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His small red car, a dent on the left rear side, is parked in our driveway, all loaded, a full tank of gas. His duffel is crammed with rock-band t-shirts, faded torn jeans, new underwear and socks, (that I insisted we buy), and that ratty old jacket with the hole in the elbow. Guitar, books, sports equipment, and cardboard boxes filling the back seat of his little sedan. On the passenger seat in front, is a battered old shoe box tied with string. Those are private letters from girlfriend, Cindy. Oh yes!...The same box, that his sister found one day, which she tucked under her arm and ran from him laughing. His long legs chased her through the house, screaming, ... "You're going to die for that!!!!" But...that was on another fall day.... A day that now seems forever ago.... While today was silently sleeping... On this sunny, autumn day, his sister is quiet, she is not laughing. He and his father share a hug and an affectionate pat on the back. I stand back, watching them, on that dreaded, concrete driveway. The trees rustle, and someone's lawnmower is humming A neighbor is driving by, as if it's just another ordinary day. I give him the care box I made...laundry soap, toothpaste, candy, energy bars, his favorite home made oatmeal cookies. Hugs, extra tight. One more, and then another..... (Hold it in!....Hold it in!....I can do this!....) "Be sure to call when you get there. Drive carefully. Love you." Love you __________________________________________ Goodbye Contest: Sponsored by Nayda Ivette Negron

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Date: 6/27/2011 7:34:00 AM
Congratulations on your win in Debbie's "Emote" contest Carrie. Love, Carol
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Date: 6/26/2011 1:46:00 AM
You have a way, Carrie of taking the reader there in the moment and feeling it all. You are a great writer. Many congrats on you SUPPER WIN. Lainie
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Date: 6/24/2011 11:27:00 PM
marvellous poetry...exctly how I have felt on several occasions........wish I could pour out my innards like you have done here......cathartic is the word i guess........accept my admiration and best wishes Carrie
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Date: 6/22/2011 8:03:00 PM
Oh shucks, one can sure feel that sadness and love, really love that line "while today is silently sleeping" says so much-- Super congrats on your win, Carrie :) hugs
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Date: 6/22/2011 3:48:00 PM
Yes I can see the emotional moment this is. LWhen your baby is leaving and things will never be the same. congratulations on your win. Love, Joyce
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Date: 6/22/2011 3:43:00 PM
You express your feelings so well in this narrative, Carrie. Love the way you try to "hold it in" but tell your son to call when he arrives safely. Wasn't sure if he was going off to school or perhaps the military, but the feelings a mother has on both occasions are sad indeed. My mom went through this when my brother joined the Navy during the Vietnam War. Congratulations on your big win! Love, Carolyn
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Date: 6/22/2011 3:41:00 PM
Congrats Carrie on another excellent win with this poem on sadness and luv.. enjoy another sweet success with luv..
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Date: 6/22/2011 2:53:00 PM
How sad..and don't all parents relate to this!! Of course I went through it when he was five LOL independant little cuz sent me HOME from Kindergarden [I was bawling!! he said "You can go home now Mommie!"] Congrad's on your big win. Light & Love
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Date: 8/20/2008 12:38:00 PM
they grow up to fast. this was a warm piece and so tender with each word. shows that a piece of you went with them.
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Date: 8/20/2008 1:20:00 AM
It is such a bittersweet experience. We are helping our son head back to college next week, as he needs two car loads. His 3rd year and now sharing an off campus place with 3 others. Still get that empty feeling for a while. Still difficult. Feel you here. Love, Shar
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Date: 8/19/2008 8:34:00 PM
Ah Carrie - Its hard isn't it - Our son went to collage for one semester and then he decided to join the Army - Now he is in Iraq and I sure do miss him - We talked Sunday - Very heartwarming poem about a difficult time in our lives and a very exciting time in theirs - God Bless you Carrie
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