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No other pair; compares beyond Beauty lashes out; to seduce a smize; I looked upon; two magic wand Brown is the color to which is most yawned; But it is Earth's deepest well of hope; I surmise No other pair; compares beyond Blue of grey shade; mirrors all that are spawned As sapphire gems; adorning cloudy tearful skies I looked upon; two magic wand Peridot shines, as planted fields, are lawned Green; like newfound blades; of springtime ryes No other pair; compares beyond Found together; yet self-disguised, in bond Hazel wins, versus, softest, ambers, tries I looked upon; two magic wand Direct through them; my love had to respond Seeing her; that's simply when; all sadness dies No other pair; compares beyond I looked upon; two magic wand

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Silent One

Date: 1/15/2024 2:12:00 PM

Congratulations on your placement in the contest..

Anonomus Scorpio
Date: 1/15/2024 4:57:00 PM

Thanks S.O. <3!

Shadow Hamilton

Date: 1/12/2024 8:37:00 AM

well done on placing A.S hugs Shadow

Anonomus Scorpio
Date: 1/12/2024 8:42:00 AM

Thank you very much Shadow! I appreciate you sponsoring this contest the villanelle has proved to be a very rewarding and favorite form of mine. Warmest regards! A.S.

Speaks Volumes

Date: 11/27/2023 3:45:00 AM

The villanelle is perfect for emphasizing lines that need to be dominant and it suited your beautiful poem. I smiled at certain parts of your poem for different reasons. For instance.. " Beauty lashes out" and to liken the splendid colors endowed, to creations of mother nature, made simple eye shades come alive in ones mind, until she walked it, then none could compare. sigh, I almost didn't want it to finish. You did pretty good ! :)

Anonomus Scorpio
Date: 11/27/2023 7:33:00 AM

Thank you very much S.V.!! Your interpretation is spot on of what I wanted to convey!! With warmth A.S.

Paige Hind

Date: 11/26/2023 5:19:00 PM

WOW! This is sooo beautiful. Gorgeous, wonderfully written, dear friend of mine.

Anonomus Scorpio
Date: 11/26/2023 6:15:00 PM

Thank you very much! I have been trying out new forms as of late I was not certain the Villanelle was a good idea. But as I wrote this it just seemed so right for a poem about eyes :) Warmly A.S.