Going Out With a Bang

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Going out with a bang Dancing in circles weighing each other down Listless yet buoyant, in our oversized gowns Space waltzes are draining, swirling all night By morning we’d merged, in supernova light Bitsize Contest no 64 Sponsored by: Line Gauthier Howmanysyllables 05/21/23

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Valsa George

Date: 6/1/2023 7:08:00 PM

The astral phenomena are breathtaking and wonderful ! Cosmos is so full of astounding mysteries and delights ! A crisp and sweet poem. Great image too. All the Best, dear David.

I Am Anaya

Date: 5/22/2023 5:20:00 PM

A real blast, light-years away, the kind of event that produces as much as half of the universe’s gold, platinum, uranium and mercury, experts say. Exhausting and yet worth the weight in gold! A perfect romantic Bitesize

David Kavanagh
Date: 5/23/2023 2:43:00 AM

Yes indeed Anaya, all the rare heavy elements are produced in supernovae explosions, what a universe we live in, one big self serving science lab, or is some entity running a colossal experiment! Beats me! cheers David

Victor Buhagiar

Date: 5/22/2023 1:32:00 AM

Brilliant. Short and sweet.

David Kavanagh
Date: 5/22/2023 5:55:00 AM

Thank you Victor, it’s the way I’d prefer to go, cheers David

Jay Narain

Date: 5/21/2023 10:44:00 AM

A cosmic delight,

David Kavanagh
Date: 5/21/2023 10:51:00 AM

Thank you Jay, irresistible in every sense, cheers David

Lin Lane

Date: 5/21/2023 10:25:00 AM

A grandiose celestial event. Dancing in fevered anticipation through the night until two bodies were joined as one. Awesomely captured by Earthly voyeurs.

David Kavanagh
Date: 5/21/2023 10:50:00 AM

Heya Lin, Party’s, they don’t get much bigger on a cosmic scale, and they certainly do it with style, way to go, cheers David