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Good Bye

Mutely, tearfully Swallowed up, submerged in grief Remembering calls You may leave us a message— At the sound of the tone please… Caryl Ramsdale Copyright © 2011 All rights reserved. Tanka Poetry Form September 10, 2011 ~* Please pray for those left behind on that fateful day, September 11, 2001. *~ My "heartfelt condolences" to the brave families of 911. “Remembering 9/11” poetry contest sponsored by Carolyn Devonshire ~1st Place~ 9/14/2011

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Judy Ball

Date: 10/9/2011 10:02:00 AM

WoW! I cnn feel the total rejection in this. A good write. God Bless, JB

Constance La France

Date: 9/18/2011 11:08:00 AM

What a deserving first place, just an amazing write, sadly beautiful.. and thanks for your ever comments and support of my poetry~~

Caryl Ramsdale
Date: 9/19/2011 10:02:00 AM

Thanks for the congratulations Constance. Your comments are always appreciated my friend. CR

Susan Buchel

Date: 9/17/2011 9:48:00 AM

You've said it all in just a few lines - others have taken hundreds of pages....

Caryl Ramsdale
Date: 9/19/2011 10:06:00 AM

Susan, the 911 phone calls that aired nailed me to the wall. It was heart wrenching for me. I appreciate your comment. CR

Robert A. Dufresne

Date: 9/17/2011 8:25:00 AM

congratulations to you on the personal way you brought this one home to the heart, Caryl.

Caryl Ramsdale
Date: 9/19/2011 10:07:00 AM

Thanks for stopping by to read and congratulate Robert. I appreciate! CR

Fabiyas M V

Date: 9/17/2011 6:07:00 AM

It's a gem with a message,Caryl.You are Aversatile writer.LUV.FABIYAS M V

Caryl Ramsdale
Date: 9/19/2011 10:08:00 AM

Fabiyas, I always appreciate and look forward to your critiquing comments. Thanks again. CR

Jack Horne

Date: 9/16/2011 1:59:00 PM

This really is a beauty, Caryl

Caryl Ramsdale
Date: 9/19/2011 10:10:00 AM

Thanks Jack. You create and leave behind some pretty good ones yourself. Have a great day my friend. CR

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 9/15/2011 10:26:00 PM

CAryl, Congratulations on your well deserved win!

Caryl Ramsdale
Date: 9/19/2011 10:11:00 AM

Thanks Andrea! CR

Gwendolen Song

Date: 9/15/2011 5:39:00 PM

Paralyzed in fear and speechless...oh yes, this is awesome, Caryl. I also love the 4th line that makes it ultrapersonal. Congrats to u, Gwendolen

Caryl Ramsdale
Date: 9/19/2011 10:13:00 AM

Thanks for stopping by to read and comment my friend. I do appreciate. CR

Michael J. Falotico

Date: 9/15/2011 5:26:00 PM

A touching write that deserves to be on top... always Michael

Caryl Ramsdale
Date: 9/19/2011 10:14:00 AM

Michael...thank you sir! I appreciate your comments and congratulatory remarks. Have a great day my friend. CR

Jack Horne

Date: 9/15/2011 3:49:00 PM

Very moving piece. Many congratulations to you, Caryl : )

Caryl Ramsdale
Date: 9/19/2011 10:14:00 AM

Thanks Jack! CR

Black Eyed Susan

Date: 9/15/2011 12:47:00 PM

so much grief. I like how you made something so routine as answering the phone, mean so much. congratulations on your win :)

Caryl Ramsdale
Date: 9/19/2011 10:15:00 AM

Thank you Susan! CR

Bob Quigley

Date: 9/15/2011 10:58:00 AM

Nicely said. Congratulations on your 1st place win Caryl

Caryl Ramsdale
Date: 9/19/2011 10:16:00 AM

Thanks for stopping by Bob. Your encouragement is greatly appreciated. CR

Sara Kendrick

Date: 9/15/2011 10:11:00 AM

Very expressive work..Enjoyed..Congrats..Sara

Caryl Ramsdale
Date: 9/19/2011 10:16:00 AM

Thanks my friend. CR

Lee Ramage

Date: 9/15/2011 12:06:00 AM

Oh, this brings goosebumps. Well done, congratulations on this poem. You honour them well. Lee

Caryl Ramsdale
Date: 9/19/2011 10:17:00 AM

Thanks for the congratulations...your remarks are appreciated my friend. CR

Nette Onclaud

Date: 9/15/2011 12:03:00 AM

so well expressed; no wonder it's tops, caryl..sunniest congrats on your special win :) huggs

Iolanda Scripca

Date: 9/14/2011 8:31:00 PM

Those last messages, those voices beyond graves...very emotional. Congratulations on your top win. Best, iolanda

Caryl Ramsdale
Date: 9/19/2011 10:19:00 AM

Iolanda, thank you for your encouraging comments. CR

Kim Merryman

Date: 9/14/2011 8:20:00 PM

Congrats on your win, Caryl! Kim

Caryl Ramsdale
Date: 9/19/2011 10:20:00 AM

Thanks! CR

Dr.Ram Mehta

Date: 9/14/2011 8:11:00 PM

Congratulations on the first place win in the contest of Carolyn, Caryl

Caryl Ramsdale
Date: 9/19/2011 10:18:00 AM

Thank you for taking the time to congratulate! Your words are always an encouragement my friend. CR

Olusegun Arowolo

Date: 9/14/2011 6:24:00 PM

Fine master piece,Caryl.Congratulations on your well deserved win...may God continue to guide and protect those left behind....

Carrie Richards

Date: 9/14/2011 4:56:00 PM

The sound of those messages.....chilling and profoundly unforgettable. This poem is so stirring with emotion...excellent!

Linda-Marie Sweetheart

Date: 9/14/2011 3:39:00 PM

Congrats Caryl on a fantastic first place win luv..

David Williams

Date: 9/14/2011 2:46:00 PM

hey Caryl congrats on your win..David

Debbie Guzzi

Date: 9/14/2011 2:46:00 PM

yes SO fast..loved one could not grasp the happening or the dead their deaths..Congrad's light & love

Joyce Johnson

Date: 9/14/2011 2:41:00 PM

Yes, those unanswered phone calls...for so long. congratulations on a wonderful entry and win. Love, Joyce

John Freeman

Date: 9/14/2011 2:39:00 PM

Captures the scene perfectly Caryl. Congratulations on your worthy first place. Agape, Moses