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Four Years

lying in the tangled white sheets
hair mussed i can still feel your touch
where you loved me and i loved you.

your scar on the side of your cheek
a piece of shrapnel embedded
you said you'd come home in a week.

it's august now  come september
four years exactly you've been gone
your heart forever within her.









08-23-2016

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Ian Milligan

Date: 4/26/2025 8:45:00 AM

VERY well written!!!

James Inman

Date: 8/21/2019 7:58:00 AM

A very sad beautifully written piece Lynn with a bit of a mystery. I never commented on this because it leaves me a bit confused. Your mention of shrapnel leads me to believe he has left for a military mission and has not returned but the use of the pronoun she in the end leads me to believe he left for another woman, or could it be that the pain is too much to use me in that context.

Honestly J.T.

Date: 5/28/2018 5:28:00 AM

Well written -JT

Edward Snyder

Date: 4/5/2017 9:18:00 AM

nice write Lynn, the good with sad, our hopes, reality's

Vladislav Raven

Date: 3/13/2017 8:42:00 PM

Hi Lynn, such a sad yet most beautiful write Lynn. You still have such a way with words drawing one into the heart of your canvas. Such a gentle piece singing with excellence. Just had to drop by for a second read Lynn. Hugs....Mike. XX Still a seven and now a fave.

Chris Hagy

Date: 3/11/2017 6:44:00 PM

Just stopping in on this one again...still sad and lovely. What a way you have with words:)

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 2/23/2017 8:22:00 PM

oh my gosh, so poignant and tender and sad! I love this, Lynn

D.W. Rodgers

Date: 2/22/2017 1:25:00 PM

a poignant mix of loss and longing, well said

Darren White

Date: 2/17/2017 12:53:00 AM

Owww. What a painful and sad poem... But beautiful the same time.

Richard Lamoureux

Date: 9/12/2016 9:12:00 AM

Dropping by to say hi. I was hoping for a new one. Hugs Rick.

Richard Lamoureux

Date: 8/28/2016 8:41:00 AM

Well worth a second read.

Chris Hagy

Date: 8/27/2016 3:33:00 PM

Sad, beautiful write...love the last line:)

Nette Onclaud

Date: 8/27/2016 3:17:00 PM

ouchie.. such a painful yet wonderful write, lynn.. love the mood and tone of this one..huggs

Arthur Vaso

Date: 8/26/2016 2:35:00 PM

four years, four ever, I agree with Richard, you read this sad poem, and well your thoughts just linger, well done!

Mike Hauser

Date: 8/25/2016 9:40:00 PM

So sad...

Connie Marcum Wong

Date: 8/25/2016 7:47:00 PM

I enjoyed this emotionally packed piece Lynn that leaves one with mystery and sadness. 7 ; )

Paul Callus

Date: 8/24/2016 4:40:00 PM

I can feel the contrasting emotions that flow from the first to the last stanza, Lynn...from contentment to sadness. Unfortunately the final line suggests that he has found a new love. There must be lots of unanswered questions that tick inside the mind! Regards // paul

Richard Lamoureux

Date: 8/24/2016 8:49:00 AM

an exceptional short piece that lingers beyond the page.

Vladislav Raven

Date: 8/24/2016 5:56:00 AM

Hi Lynn, a short write but full of emotions. Once more you find beauty within the sadness and it is weaved into your write. Excellent work as always Lynn. You make the heart sing with your writes, whatever the emotion the heart sings and emotions come forth as one reads. You bring to life, in vivid imagery the pictures you put forward through your words. Your gentle words sing into the mind. There is always beauty in your sadness. This has to be a seven Lynn. Hugs....Mike. XX