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Good Bye

Mutely, tearfully
Swallowed up, submerged in grief
Remembering calls
You may leave us a message—
At the sound of the tone please…



Caryl Ramsdale
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Tanka Poetry Form

September 10, 2011

~* Please pray for those left behind on that fateful day, September 11, 2001. *~
My "heartfelt condolences" to the brave families of 911.

“Remembering 9/11” poetry contest sponsored by Carolyn Devonshire

~1st Place~
9/14/2011

Copyright © Caryl Ramsdale | Year Posted 2011

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Judy Ball Date: 10/9/2011 10:02:00 AM WoW! I cnn feel the total rejection in this. A good write. God Bless, JB Login to Reply

Constance La France Date: 9/18/2011 11:08:00 AM What a deserving first place, just an amazing write, sadly beautiful.. and thanks for your ever comments and support of my poetry~~ Login to Reply Caryl Ramsdale Date: 9/19/2011 10:02:00 AM Thanks for the congratulations Constance. Your comments are always appreciated my friend. CR

Susan Buchel Date: 9/17/2011 9:48:00 AM You've said it all in just a few lines - others have taken hundreds of pages.... Login to Reply Caryl Ramsdale Date: 9/19/2011 10:06:00 AM Susan, the 911 phone calls that aired nailed me to the wall. It was heart wrenching for me. I appreciate your comment. CR

Robert A. Dufresne Date: 9/17/2011 8:25:00 AM congratulations to you on the personal way you brought this one home to the heart, Caryl. Login to Reply Caryl Ramsdale Date: 9/19/2011 10:07:00 AM Thanks for stopping by to read and congratulate Robert. I appreciate! CR

Fabiyas M V Date: 9/17/2011 6:07:00 AM It's a gem with a message,Caryl.You are Aversatile writer.LUV.FABIYAS M V Login to Reply Caryl Ramsdale Date: 9/19/2011 10:08:00 AM Fabiyas, I always appreciate and look forward to your critiquing comments. Thanks again. CR

Jack Horne Date: 9/16/2011 1:59:00 PM This really is a beauty, Caryl Login to Reply Caryl Ramsdale Date: 9/19/2011 10:10:00 AM Thanks Jack. You create and leave behind some pretty good ones yourself. Have a great day my friend. CR

Andrea Dietrich Date: 9/15/2011 10:26:00 PM CAryl, Congratulations on your well deserved win! Login to Reply Caryl Ramsdale Date: 9/19/2011 10:11:00 AM Thanks Andrea! CR

Gwendolen Song Date: 9/15/2011 5:39:00 PM Paralyzed in fear and speechless...oh yes, this is awesome, Caryl. I also love the 4th line that makes it ultrapersonal. Congrats to u, Gwendolen Login to Reply Caryl Ramsdale Date: 9/19/2011 10:13:00 AM Thanks for stopping by to read and comment my friend. I do appreciate. CR

Michael J. Falotico Date: 9/15/2011 5:26:00 PM A touching write that deserves to be on top... always Michael Login to Reply Caryl Ramsdale Date: 9/19/2011 10:14:00 AM Michael...thank you sir! I appreciate your comments and congratulatory remarks. Have a great day my friend. CR

Jack Horne Date: 9/15/2011 3:49:00 PM Very moving piece. Many congratulations to you, Caryl : ) Login to Reply Caryl Ramsdale Date: 9/19/2011 10:14:00 AM Thanks Jack! CR

Black Eyed Susan Date: 9/15/2011 12:47:00 PM so much grief. I like how you made something so routine as answering the phone, mean so much. congratulations on your win :) Login to Reply Caryl Ramsdale Date: 9/19/2011 10:15:00 AM Thank you Susan! CR

Bob Quigley Date: 9/15/2011 10:58:00 AM Nicely said. Congratulations on your 1st place win Caryl Login to Reply Caryl Ramsdale Date: 9/19/2011 10:16:00 AM Thanks for stopping by Bob. Your encouragement is greatly appreciated. CR

Sara Kendrick Date: 9/15/2011 10:11:00 AM Very expressive work..Enjoyed..Congrats..Sara Login to Reply Caryl Ramsdale Date: 9/19/2011 10:16:00 AM Thanks my friend. CR

Lee Ramage Date: 9/15/2011 12:06:00 AM Oh, this brings goosebumps. Well done, congratulations on this poem. You honour them well. Lee Login to Reply Caryl Ramsdale Date: 9/19/2011 10:17:00 AM Thanks for the congratulations...your remarks are appreciated my friend. CR

Nette Onclaud Date: 9/15/2011 12:03:00 AM so well expressed; no wonder it's tops, caryl..sunniest congrats on your special win :) huggs Login to Reply

Iolanda Scripca Date: 9/14/2011 8:31:00 PM Those last messages, those voices beyond graves...very emotional. Congratulations on your top win. Best, iolanda Login to Reply Caryl Ramsdale Date: 9/19/2011 10:19:00 AM Iolanda, thank you for your encouraging comments. CR

Kim Merryman Date: 9/14/2011 8:20:00 PM Congrats on your win, Caryl! Kim Login to Reply Caryl Ramsdale Date: 9/19/2011 10:20:00 AM Thanks! CR

Dr.Ram Mehta Date: 9/14/2011 8:11:00 PM Congratulations on the first place win in the contest of Carolyn, Caryl Login to Reply Caryl Ramsdale Date: 9/19/2011 10:18:00 AM Thank you for taking the time to congratulate! Your words are always an encouragement my friend. CR

Olusegun Arowolo Date: 9/14/2011 6:24:00 PM Fine master piece,Caryl.Congratulations on your well deserved win...may God continue to guide and protect those left behind.... Login to Reply

Carrie Richards Date: 9/14/2011 4:56:00 PM The sound of those messages.....chilling and profoundly unforgettable. This poem is so stirring with emotion...excellent! Login to Reply

Linda-Marie Sweetheart Date: 9/14/2011 3:39:00 PM Congrats Caryl on a fantastic first place win luv.. Login to Reply

David Williams Date: 9/14/2011 2:46:00 PM hey Caryl congrats on your win..David Login to Reply

Debbie Guzzi Date: 9/14/2011 2:46:00 PM yes SO fast..loved one could not grasp the happening or the dead their deaths..Congrad's light & love Login to Reply

Joyce Johnson Date: 9/14/2011 2:41:00 PM Yes, those unanswered phone calls...for so long. congratulations on a wonderful entry and win. Love, Joyce Login to Reply

John Freeman Date: 9/14/2011 2:39:00 PM Captures the scene perfectly Caryl. Congratulations on your worthy first place. Agape, Moses Login to Reply

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