I am mad at myself for not responding to these comments, I am honored to win in your contest! thank you :)-luloo
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January 5, 2017 at 8:14 PM
Congrats on your win with this beautiful poem, Laura. I don't know how I missed this when you first posted it - I am very glad that I got the chance to read it now :)
Scars Avatar
October 11, 2019 at 7:09 AM
thank you sweet Agnes, sorry for late response :)-luloo
Capitano Avatar
December 30, 2016 at 4:03 AM
Great win for a great poem, congrats lulu. :)
Scars Avatar
October 11, 2019 at 7:09 AM
many thanks dear Phil, sorry for late response :)-luloo
Smith-Johnsen Avatar
December 29, 2016 at 6:33 PM
Wow! Heart wrenching beautifully written love. And awesome work of poetic art.
Scars Avatar
October 11, 2019 at 7:09 AM
many thanks dear Dane, sorry for late response )-luloo
Milliner Avatar
December 29, 2016 at 4:19 PM
Awesome, heartfelt write!!
Scars Avatar
October 11, 2019 at 7:08 AM
sorry for late response, thank you sweet Sarita :)-luloo
Smith Avatar
December 29, 2016 at 10:15 AM
Somehow I missed this one the first time around, my mistake. Well done LuLoo and congratulations...
Scars Avatar
October 11, 2019 at 7:08 AM
thank you dear Charlie, sorry for late response :)-luloo
Daniel Avatar
December 29, 2016 at 12:20 AM
This one is heart wrenching, Laura:) well deserved trophy win:) congratulations:) have a blessed new year ahead:)
Scars Avatar
October 11, 2019 at 7:08 AM
thank you sweet Jo! Sorry for late response :)-luloo
Rodrigues Avatar
December 28, 2016 at 7:29 AM
So beautiful, Laura! Congratulations! 7
Scars Avatar
October 11, 2019 at 7:07 AM
sorry for late response, thank you lovely Kim :)-luloo
Grasso Avatar
December 27, 2016 at 7:56 PM
So well done. Beautiful, Laura. Congratulations! ...Fran
Scars Avatar
October 11, 2019 at 7:07 AM
sorry for late response, thank you dear Fran :)-luloo
Burch Avatar
December 27, 2016 at 7:39 PM
*tear* well done Laura!! Very beautiful and deeply touching. Congrats my friend!!! Big Hugggs. Deb :)
Scars Avatar
October 11, 2019 at 7:07 AM
sorry for late response! thank you sweet Deb :)-luloo
Haight Avatar
December 27, 2016 at 7:05 PM
Laura, congratulations on your First Place Trophy win for this amazing poem. Hugs, Sandra
Scars Avatar
October 11, 2019 at 7:07 AM
many thanks once again sweet Sandra :)-luloo
Stoner Jr Avatar
December 27, 2016 at 6:37 PM
Congratulations Laura on this sterling top tier win. Well written in form and content a true success.
Scars Avatar
October 11, 2019 at 7:06 AM
thank you dear Robert, sorry for late response :)-luloo
Marcum Wong Avatar
December 27, 2016 at 5:48 PM
Congratulations on this moving poem taking top honors luloo! Have a beautiful new year! 7 ; )
Scars Avatar
October 11, 2019 at 7:06 AM
thank you!!! sorry for late response :)-luloo
Green Avatar
December 27, 2016 at 5:43 PM
Congrats Laura, this was so heart touching and affectionate. The love and missing is so evident in this piece. I can see why it took top honors in this contest.
Scars Avatar
October 11, 2019 at 7:06 AM
aww thanks dear man :)-luloo
Hamilton Avatar
December 27, 2016 at 5:10 PM
Congrats Laura on your amazing win!
Scars Avatar
October 11, 2019 at 7:05 AM
sorry for late response- thank you dear John! :)-luloo
Haight Avatar
October 5, 2016 at 8:34 PM
Laura, back again to congratulate you again for another outstanding placement for this heartfelt poem. Hugs, Sandra
Scars Avatar
October 11, 2019 at 7:05 AM
sorry for late response, thank you :)-luloo
Allison Avatar
October 5, 2016 at 7:56 AM
Dropping back with my congrats LuLoo:-) hugs jan xx
Scars Avatar
October 5, 2016 at 8:23 AM
thank you lovely Jan :)-luloo
O'Leary Avatar
October 5, 2016 at 7:23 AM
Congrats on the super win for this wonderful, poignant work!! Terry
Scars Avatar
October 5, 2016 at 8:23 AM
thank you Terry :)-luloo
May Avatar
October 4, 2016 at 9:34 PM
Congrats on your win with this heartfelt write Laura
Scars Avatar
October 5, 2016 at 8:22 AM
thank you dear Joseph :)-luloo
Rodrigues Avatar
October 4, 2016 at 6:57 PM
Lovely, Luloo! congratulations!!
Scars Avatar
October 5, 2016 at 8:22 AM
thank you sweet Kim :)-luloo
Lawless Avatar
October 4, 2016 at 5:59 PM
WELL....if ya like it the first time....then you should love it the second time. Laura, I must have read this poem a dozen times and each read revealed another dimensional layer. Glad you chose to "Drop It In" the contest and thanks for participating.
Scars Avatar
October 5, 2016 at 8:21 AM
wow John, I am so honored you liked my poem enough to find it winning worthy. Yes there are many layers to this poem and it is my all time fave poem I have written about my sister. Thanks again :)-luloo
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