Nette Onclaud Poet Sonnet

Goodbye

This summer's winding leaves a pierce behind
Charred traces of her smouldering days,
A riddling puzzle blurs clouds in her mind
When fragile heart cracks glassy tears, assailed

Somehow, this thud of fall pretends to hold
A promise, tinged with sharp crushing of bones
Where forward bites and  snaps the bitter cold,
That reels in hidden betrayals  unknown 

For with this most damn season's turn , alas
Trickery of  love disowned  in a rush,
When dusted time  counters all autumns past
She flickers higher like emblazoned brush

And every triumph over cycles’ spin
Trades wheels of goodbye for fresh beginnings.



Goodbye Contest of Nayda Ivette Negron
Pre- Written   9/28/2016

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Nayda Ivette Negron Flores September 29, 2016 at 6:53 AM Congratulations Nette on the placement of the contest. Betrayals can be the door to say goodbye before its too late.

Sunita U.D Palawon September 28, 2016 at 11:45 PM An interesting POV on goodbye theme. Like it. Congrats X]

Alexis Y. September 28, 2016 at 11:23 PM Hi Nette, Congratulations on your 2nd place win. It was well deserved: -) Alexis

Bl Devnath April 21, 2013 at 3:38 PM Running wheels of sessions by saying good bye starts another. Excellent job done. After a long gape, meeting again. Thanks...., loved always, bl

Dinda Minardi April 6, 2013 at 9:53 AM A very good write, Nette. we miss u here!!! hope you're doing well :)

Elizabeth Wesley March 17, 2013 at 3:04 PM The scent of a dying season, the echoes of lost dreams and then a fresh beginning. It seems to resonate in my mind Nette, the repetition of our relationships but each with is own story. So nice to read your thoughtful words. Love, Lizzie

Len Gasun December 26, 2012 at 10:08 AM Nette, how and where are you? Missing you so much here on the soup. Ba't ang tagal mong nawala?? Ano nang nangyari sa iyo? Hope you are doing well! Have a merry Christmas and a happy New Year my very dear friend! love and big hugs, Leonora

Cyndi Macmillan December 23, 2012 at 9:36 AM Are you alright? I no longer have the same email account and have lost your email addy! Thinking of you, hope you are well (now wondering if you are in the hospital!) please, just say hello when you can! Merry Christmas, hon, and hope you drop by soon to soup! xoxo Cyndi

Poet Destroyer A December 21, 2012 at 10:15 PM Nette, stopping by with my warmest thoughts~ my best wishes go out to you and your family. Have yourself a Merry Christmas and a very Happy New Year* Always & Forever ;-) PD

Painted Hunter December 15, 2012 at 4:16 PM Amazing as always, Nette. How are ya?...its been a while.

Cyndi Macmillan December 10, 2012 at 8:22 PM WOW! Nette what a write! I especially was moved by line 12. Hope you are well. I'm reading tonight, mostly, and finally visiting dear friends, such as you. Hope you're well. I heard that your homeland was hit by another bad storm, but I knew you were far away from the fray-- still sad to hear of once again your country being walloped by the weather and the loss of life. If you are still in touch with Nikko, do you know how she's faring? Hugs to you, Cyndi

Elizabeth Wesley December 8, 2012 at 5:46 PM Such a bittersweet good bye Nette but then so many are. A beautiful entry for the contest; best wishes luv, you always find a soft spot in my emotions. Love, Lizzie

Charmaine Chircop December 6, 2012 at 11:08 AM This really seems goodbye with s hopeful new beginning.Powerful Nette

Carol Sunshine Brown December 3, 2012 at 8:00 AM Congratulations on your super placement in Harry's "Goodbye" contest Nette. I am sorry it is late. Love, Carol

Linda-Marie Sweetheart December 2, 2012 at 12:20 AM congrats Nette luv on all your wins for majestic writes always ..

Andrea Dietrich November 29, 2012 at 5:49 PM Finally getting to some contest winners lists and glad to see you among the top ten here, Nette. BIG CONGRATS. hope your asthma is under control? Have not seen you in a while!!

Olusegun Arowolo November 27, 2012 at 2:31 PM Wonderful piece,nice presentation...Always classic..Congratulations on your superb win in this contest...you are unique,my friend ..Kudos to you...

Debbie Guzzi November 27, 2012 at 8:57 AM Just loved it nettie! here the occasional mystery of 'what?' worked well for your theme. Crongrad's on your win. Light & Love

S.Jagathsimhan Nair November 27, 2012 at 7:32 AM Congrats, friend!! Jag

Harry Horsman November 27, 2012 at 2:18 AM congrats nette for your 5th place in my goodbye sonnet contest

Mandy Tams The Golden Girl November 27, 2012 at 1:25 AM Congratulations nette, on your wonderful sonnet xx

Poet Destroyer A November 26, 2012 at 9:20 PM Nette, congratulations ;-) In Harry's "goodbye" contest.. Good night~ PD

Seren Roberts November 26, 2012 at 6:05 PM Great poem Nette, Congrats ....Seren

Harry Horsman November 26, 2012 at 4:56 PM congrats nette on your 5th place winner in my goodbye sonnet contest

Len Gasun November 25, 2012 at 6:45 AM Hi, Nette! This is another excellent poem of yours! Two thumbs up my friend! I enjoy reading this tonight. Good luck for a big win! love always, Leonora Len Gasun November 25, 2012 at 9:06 AM SM

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