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Glow Worm

Velcro ripped and soda fizz
Velvet crushed Moroccan night
Nocturnal buterflies those flickering fireflies
Our winking spies like circling satelites
Coming together , we fissures of light
Delicious refrain  we split like  pomegranite
Love spinning round the  sun and the planets
Mortally chiselled on tombstone of granite

Hark ! Who goes there this Luciferous night
Its only I with my faltering lantern
Dragging behind attached little light
Fallen firefly - slow creeping glow worm
Mid air flight hangs the hateful things we said
Farewell this, heres lookin' at you kid

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Connie Marcum Wong

Date: 6/1/2018 2:57:00 AM

Your poetry always enthralls me Jannie. This poem is another outstanding delight from your talented pen! I loved it! xxoo I hope you are safe my dear friend!

CayCay Jennings

Date: 11/14/2017 9:25:00 AM

Another gem from Jannie's pen! I am just so darned impressed with you this day! I'm off to read others, but my joy here is not done and I will finish all your writes, yepper - I will. All the best, all the time ... CayCay

Jannie Breedt
Date: 11/14/2017 12:12:00 PM

Oh Cay Cay, I get fired up by your comments. This one didnt turn ou exactly wat I wanted to say, as qith many of mine ,it begs for editing. You make me dream again

Nethan Mcninang

Date: 10/19/2017 1:26:00 AM

what's the theme though?

Nethan Mcninang
Date: 10/29/2017 7:36:00 PM

thanks

Jannie Breedt
Date: 10/19/2017 8:11:00 AM

Its about lovers remorse and a fallen firefly thats been reduced to a dejected glow worm wandering forlorn. Thanks for the enquiry Nethan

Harshita Chaudhary

Date: 10/18/2017 8:56:00 AM

Nice selection of words my friend. They add beauty to your poem.

Jannie Breedt
Date: 10/19/2017 8:07:00 AM

Hi Harshita,welcome here and thank you.

Freddie Robinson Jr.

Date: 9/20/2017 2:47:00 PM

Another poetic jewel from your talented pen, Jannie. The opening line is eye-catching ... velcro ripped and soda fizz. My first impression was: where will this thought go? Your mysterious, cerebral writes never disappoints. The ending was so noir cinema verite cool. Baby, you're the best. Wow poetry! Love and much respect always.

Jannie Breedt
Date: 9/21/2017 12:34:00 AM

Freddie , you always say the nicest things its almost better than your poetry. How cool is it to have you on my show ha ha . Great grreetings

Patricia Cresswell

Date: 8/4/2017 12:35:00 PM

I really enjoyed reading this roller coaster ride of a poem. Your images are art to my ears.

Jannie Breedt
Date: 9/16/2017 2:08:00 PM

I am definitely charmed by your gracious comment. Thank you very much