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From Jaded Green

A harvest breeze invites the leaves to shimmy on the tree. In haunting song she sighs and grieves as on her breath they flee. They dance and twirl away from her, sweet fragrance lingers where they were, they dance and twirl, they dance and twirl toward the twilight of the year. A gentle moonlight bathes the leaves that lie upon the ground. Her magic with them interweaves in midnight’s silent sound. They turn to gold from jaded green beneath the moon’s cool waxen sheen, they turn to gold, they turn to gold, and gild a graceful autumn scene. A winter wind disturbs the leaves as they so soundly sleep. The tree’s loss, so the wind believes, gives him the right to reap. He whips them up and whispers low that all the golden leaves must go, he whips them up, he whips them up to clear the way for soft white snow.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2010




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Date: 3/26/2011 10:38:00 PM
sharon, I sure wish I saw more of you. Anyway , congrats on this and your other poem still in the finals! Luv, Andrea
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Date: 12/7/2010 9:23:00 AM
Congratulations Sharon on your excellent poetry being featured this week on PoetrySoup. May you have many more features. Love, Carol
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Date: 12/5/2010 11:53:00 AM
I think breathtaking would be a way to describe this poetry Sharon >> James :)
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Date: 11/7/2010 6:24:00 AM
Though I do not spen time writing this form...as Andrea HAS pointed out...I whole heartedly agree with her ! Great write, and also tagging along is a great ryhme ! much love, james
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Date: 11/6/2010 3:05:00 PM
wow, Sharon, is this a trijan refrain?? It sure seems to be. I am a very good friend of the author of that form. I will have to tell Jan about this poem. She will love it! I have seen few trijan refrains this well done! A fav for this one. LUv, Andrea
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Date: 11/6/2010 3:05:00 PM
ps Where have you been? It's great to see a NEW poem from you!
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Date: 11/6/2010 11:39:00 AM
You're back, super yay :) so happy to read a new write from you Sharon :),sure missed reading you here--and this sure is an impressive poem as always-- definitely liked how you approached the changing of the seasons, and of how you repeated certain lines, made it feel like a song or a chant-- very vivid piece that I really enjoyed reading over & over :) hugs to you-- i hope your week has been good :)-- nikko :)
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Date: 11/5/2010 1:04:00 AM
A wonderful Rhyme, Sharon:) This paints beautiful images in my mind. Hugs, Emilia:)
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Date: 11/4/2010 4:43:00 PM
So nicely done ...I like the way you repeated lines..it really adds to the poem. BG
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Date: 11/4/2010 4:23:00 PM
Smile ~ So very wonderfully &, good to behold "Your Loveliness" again my dear ~ "My Love & Warmth to 'You Always' &, All You Love," John! ~ Smile, "Have A Very 'Blessed & Beautiful' Day 'Dear, Precious Sharon Tideswell,' Amid The Loving Embrace of An Autumns Moments These, 'Colours of Beautiful Love;'" Bye My Dear!:) ~
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Date: 11/4/2010 4:17:00 PM
Smile ~ I love this metaphors "My 'Dear, Lovely & Precious Sharon Tideswell!!!'" ~ I was thinking about "Your Beauty" the other day, wondering how this gifted, amazingly soft & profound poetess has been ~ Perhaps the wind believes its loves deepest heart; these desires towards the leaves!? ~ "Beautiful Poe As Always My Dear; 'Touches The Soul, Deeply!!!'" ~ I hope that "Your Splendours" life has been treating "Your Brightness" ~ ....Cont:)
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Date: 11/4/2010 1:54:00 PM
It's beautiful, flowing poetry with nice ending, Sharon
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Date: 11/4/2010 1:46:00 PM
Beautiful, Sharon! I love the way you describe the transition from fall to winter and give life to the wind, allowing him to whip up the leaves and "clear the way for soft white snow." A favorite for me. Love, Carolyn
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Date: 11/4/2010 1:28:00 PM
A tenderly moving piece which captures the wonder of nature.. your repetitive lines ounctuate the visceral image of it all... lovely, sharon! warmest, nette
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