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Offshoot feelings pierce your abandoned heart song. But you go along. Pretending normal when you’re gasping for air. As others don’t care. You see him with her now, and her children two. Soul ripping for you. He’ll be back your traitorous heart says, a lie. Who cares if you die? Offshoot feelings pierce your abandoned heart song. You know it is wrong. It will not be long. Written 10-28-2018 Contest: Half Eleven Poetry Contest Sponsor: Nina Parmenter

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Date: 12/3/2018 3:47:00 PM
powerfully penned Caren! many congrats:-) hugs Jan xx
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Caren Krutsinger
Date: 12/4/2018 2:49:00 AM
Thank you Jan! I love it that I placed in one of Nina's contests. Hooray! Love it!
Date: 10/29/2018 3:00:00 PM
So tragic and piercing, very well done for this form!
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Caren Krutsinger
Date: 10/29/2018 3:17:00 PM
Thank you Michelle.
Date: 10/29/2018 11:25:00 AM
Ooh that was good; betrayal is never fun but, there are so many fish in the sea...swim!
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Caren Krutsinger
Date: 10/29/2018 11:29:00 AM
So many.
Date: 10/29/2018 7:25:00 AM
That is powerfully penned-- great work! ;)
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Caren Krutsinger
Date: 10/29/2018 11:29:00 AM
Thank you my friend.
Date: 10/29/2018 12:03:00 AM
touches me - He’ll be back your traitorous heart says, a lie. Who cares if you die? // penned lovely
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Caren Krutsinger
Date: 10/29/2018 7:18:00 AM
Thank you my friend. I appreciate your comment and stop by.

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