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Prickly cool fills my lungs, Like a bladder canteen on a Bedu dromedary, Sloshing the alveoli that branch, internal ... Frozen filligree fanning my firkin chest. I blink a tear, staring up at the belt of Orion, Cold as the snow that wraps me like mother's womb. Forever lost in the frightening beauty of God's providence, I sacrifice my last breath to the naked, shimmering heavens, Letting the night devour me, tender and bleak, As I dream ... of sand castles. ~ 1st Place ~ in the "Early March 2019 Any Form, Any Theme" Poetry Contest, Brian Strand, Judge & Sponsor.

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Darlene De Beaulieu

Date: 3/30/2019 8:21:00 PM

Hello Gregory, This poem is great! Have a nice evening my friend.

Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 3/30/2019 8:23:00 PM

Thank you very kindly, Darlene ... blessings, my friend! :-) <3

Sandra L. Weiss

Date: 3/28/2019 1:38:00 PM

This is powerful, Gregory. So beautifully written. Beauty among the stars!

Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 3/28/2019 5:59:00 PM

Thank you so very much, Sandra, I greatly appreciate the kind words, my friend! Blessings! :-) <3

John Hamilton

Date: 3/26/2019 11:11:00 AM

Like a bladder canteen on a Bedu dromedary, I don't think that word combination has ever been written before, you are a true trailblazing wordsmith. No mediocrity ever evident in your writing Greg, just amazing. I will admit I had to look up alvioli and firkin though.

Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 3/28/2019 5:59:00 PM

Thank you so much, John, especially for noticing my rather unusual phrasing and word combos ... those things still have to make sense, but so much fun to create. I think it keeps writing fresh and outside the ordinary. Blessings, Brother! :-)

Robert Lindley

Date: 3/3/2019 11:52:00 AM

I have always loved stargazing and pondering both life and the universe my dear friend. This is a wonderfully crafted and brilliantly deep too. A fav... Basking in Heaven's soft night glow* with mind seeking with heart in tow* wading among stardust, its glee sky between heaven earth and me.*

Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 3/28/2019 5:57:00 PM

Beautiful comments, my good good friend, and I thank you so much for taking the time to read and comment! Blessings - I'm so pleased you liked this one! :-)