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I won a goldfish at the fayre, ‘twas in a bag, now it’s down there Till dad comes back I’ll sit and stare, it was my first pet, life’s so unfair I tripped and fell grazing my knee, the bag burst far away from me Fishy escaped it was all wriggly, maybe it’s swimming back to sea I’ll try not to cry, but I’m upset, I think dad’s gone to get a net Perhaps he’ll bring the local vet, I hope they find my missing pet! Down a Storm Drain Gone Forever Poetry Contest Contest Sponsor Eve Roper 3/2/19

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Nette Onclaud

Date: 3/23/2019 11:54:00 AM

jan, i had so many kinds of fishes in a small aquarium before... we both love pets!...so charming!... big congrats to you and huggs!

Jan Allison
Date: 3/23/2019 12:27:00 PM

Thanks Constance I had a goldfish as a child but was never one for pets but I did have a goat lol:-) hugs jan xx

Jennifer Proxenos

Date: 3/23/2019 2:14:00 AM

Hi Jan, A wonderful poem you entered for the contest and a lovely story, but a liitle sad for the child Congratulations on your win. Best wishes and hugs, Jenny.

Jan Allison
Date: 3/23/2019 5:45:00 AM

Thanks so much Jennifer:-) hugs jan xx

Eve Roper

Date: 3/22/2019 4:23:00 PM

Jan, thank you for entering my contest. You had clear and fascinating imagery and great rhythm and flow. Congratulations on your 2nd place win. Come and visit me on my blog https://www.poetrysoup.com/poetry/blogs/blog_detail.aspx?BlogID=35331&PoetID=57242

Jan Allison
Date: 3/22/2019 7:20:00 PM

thanks so much Eve i had such fun writing for the contest:-) hugs jan xx

Caycay Jennings

Date: 3/4/2019 8:39:00 PM

This is gold. To me, it really is gold because all my muse has managed is lengthy scenarios when you just brilliantly proved the impact and possibility of short and excellent creativity for the contest. YOU ARE SO GOOD so consistently and so FREQUENTLY that you blow my mind in the best possible way! Hugs ... CayCay

Jan Allison
Date: 3/5/2019 12:41:00 PM

aww cheers CayCay I just had fun writing for the contest - that to me is what poetry should be about:-) hugs Jan xx

Rico Leffanta

Date: 3/4/2019 12:39:00 PM

Well done, Jan! I hope Eve chooses this as the winner! When I won the first goldfish for my daughter, she had yet to learn the word, "fish", so dubbed it, "shooky" and we have called fish "shookies" since then. Aloha! Rico

Jan Allison
Date: 3/4/2019 12:44:00 PM

aww what sweet memories Rico, its amazing how we get family names for things, we call spiders 'doiders' as son couldn't say incy wincy spider. Now hubby and I use it when we see a lass with HUGE false eyelashes and say 'look at the doiders on that' lol:-) hugs Jan xx

Caren Krutsinger

Date: 3/3/2019 10:18:00 PM

Jan, this is whimsical, fun, charming, and terrifically perfect for this contest. Expressing the hope they will find the fish is great! Made me laugh.

Jan Allison
Date: 3/4/2019 2:34:00 AM

Thanks Caren:-) I had such fun writing for the contest I hope Eve likes it:-) hugs Jan xx

Arthur Vaso

Date: 3/3/2019 3:22:00 AM

so cute!

Jan Allison
Date: 3/3/2019 3:58:00 AM

Thanks Art, that was the reaction I was hoping to get:-) hugs Jan xx

Gordon Mcconnell

Date: 3/2/2019 2:33:00 PM

Real great write Jan, nice rhyme and flow too. Brings memories of childhood but never won a goldfish. Have great weekend, Gordon

Jan Allison
Date: 3/2/2019 2:39:00 PM

thanks Gordon:-) hugs Jan xx

M. L. Kiser

Date: 3/2/2019 2:25:00 PM

Ooh, that would've killed me as a kid. Good poem for the contest! Good luck.

Jan Allison
Date: 3/2/2019 2:38:00 PM

Thanks ML:-) hugs Jan xx

Lin Lane

Date: 3/2/2019 11:42:00 AM

I didn't look at the picture before reading you so when I saw "now it's down there" I expected that it had been flushed down the potty. That's your usual direction. Nicely written, Jan.

Jan Allison
Date: 3/2/2019 11:44:00 AM

lol Lin for once I refrained from writing about poop :-) thanks for dropping by my friend I miss your wonderful poems, we must do a collab when time allows:-) hugs Jan xx