Gregory Richard Barden Poet Free verse

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Godspeed

Prickly cool fills my lungs,
     Like a bladder canteen on a Bedu dromedary,

Sloshing the alveoli that branch, internal ...
     Frozen filligree fanning my firkin chest.

I blink a tear, staring up at the belt of Orion,
     Cold as the snow that wraps me like mother's womb.

Forever lost in the frightening beauty of God's providence,
     I sacrifice my last breath to the naked, shimmering heavens,

Letting the night devour me, tender and bleak,
     As I dream ... of sand castles.




~ 1st Place ~  in the "Early March 2019 Any Form, Any Theme" Poetry Contest, Brian Strand, Judge & Sponsor.

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Darlene De Beaulieu March 30, 2019 at 8:21 PM Hello Gregory, This poem is great! Have a nice evening my friend. Gregory Richard Barden March 30, 2019 at 8:23 PM Thank you very kindly, Darlene ... blessings, my friend! :-) <3

John Hamilton March 26, 2019 at 11:11 AM Like a bladder canteen on a Bedu dromedary, I don't think that word combination has ever been written before, you are a true trailblazing wordsmith. No mediocrity ever evident in your writing Greg, just amazing. I will admit I had to look up alvioli and firkin though. Gregory Richard Barden March 28, 2019 at 5:59 PM Thank you so much, John, especially for noticing my rather unusual phrasing and word combos ... those things still have to make sense, but so much fun to create. I think it keeps writing fresh and outside the ordinary. Blessings, Brother! :-)

Robert Lindley March 3, 2019 at 11:52 AM I have always loved stargazing and pondering both life and the universe my dear friend. This is a wonderfully crafted and brilliantly deep too. A fav... Basking in Heaven's soft night glow* with mind seeking with heart in tow* wading among stardust, its glee sky between heaven earth and me.* Gregory Richard Barden March 28, 2019 at 5:57 PM Beautiful comments, my good good friend, and I thank you so much for taking the time to read and comment! Blessings - I'm so pleased you liked this one! :-)