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From our pink deck with a Jarra cocktail table-set We sit awaiting sunset with an ‘Hawaiian absence’ of seagulls As dusk comes with violet echoes across the spotted water, from the resturaunts comes a wine hubbub - table- laughter Mountains, marshmallowed in occasional cloud on this still night- constant torchlight on quiet water un-moving palms, paddle sounds A swanky stingray drifts past A shadowed water taxi and strangers who wave at us Suzanne Delaney

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Date: 8/23/2014 1:27:00 PM
I want to be there.....you have set the stage with quiet tranquility and with the company of only the dearest of friends. Lovely poem is this!
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Date: 6/14/2014 3:50:00 AM
Beautiful imagery captured in this lovely write....best wishes
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Date: 6/12/2014 7:19:00 AM
Stunning images! Your words don't just describe. They transport me and invite me to visit and share the incredible beauty with you.
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Date: 6/5/2014 5:45:00 PM
Suz, you have written a divine poem that relates the beauty of Hawaii with breathtaking imagery and descriptions making anyone want to visit. "A dusk with violet echoes". Just outstanding writing my friend! Please post this at PFT too. I am fav'ing it. Aloha, Connie
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Date: 6/5/2014 10:45:00 PM
Hi Connie: I wrote this when we lived on Koko Isle with an amazing view of Koko Head and the Shack resturaunt was directly opposite. Have you ever read Wallace Stevens poem Sea Surface Full of Clouds. It kind of inspired me to write about our deck. http://www.online-literature.com/forums/showthread.php?27067-Wallace-Stevens/page9
Date: 6/4/2014 8:53:00 PM
You have mountains marshmallowed in snow....lol
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Date: 6/4/2014 8:02:00 PM
Hmm, a little different than the reality on my deck in December here in Minnesota. Don't cha know. :)
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