From Our Deck-Front In December

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Purely descriptive

From
our pink deck with a Jarra  cocktail table-set
We sit awaiting  sunset with an
 ‘Hawaiian absence’ of seagulls
As dusk comes  with violet echoes
across the spotted water,
from the resturaunts
 comes a wine hubbub - table- laughter

Mountains, marshmallowed
in occasional cloud on this still night- 
constant torchlight on quiet water
un-moving palms, paddle sounds

A swanky stingray drifts past

A shadowed water taxi 
and strangers who wave at us 


 Suzanne Delaney

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Line Gauthier

Date: 5/28/2021 8:23:00 PM

delightful ~ I pictured myself right there

Carrie Richards

Date: 8/23/2014 1:27:00 PM

I want to be there.....you have set the stage with quiet tranquility and with the company of only the dearest of friends. Lovely poem is this!

Joseph May

Date: 6/14/2014 3:50:00 AM

Beautiful imagery captured in this lovely write....best wishes

Monterey Sirak

Date: 6/12/2014 7:19:00 AM

Stunning images! Your words don't just describe. They transport me and invite me to visit and share the incredible beauty with you.

Connie Marcum Wong

Date: 6/5/2014 5:45:00 PM

Suz, you have written a divine poem that relates the beauty of Hawaii with breathtaking imagery and descriptions making anyone want to visit. "A dusk with violet echoes". Just outstanding writing my friend! Please post this at PFT too. I am fav'ing it. Aloha, Connie

Suzanne Delaney
Date: 6/5/2014 10:45:00 PM

Hi Connie: I wrote this when we lived on Koko Isle with an amazing view of Koko Head and the Shack resturaunt was directly opposite. Have you ever read Wallace Stevens poem Sea Surface Full of Clouds. It kind of inspired me to write about our deck. http://www.online-literature.com/forums/showthread.php?27067-Wallace-Stevens/page9

Suzanne Delaney

Date: 6/4/2014 8:53:00 PM

You have mountains marshmallowed in snow....lol