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Ghetto Summer (Redo)

I
smell
summer
in the air
humidity fumes
reflecting off dusty windows.



Thanks Sharon for pointing out lines 1/2 in a fibonacci are both only 
one syllable.  Doesn't read as dramatic but it works ... smile ...

************  for Brian Strand's contest  ******************

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Teresita Cailo

Date: 6/4/2009 5:09:00 AM

Though its kind of late, still I want to say congratulations for your first place win in Mr. Brian's contest :) Teri

Brian Strand

Date: 6/3/2009 8:29:00 AM

Sue just to say I airmailed your prize this morning.Rgds Brian

Brian Strand

Date: 6/3/2009 12:20:00 AM

One beautiful image for my favourites.Rgds Brian

Barbara Gorelick

Date: 6/2/2009 5:59:00 PM

congrats on your !ST PLACE WIN...wow. BG

Date: 6/2/2009 1:12:00 PM

Congratulations on your first place finish in Brian's contest Sue! This is such a wonderful poem. I am so happy for you. Enjoy your honor! Keep up the good writing. Karen

Sharon Winter

Date: 6/2/2009 10:29:00 AM

YAY Sue! Congrats on your First Place win!!! Bravo and well deserved! Love, Shar

Carrie Richards

Date: 6/2/2009 6:41:00 AM

Such a true to life image, can almost breathe in the musty air!! Great job...terrific win!! Congratulations Sue, on your winning poem!! Love, Carrie

Brian Strand

Date: 6/2/2009 6:20:00 AM

Congrats on your success in my contest Sue.Please soupmail me a forwarding address for your prize.Rgds Brian

Daver Austin

Date: 5/27/2009 3:24:00 PM

Never have been in the ghetto, but I have been on tour with symphony orhestras and stayed at roach motels....same thing i guess. A very distressing piece, ah, BUT GOOD. love, daver

Carolyn Devonshire

Date: 5/26/2009 6:17:00 PM

You certainly nailed this portrait of summer in the ghetto, Sue. Excellent fibonacci form, too. Love, Carolyn

Date: 5/26/2009 1:19:00 PM

Nice use of imagery and alliteration for a creative view. Good luck in the contest. The title is fitting. Thank you for your kind words on my poem. Have a nice day! Karen

Des Juan Richardson

Date: 5/26/2009 11:21:00 AM

Brilliant imagery! You made me home sick! LOL ~ Des Juan

Kristin Reynolds

Date: 5/26/2009 10:22:00 AM

AAWWWWSOME. truly awesome, visual, sensory fib. loved this, miss you, love, Kristin :)

Sharon Winter

Date: 5/26/2009 6:59:00 AM

I can feel it and smell it. Transporting imagery. Excellent! Love, Shar

Christopher Higgins

Date: 5/26/2009 5:09:00 AM

Interesting piece of poetry..best wishes.