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Freedom In the Arena

hot is the noon sun melting flowers in the mud… arena cheers for raw blood I glare at my foe his dagger raking bruised knee …weight of life upon my shield fierce blow cracks his neck rudis pressed on stained chain mail… breath smelling of freedom’s prize audience casts flowers thumbs hunger for next combat more slaves to kill… but not me. © *rudis---when a gladiator is set free as a slave after a bout, he is given a wooden sword, named rudis. For Amy Green’s Choka for Chokehold By nette onclaud

Copyright © | Year Posted 2012




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Date: 6/2/2012 11:21:00 AM
Lovely worded about rudis, loved always, bl
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Date: 6/1/2012 7:30:00 PM
So you gave yourself the rudis. WAy to go with that clever thinking, Nette. I just love your "thumbs hunger" line! you know, Amy is blogging about getting hardly any choka for this contest, but I've read at least seven really good ones so far. How can she only have three that qualify? I don't get it!
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Date: 6/1/2012 4:41:00 PM
That rudis will be raised to the winners' circle...Enjoye reading your entry..Thanks for the comments on my work...Sara
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Date: 6/1/2012 11:48:00 AM
What a price for freedom, eh. Luck in the contest. Love, daver
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Date: 5/31/2012 11:35:00 PM
You not only captured the intensity of the fight, you showed the stadium's response as well! This is the most powerful entry! (Educational too!) You have done some great work lately...congrats on all your winning successes...I still have a lot of catching up to do...Hey, did u see mine?...I can't remember..Critique me teacher. There is not a sensitive bone in my body! hahaha. Again, this is smashingly excellent, Nette! :) Gwendolen
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Date: 5/31/2012 9:46:00 PM
your the best..next to me of course...kidding...hugs...pd
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Date: 5/31/2012 9:14:00 PM
awesome Nette luv.. amazing insight into a world forgotten in time now.. I recall seeing "Gladiator" and it was interesting and electrifying as this poem .. much success in Amy's contest luv.. seems soon as I left my friend Amy surfaced again.. so happy ..
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Date: 5/31/2012 7:22:00 PM
wonderful poem Nette.====>Patrick wonders how you did in contest... But bravo
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Date: 5/31/2012 6:01:00 PM
Well done choka for the contese - sure to be a winner.
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Date: 5/31/2012 2:58:00 PM
excellent poem, and a wonderful subject. good luck in contest.
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Date: 5/31/2012 1:19:00 PM
wow, I could almost hear the roaring crowd with this one, Nette. Congrats on all your wins : )
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Date: 5/31/2012 10:51:00 AM
Wonder call for freedom... Super poem... I love it and its message... Terry (& thanks for your kind comments)
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Date: 5/31/2012 7:45:00 AM
What a powerful write my friend! I expected nothing less from an extremely talented woman such as yourself Nette! This write is full of life and death within its threads! There is excitement in every line showing grandeur and animosity between the two fighters! Perfect poem my dear friend! Great Work!!
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Date: 5/31/2012 7:11:00 AM
Very good Nette!
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Date: 5/31/2012 2:52:00 AM
Nette, very visual, I like ,,good luck..David
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Date: 5/31/2012 2:27:00 AM
Well done nette! - Wish you luck in contest. - Have a lovely day in sunshine and love! - always oxox Anne-Lise
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