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A bittersweet taste of isolation grips While climbing high on a forsaken loft , Escorted by a window’s glassy beam And I notice a disarray of keepsakes… History books, stale cigars, antiques In fluted trunks all muddily undone: Somehow, a cloud turns deep violet Where I uncover a file of private notes; Intimate as your very skin, your breath Marking our years’ affectionate episodes— ````` Till my dire soliloquy, my ached calls , Hide beneath an ocean of black stars Recalling now, your gentle kiss As you leave to fetch a Sauvignon Warming a rainy October nightfall : Yet sirens greet me, deafened by Fate’s ending This room holds me In total vagueness that my lungs Pine for your name I can only hear, As midnight groans like a widow for it. 11/20/2017 Picture 3 Photostory Contest for Eve Roper

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Date: 12/3/2017 4:03:00 PM
Amazing work, Nette. BIG congrats for the top win.
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Date: 12/2/2017 6:33:00 PM
Okay Ms. Fancy French, had me eating out of your poetic hand until you parlay vued (slaughtered, I know). Loved the first stanza, not educated enough for the 2nd. Funny thing, I knew you would pick the attic, it was a fleeting, but true knowing. It called me as well, compelling array, right? Congrats, beautiful lady ... CayCay
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Date: 12/2/2017 6:33:00 PM
Just conquered second stanza and it was worth the effort. A Wow
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Date: 12/2/2017 6:31:00 PM
Congratutions on your win, Nette!
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Date: 12/2/2017 4:54:00 PM
Congratulations on your superb entry taking First Place honors Nette! : )
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Date: 12/2/2017 3:34:00 PM
Thank you for entering my contest ,Nette, your imagery and flow of words is beautiful. Congratulations on your win! Hugs Eve ~`*
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Date: 11/20/2017 4:02:00 PM
An excellent take on this photo, Nette; vivid imagery followed by a sad ending. Hugs // paul
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Date: 11/19/2017 6:52:00 PM
Beautiful words--lovely flow and reflection of the past..best for a win, nette!
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Date: 11/19/2017 4:35:00 PM
A beautiful poem on the photo, good luck in contest.
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Date: 11/19/2017 3:47:00 PM
Hello Nette, Thanks for your recent read of my new Rondeau poem. Best of Luck to you in Eve's Photostory Contest with "Forsaken Loft." As I was reading your great verses here, I kept go back-and-forth from the poem to the posted picture that the verses and words refer to. In any loft of this nature, there are indeed many "hidden treasures" to be rediscovered. Anne-Lise is absolutely right about this. A Superb Write!! Cheers and Best, Gary
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Date: 11/19/2017 1:54:00 PM
- I think there may be many hidden "treasures" on a forsaken loft, Nette - A lovely poem - Best wishes in the contest :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
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