Get Low- Three Trains

Three trains

 
	The first train was bereavement, in the cab the driver died
	pulling a coach of grieving souls, unknowing yet, inside
	The second train was unemployed and heading where it will
	no scheduled destination and so many miles to kill
	Third train was steaming in real fast, relationship express
	out of control, the brakes applied but flat out, nonetheless.
	Where the tracks all crossed was a signal box, manned by a crew of one
	who bumbled by from day to day not knowing what was wrong.
	But up there in the box he heard, and from all sides could see
	the trains approach their final stop, and that last stop was me.
	Bereavement got there first and there was nothing I could do
	no lights nor signals made a difference, it just ploughed on through
	as unemployed converged at speed and rolled on to it's side
	the pair of them went in nose first as relationship arrived
	the signal box was crushed beneath, it didn't stand a chance
	buried in the twisted wreck of flaming circumstance. 
        Shock finally subsided and the smoke began to clear
	just left with total darkness and no way from out of here
	all the wreckage pressing down  meant nowhere else to go
	just curl up in a tiny ball, try not to move, get low.
	So there I stayed as unbeknown their night turned into day
	the sounds of all around me going on their merry way.
	Many days entombed were spent, not praying for release
	comfortable in misery, my loneliness my peace
	until the silence broken by a piercing warning shout,
	'No rescue's due, it's up to you to dig your passage out'.
	From where the voice had come from I could neither hear nor see
	until the realisation that the sound had come from me
	skin tearing on the razor steel I slowly fought my way
	and finally emerged, bathed gratefully in the light of a new day.
	No fanfare, and no wild applause, no ticker tape parade
	life went on, oblivious to the escape that I had made.
	Since then I've built another box around me, much much stronger
	and hope the time till the next train will be, Lord, much much longer.


            For contest 'Get low', sponsored by Casarah Nance

	In memory of that dreadful year 2002.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2015



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Date: 7/28/2015 11:11:00 PM
Sometimes, life needs to come to a crashing halt before we can pick up the pieces... I really enjoyed your creative take on the contest theme. Really great writing, Viv! Congrats on the win!
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Date: 7/25/2015 8:18:00 PM
Congratulations Viv, you go beyond technique and pour your heart into your work and the talent shines out for all to see and admire. Emile.
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Viv Wigley
Date: 7/26/2015 12:40:00 AM
merci beacoup for a wonderful comment, Emile, much appreciated. Viv
Date: 7/25/2015 8:10:00 AM
Viv, you've wrapped this thought up in twisted steel and heart ache. I love your way with words. Congrats. My dad was struck by a train when I was an infant-- he survived, PTL! I build wall plaques of trains made from junk. Thanks for dropping by my poems too.
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Viv Wigley
Date: 7/26/2015 12:41:00 AM
Thanks, James, thank God he survived, amen. Appreciate your visit. Regards, Viv
Date: 7/24/2015 3:22:00 PM
VIV, Congrats in Casarah's getting low contest. Love **SKAT**
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Viv Wigley
Date: 7/26/2015 12:42:00 AM
Thanks, Skat, Cas does some interesting topics and the quality of the other entries reflected it well, VIv x
Date: 7/24/2015 12:56:00 AM
Congrats on ur awesome winning poem Viv! A tremendous write!
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Viv Wigley
Date: 7/24/2015 12:59:00 AM
Thanks, Upma, appreciate your visit. Viv x
Date: 7/23/2015 7:07:00 PM
Congratulations on your win, a very deep poem on many levels..a write to use as a learning tool
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Viv Wigley
Date: 7/23/2015 10:02:00 PM
Thanks, Frederic, I appreciate your comment. If some good comes from my tale of woe, then it's a bonus. Regards, Viv
Date: 7/23/2015 6:43:00 PM
What a story, thank you for sharing!
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Viv Wigley
Date: 7/23/2015 10:03:00 PM
Thanks, Casarah, you've reaped a goodly harvest again. Viv x
Date: 7/23/2015 5:21:00 PM
Wonderful write congratulations on your win Hugs Eve
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Date: 7/23/2015 3:30:00 PM
no stopping now Mr Viv until it is time to reach your final destination - fabulous imagery from start to finish - congrats on your win:-) hugs jan xx
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Date: 7/23/2015 2:40:00 PM
Just making sure I rated your poem !
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Viv Wigley
Date: 7/23/2015 3:01:00 PM
7 x
Date: 7/23/2015 2:39:00 PM
My goodness, this is one of the most CREATIVE ways to get your story across in poetic form, Viv! I love it! So compelling, it kept my attention the whole way through! A rousing 7! :) (yay...I get silly when I'm excited...)!!
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Date: 7/23/2015 3:40:00 PM
Oh no, that's too bad, Viv. How hard that must have been for you. By the way, congrats on your placement in the contest (though I would have put it higher, but someone will be mad if I say this!)
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Viv Wigley
Date: 7/23/2015 2:59:00 PM
Yay! Difficult to convey a dark time, but I have to look on the bright side- when I came out of this, the person living in the place that I was at the time, and the guy in the apartment below, were brutally murdered not long after I left.
Date: 7/23/2015 9:06:00 AM
I can feel the depression throughout your poem. Its very well composed. All the best in the contest. #7
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Viv Wigley
Date: 7/23/2015 2:57:00 PM
Thanks, njeri, a jaunty verse for a terrible time, hopefully never to be repeated. Viv x
Date: 7/23/2015 1:37:00 AM
Viv, this well written piece held my attention all the way through. What you have penned was well expressed. Best of luck in the contest:-)Alexis
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Viv Wigley
Date: 7/23/2015 1:46:00 AM
'well expressed'- like what you did there. Thanks, Alexis, Viv
Date: 7/23/2015 1:17:00 AM
Your poem is so well written I didn't want it to end Viv, and I usually prefer shorter poems, but this was truly excellent! You have the gift my friend and I predict this will come in on the very top! 7
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Viv Wigley
Date: 7/23/2015 1:20:00 AM
Thanks, Connie, I know it's a little long, but look on the bright side- I was glad that it was eight lines too long to be an Abecedarian- I'll leave those beauties to you. Viv x
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