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Fork In Road

mixing words and rhyme , devote passion designed,  
   colors and shades blend , my vision I send ,a path 

   a mystic Irish presence , calming senses , 
   whispers in ear to follow stay near,  a path
   
   all pain considered wisdom is delivered,  
   making the changes needed to live yet give, a path

   past ,present, future fate, open the gate, 
   presently undecided  the road divided, a path

   the long destination refuse to show desperation, a path
   my soul on fire my love desired,   a path

Copyright © Shanity Rain | Year Posted 2013

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Sheri Fresonke Harper Date: 11/17/2013 7:26:00 PM Shanity, lovely ghazal, path's offer so much wealth of inspiration. Login to Reply

Skat A Date: 11/15/2013 10:45:00 AM Shanity, Congratulations, on your 'Take the Leap' win............ LOVE ~ SKAT Login to Reply

Sandra Adams Date: 11/13/2013 11:31:00 AM nicely penned poem...congrats on your win :) Login to Reply Shanity Rain Date: 11/13/2013 12:20:00 PM Thank-you Sandra, It says so much about the one whom faithfully comments on others poetry and wins , for we all win when we write. I love this in you, what a beautiful spirit you have :)

Dr.Ram Mehta Date: 11/12/2013 3:25:00 AM Congratulations on the win, Shanity Login to Reply Shanity Rain Date: 11/12/2013 8:20:00 AM Thank-you very much , this was challenging, and I love the poem ~

Marquis Mc Mills-Cooper Date: 11/1/2013 3:09:00 PM Interesting poem Shanity LOL! I've never read a Ghazal before. I say, you're going to write one of every form of poetry there is! Good Attempt here!!! MC Login to Reply Shanity Rain Date: 11/1/2013 8:06:00 PM Thank-you ! MC you are very creative and should write one !

Debbie Guzzi Date: 10/26/2013 7:23:00 AM Hello new poet friend Shanity! Your first couplet needs adjustment IF [on a path] is your repeated word or phrase [this is called RADEEF] it MUST be on the end of both lines 1 & 2 - in the remaining couplets only on the end of the second line. The single word before that PHRASE must rhyme in lines 1,2,4,6,8,10 - the way you have started that word would be [a] BUT ..LOOK at my old blog please YOU have time THANKS Light & Love Login to Reply Shanity Rain Date: 10/26/2013 10:38:00 AM Thank-you ! This was a form challenged for the 1st time , I was not sure about it , for I went to a poem , and saw one that had the phrase in each line ? I will go to your Blog or poems , and learn the proper format , TY !!

Dr.Ram Mehta Date: 10/26/2013 6:36:00 AM This is quite contemporary Ghazal you have, I went with the traditional one, Shanity. Good luck in the contest if it is for that, Login to Reply Shanity Rain Date: 10/26/2013 10:35:00 AM Thank-you , Doc..I am trying this for the 1st time , I was a little worried about the subject matter, yet ..poetry is all about love and more , much pain ! it is not my lover , I shall say that ! I am just learning this for the 1st time , I may redo..