Caryl Ramsdale Poet Tanka

Good Bye

Mutely, tearfully
Swallowed up, submerged in grief
Remembering calls
You may leave us a message—
At the sound of the tone please…



Caryl Ramsdale
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Tanka Poetry Form

September 10, 2011

~* Please pray for those left behind on that fateful day, September 11, 2001. *~
My "heartfelt condolences" to the brave families of 911.

“Remembering 9/11” poetry contest sponsored by Carolyn Devonshire

~1st Place~
9/14/2011

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Judy Ball October 9, 2011 at 10:02 AM WoW! I cnn feel the total rejection in this. A good write. God Bless, JB

Constance La France September 18, 2011 at 11:08 AM What a deserving first place, just an amazing write, sadly beautiful.. and thanks for your ever comments and support of my poetry~~ Caryl Ramsdale September 19, 2011 at 10:02 AM Thanks for the congratulations Constance. Your comments are always appreciated my friend. CR

Susan Buchel September 17, 2011 at 9:48 AM You've said it all in just a few lines - others have taken hundreds of pages.... Caryl Ramsdale September 19, 2011 at 10:06 AM Susan, the 911 phone calls that aired nailed me to the wall. It was heart wrenching for me. I appreciate your comment. CR

Robert A. Dufresne September 17, 2011 at 8:25 AM congratulations to you on the personal way you brought this one home to the heart, Caryl. Caryl Ramsdale September 19, 2011 at 10:07 AM Thanks for stopping by to read and congratulate Robert. I appreciate! CR

Fabiyas M V September 17, 2011 at 6:07 AM It's a gem with a message,Caryl.You are Aversatile writer.LUV.FABIYAS M V Caryl Ramsdale September 19, 2011 at 10:08 AM Fabiyas, I always appreciate and look forward to your critiquing comments. Thanks again. CR

Jack Horne September 16, 2011 at 1:59 PM This really is a beauty, Caryl Caryl Ramsdale September 19, 2011 at 10:10 AM Thanks Jack. You create and leave behind some pretty good ones yourself. Have a great day my friend. CR

Andrea Dietrich September 15, 2011 at 10:26 PM CAryl, Congratulations on your well deserved win! Caryl Ramsdale September 19, 2011 at 10:11 AM Thanks Andrea! CR

Gwendolen Song September 15, 2011 at 5:39 PM Paralyzed in fear and speechless...oh yes, this is awesome, Caryl. I also love the 4th line that makes it ultrapersonal. Congrats to u, Gwendolen Caryl Ramsdale September 19, 2011 at 10:13 AM Thanks for stopping by to read and comment my friend. I do appreciate. CR

Michael J. Falotico September 15, 2011 at 5:26 PM A touching write that deserves to be on top... always Michael Caryl Ramsdale September 19, 2011 at 10:14 AM Michael...thank you sir! I appreciate your comments and congratulatory remarks. Have a great day my friend. CR

Jack Horne September 15, 2011 at 3:49 PM Very moving piece. Many congratulations to you, Caryl : ) Caryl Ramsdale September 19, 2011 at 10:14 AM Thanks Jack! CR

Black Eyed Susan September 15, 2011 at 12:47 PM so much grief. I like how you made something so routine as answering the phone, mean so much. congratulations on your win :) Caryl Ramsdale September 19, 2011 at 10:15 AM Thank you Susan! CR

Bob Quigley September 15, 2011 at 10:58 AM Nicely said. Congratulations on your 1st place win Caryl Caryl Ramsdale September 19, 2011 at 10:16 AM Thanks for stopping by Bob. Your encouragement is greatly appreciated. CR

Sara Kendrick September 15, 2011 at 10:11 AM Very expressive work..Enjoyed..Congrats..Sara Caryl Ramsdale September 19, 2011 at 10:16 AM Thanks my friend. CR

Lee Ramage September 15, 2011 at 12:06 AM Oh, this brings goosebumps. Well done, congratulations on this poem. You honour them well. Lee Caryl Ramsdale September 19, 2011 at 10:17 AM Thanks for the congratulations...your remarks are appreciated my friend. CR

Nette Onclaud September 15, 2011 at 12:03 AM so well expressed; no wonder it's tops, caryl..sunniest congrats on your special win :) huggs

Iolanda Scripca September 14, 2011 at 8:31 PM Those last messages, those voices beyond graves...very emotional. Congratulations on your top win. Best, iolanda Caryl Ramsdale September 19, 2011 at 10:19 AM Iolanda, thank you for your encouraging comments. CR

Kim Merryman September 14, 2011 at 8:20 PM Congrats on your win, Caryl! Kim Caryl Ramsdale September 19, 2011 at 10:20 AM Thanks! CR

Dr.Ram Mehta September 14, 2011 at 8:11 PM Congratulations on the first place win in the contest of Carolyn, Caryl Caryl Ramsdale September 19, 2011 at 10:18 AM Thank you for taking the time to congratulate! Your words are always an encouragement my friend. CR

Olusegun Arowolo September 14, 2011 at 6:24 PM Fine master piece,Caryl.Congratulations on your well deserved win...may God continue to guide and protect those left behind....

Carrie Richards September 14, 2011 at 4:56 PM The sound of those messages.....chilling and profoundly unforgettable. This poem is so stirring with emotion...excellent!

Linda-Marie Sweetheart September 14, 2011 at 3:39 PM Congrats Caryl on a fantastic first place win luv..

Debbie Guzzi September 14, 2011 at 2:46 PM yes SO fast..loved one could not grasp the happening or the dead their deaths..Congrad's light & love

David Williams September 14, 2011 at 2:46 PM hey Caryl congrats on your win..David

Joyce Johnson September 14, 2011 at 2:41 PM Yes, those unanswered phone calls...for so long. congratulations on a wonderful entry and win. Love, Joyce

John Freeman September 14, 2011 at 2:39 PM Captures the scene perfectly Caryl. Congratulations on your worthy first place. Agape, Moses

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