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Ghetto Summer (redo)

I
smell
summer
in the air
humidity fumes
reflecting off dusty windows.



Thanks Sharon for pointing out lines 1/2 in a fibonacci are both only 
one syllable.  Doesn't read as dramatic but it works ... smile ...

************  for Brian Strand's contest  ******************

Copyright © | Year Posted 2009




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Date: 6/4/2009 5:09:00 AM
Though its kind of late, still I want to say congratulations for your first place win in Mr. Brian's contest :) Teri
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Date: 6/3/2009 8:29:00 AM
Sue just to say I airmailed your prize this morning.Rgds Brian
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Date: 6/3/2009 12:20:00 AM
One beautiful image for my favourites.Rgds Brian
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Date: 6/2/2009 5:59:00 PM
congrats on your !ST PLACE WIN...wow. BG
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Date: 6/2/2009 1:12:00 PM
Congratulations on your first place finish in Brian's contest Sue! This is such a wonderful poem. I am so happy for you. Enjoy your honor! Keep up the good writing. Karen
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Date: 6/2/2009 10:29:00 AM
YAY Sue! Congrats on your First Place win!!! Bravo and well deserved! Love, Shar
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Date: 6/2/2009 6:41:00 AM
Such a true to life image, can almost breathe in the musty air!! Great job...terrific win!! Congratulations Sue, on your winning poem!! Love, Carrie
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Date: 6/2/2009 6:20:00 AM
Congrats on your success in my contest Sue.Please soupmail me a forwarding address for your prize.Rgds Brian
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Date: 5/27/2009 3:24:00 PM
Never have been in the ghetto, but I have been on tour with symphony orhestras and stayed at roach motels....same thing i guess. A very distressing piece, ah, BUT GOOD. love, daver
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Date: 5/26/2009 6:17:00 PM
You certainly nailed this portrait of summer in the ghetto, Sue. Excellent fibonacci form, too. Love, Carolyn
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Date: 5/26/2009 1:19:00 PM
Nice use of imagery and alliteration for a creative view. Good luck in the contest. The title is fitting. Thank you for your kind words on my poem. Have a nice day! Karen
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Date: 5/26/2009 11:21:00 AM
Brilliant imagery! You made me home sick! LOL ~ Des Juan
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Date: 5/26/2009 10:22:00 AM
AAWWWWSOME. truly awesome, visual, sensory fib. loved this, miss you, love, Kristin :)
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Date: 5/26/2009 6:59:00 AM
I can feel it and smell it. Transporting imagery. Excellent! Love, Shar
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Date: 5/26/2009 5:09:00 AM
Interesting piece of poetry..best wishes.
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Date: 5/25/2009 10:38:00 PM
Hi Sue I'm sure sorry it has been so long - this is a great answer to Brian's contest - YF4L - God Bless, MJ
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