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four years

lying in the tangled white sheets
hair mussed i can still feel your touch
where you loved me and i loved you.

your scar on the side of your cheek
a piece of shrapnel embedded
you said you'd come home in a week.

it's august now  come september
four years exactly you've been gone
your heart forever within her.


Copyright © | Year Posted 2016

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Date: 5/28/2018 5:28:00 AM
Well written -JT
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Date: 4/5/2017 9:18:00 AM
nice write Lynn, the good with sad, our hopes, reality's
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Date: 3/13/2017 8:42:00 PM
Hi Lynn, such a sad yet most beautiful write Lynn. You still have such a way with words drawing one into the heart of your canvas. Such a gentle piece singing with excellence. Just had to drop by for a second read Lynn. Hugs....Mike. XX Still a seven and now a fave.
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Date: 3/11/2017 6:44:00 PM
Just stopping in on this one again...still sad and lovely. What a way you have with words:)
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Date: 2/23/2017 8:22:00 PM
oh my gosh, so poignant and tender and sad! I love this, Lynn
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Date: 2/22/2017 1:25:00 PM
a poignant mix of loss and longing, well said
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Date: 2/17/2017 12:53:00 AM
Owww. What a painful and sad poem... But beautiful the same time.
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Date: 9/12/2016 9:12:00 AM
Dropping by to say hi. I was hoping for a new one. Hugs Rick.
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Date: 8/28/2016 8:41:00 AM
Well worth a second read.
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Date: 8/27/2016 3:33:00 PM
Sad, beautiful the last line:)
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Date: 8/27/2016 3:17:00 PM
ouchie.. such a painful yet wonderful write, lynn.. love the mood and tone of this one..huggs
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Date: 8/26/2016 2:35:00 PM
four years, four ever, I agree with Richard, you read this sad poem, and well your thoughts just linger, well done!
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Date: 8/25/2016 9:40:00 PM
So sad...
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Date: 8/25/2016 7:47:00 PM
I enjoyed this emotionally packed piece Lynn that leaves one with mystery and sadness. 7 ; )
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Date: 8/24/2016 4:40:00 PM
I can feel the contrasting emotions that flow from the first to the last stanza, Lynn...from contentment to sadness. Unfortunately the final line suggests that he has found a new love. There must be lots of unanswered questions that tick inside the mind! Regards // paul
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Date: 8/24/2016 8:49:00 AM
an exceptional short piece that lingers beyond the page.
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Date: 8/24/2016 5:56:00 AM
Hi Lynn, a short write but full of emotions. Once more you find beauty within the sadness and it is weaved into your write. Excellent work as always Lynn. You make the heart sing with your writes, whatever the emotion the heart sings and emotions come forth as one reads. You bring to life, in vivid imagery the pictures you put forward through your words. Your gentle words sing into the mind. There is always beauty in your sadness. This has to be a seven Lynn. Hugs....Mike. XX
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Date: 8/24/2016 3:20:00 AM
A sad and touching write expressed with depth of emotion. Excellent write, Lynn. T.J
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Date: 8/23/2016 11:52:00 PM
A short write that certainly affected my emotions when I read it. Overall, an impressive write.
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Date: 8/23/2016 8:10:00 PM
So filled with sadness Lynn...beautiful write
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Date: 8/23/2016 4:30:00 PM
wrenching yet beautifully impressed.. well done,lynn..huggs
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Date: 8/23/2016 4:02:00 PM
I really like this one so sad and filled with feeling.
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Date: 8/23/2016 12:06:00 PM
Very sad, tale of lost love, extremely well written, evokes all kinds of emotions.
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Date: 8/23/2016 11:57:00 AM
- A deep love .... a lovely poem, Lynn - The years are the love test of strength and loyalty - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
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Date: 8/23/2016 11:53:00 AM
Imagination of a very sad picture filled with deep emotion of loss of love, i feel here. Beautifully drawn. A seven. Hugs, Cloudy poet, bl
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