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Go Ahead I Dare Ya Breakup Poetry No One Should See

And He my dearest maturest mate to date has bitterly regressed to a child irate from man of logic to impish state a hexer vile filled with hate while I don't believe I've changed a bit he thinks me evil my mother split as saccharin as the Harpie race bewitching temptress evil face necessity I do suppose for his childish fit to so dispose Dug out of an old journal for John Lawless' Go Ahead I Dare Ya!!! Contest

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Line Gauthier

Date: 10/16/2017 7:31:00 PM

Bravo been there too. Well said. Delightful little tirade.

Maureen Mcgreavy
Date: 10/16/2017 9:09:00 PM

Tirade is the perfect word! ;) xomo!

Patricia Cresswell

Date: 9/10/2017 9:02:00 AM

Love the description Maureen clear and no mistake.

Maureen Mcgreavy
Date: 9/11/2017 8:15:00 AM

:) dear diary moment worth sharing

Darlene De Beaulieu

Date: 4/29/2017 2:59:00 PM

Hello Maureen, glad that you have defended your poetry. A 7

Patricia Cresswell
Date: 9/10/2017 9:02:00 AM

Robert Padmore

Date: 4/18/2017 5:38:00 AM

Very nice poetry Maureen, I love it when it sounds and fits perfectly. And especially when it relates to our lives! Well written a 7

Maureen Mcgreavy
Date: 4/18/2017 7:16:00 AM

;) thanks Robert! bless ya xomo

Freddie Robinson Jr.

Date: 4/12/2017 11:35:00 AM

Oh my, this is one cool poem, Maureen! You possess so much verve in this wry, funny poem. He better not touch the wrong nerve. Keep on giggling at your own vitriol. Especially when you gotta let the thunder roll. You are one straight shooting sista. This poem got me smiling ear to ear. Your voice is so good to hear. Love and hugs, my dear.

Maureen Mcgreavy
Date: 4/12/2017 9:44:00 PM

Your generous comment has my own smile popping out my ears! Thank you sweet Freddie, bless your soul xomo

Lim'Rik Flats

Date: 4/12/2017 8:58:00 AM

Well heckfire, this was a treat with my morning coffee! I always appreciate a sharp scalpel;-) ~ john

Maureen Mcgreavy
Date: 4/12/2017 9:38:00 PM

Lovely! A note to self I never did intend to share I am elated it has entertained so ;) and the pen as sharp scalpel, them's fabulous poetic words John xomo!

Lisa Ricci

Date: 4/8/2017 1:14:00 PM

Hello Maureen. Allow me to say the lion is alive and strong. I enjoyed the strength. You certainly met the contest requirements. Thank you for sharing. Best of luck with the contest.

Maureen Mcgreavy
Date: 4/8/2017 9:00:00 PM

:) thank You Lisa!

Darren White

Date: 4/6/2017 3:23:00 AM

Haha, I love this poem, and all the comments below made me laugh even harder (sorry) :) Good he was no marriage material for you

Maureen Mcgreavy
Date: 4/7/2017 6:24:00 PM

No apologies required! My sense of humour is very very well developed ;) x's n' o's!

Anne-Marie Coreggia

Date: 4/4/2017 9:56:00 PM

Wow, Maureen, we sure heard your mighty justified roar loud and clear and I hope this awesome piece will bring you success in the contest :) Amitiés

Maureen Mcgreavy
Date: 4/5/2017 5:56:00 AM

:) thank You Anne-Marie! Joie! xomo

Carolyn Devonshire

Date: 4/4/2017 3:54:00 PM

Oh no, he was the most mature of those you dated? I think you and I have waded in the same gene pool looking for love and finding a bitter child. You definitely fulfilled the contest theme, Maureen. Like the short lines and the rapid-fire descriptions of this "vile" lover. Wishing you success.

Maureen Mcgreavy
Date: 4/4/2017 4:09:00 PM

Giggle ;) well heartbreak can bring out the worst in all of us. I'd say he grew up with our breakup, I "fixed him by breaking him", he was marriage material after me. Sigh. lol xomo!

Charmaine Chircop

Date: 4/4/2017 2:36:00 PM

Oh Ioved this...I could hear you roar...And accepting the daring challenge...with a great response .

Maureen Mcgreavy
Date: 4/4/2017 3:03:00 PM

Thank you Charmaine; letting it all hang out ;) xomo!

Agnes Krampe

Date: 4/4/2017 2:18:00 PM

Oh, I like this one. The short lines and repeat rhymes capture the fury well. Good luck in the contest.

Maureen Mcgreavy
Date: 4/4/2017 3:01:00 PM

Thanks Agnes! Fury is a good word for it ;) xomo!

Jan Allison

Date: 4/4/2017 1:20:00 PM

WOOOHHH You sure packed a punch with this one Maureen - love the choppy lines and the rhyme:-) I would love to hear this read out loud with venom in your voice!:-) am adding this to my faves think it's AWESOME:-):-) hugs jan xx

Maureen Mcgreavy
Date: 4/4/2017 2:55:00 PM

I am delighted you enjoy it so! Finding it after so long I gotta say it has me giggling at my own vitriol. Bless you! xomo :)

Chris Green

Date: 4/4/2017 12:45:00 PM

Well, he did dare you and I see you answered that dare wonderfully. Don't you just hate when they revert back to that whining, crying and imaginative infant state? How dare he? :) Nicely expressed angst my friend.

Chris Green
Date: 4/4/2017 3:06:00 PM

Yep, probably for the better. :)

Maureen Mcgreavy
Date: 4/4/2017 2:58:00 PM

...I was actually looking for an awfully embarrassing penis poem I wrote and (ugh) sent when I came across this number, probably for the best ;)

Maureen Mcgreavy
Date: 4/4/2017 2:52:00 PM

Yah, was dramatic, a literal hex display; fortunately he was the loather of poetry so no chance he'll be reading this here ;) xomo!

Poetprentice Dupins

Date: 4/4/2017 12:26:00 PM

My gosh the diction in this piece is amazing. "maturest mate to date has bitterly regressed to a child irate from man of logic to impish state" This rhyme, to me, has so many layers to it. Good one Mo! 7

Maureen Mcgreavy
Date: 4/4/2017 2:49:00 PM

Thank you thank you! ;) 'twas a visceral moment. xomo!