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FORGIVENESS FEELS LIKE A ROTTED GRAVE

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We were sisters, but more like Cinderella and the ugly sister variety ... and of course you always made me feel like I am the ugly one! I’ve done so much for our parents for years but you got all the glory ... and the privileges A house, private college education, a car Enough money to open a bank! You weren’t born with a silver spoon in your mouth More like a solid gold coal shovel! Everything I own I’ve worked my butt off to get - holding down 5 part time jobs to buy my first car I appreciate every single thing we own You’ve lived on benefits for over 30 years Oh and of course of bank of mummy and daddy Yet when dad died You lied and cheated and only thought of ME ME ME Perhaps you should get an Oscar for your performance! Believe me I wouldn’t swap places with you for the world Forgiveness feels like a rotted grave ... you can rot in yours forever Free verse only Contest Sponsored by Laura Loo 6/3/18

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Date: 6/16/2018 10:37:00 PM
Wow. Exquisitely penned. Wow. Superbly done, Jan. Wow. Congrats on your well earned win!
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Date: 6/8/2018 11:42:00 PM
Deep within the recesses of our heart lie our emotions. Sometimes, they surface so others can see the feelings we harbor. It produces a type of cleansing to vent occasionally even though the feelings remain. Your words may sound venomous to others but are a balm of relief for you. Congratulations on your win.
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Date: 6/8/2018 11:20:00 AM
My, my, my Jan, how appropriately vicious.
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Date: 6/8/2018 9:01:00 AM
Congratulations for your win Jan! :)
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Date: 6/8/2018 8:19:00 AM
Congratulations Jan - glad your vitriol brought about some good! “Solid gold coal shovel” - love it.
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Date: 6/8/2018 8:13:00 AM
- A short greeting and congratulations on your great winning poem, Jan :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
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Date: 6/8/2018 7:36:00 AM
harsh words! but sometimes we must get the anger off our chest. great poem sweet Jan! thank you and congratulations on your placement :)-luloo
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Date: 6/4/2018 9:35:00 AM
Testy...are we...forgiveness is the first step toward deliverance of the soul...BUT! lol...love and light...^WW^
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Date: 6/4/2018 11:56:00 AM
...BUT!...sometimes we just can't help it...dog nag it! lol...much love my friend...^WW^
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JAN ALLISON
Date: 6/4/2018 9:44:00 AM
Moi testy no no no I am actually incredibly patient - working with kids and elderly people sure gives you the patience of a saint at times! You can choose your friends not your relations - will say no more but I still have mum and my own family and am truly blessed:-) :-) hugs jan xx
Date: 6/4/2018 8:51:00 AM
WOW, I see from below that you understand about forgiveness so no lecture here! It must be really difficult and don't you wonder sometimes, why things are the way they are. Life is truly baffling. Well done rant Jan xxxooo
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JAN ALLISON
Date: 6/4/2018 9:07:00 AM
There is some poetic licence ... it is allowed Mike lol but the only thing I feel for her is pity - she told the lawyer she hated me and wanted nothing to do with me - but I was giving my share of the inheritance to her lol ... I know from my hubbies cancer that material things mean little - she is welcome to everything she has got which she has never had to work for. I have made my own way in life and am much the better person for it:-) hugs jan xx
Date: 6/3/2018 9:24:00 PM
Whew! I hope this is fiction. Well done, Jan. Janice
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JAN ALLISON
Date: 6/4/2018 3:10:00 AM
There is a good deal of poetic licence Janice :-):-) hugs Jan xx
Date: 6/3/2018 8:31:00 PM
Wow! Phew! What a feud!
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JAN ALLISON
Date: 6/4/2018 3:09:00 AM
Thanks Kim:-) hugs Jan xx
Date: 6/3/2018 8:20:00 PM
Yikes! Remind me to stay on your good side Jan. Love your potent pen!
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JAN ALLISON
Date: 6/4/2018 3:09:00 AM
LOL Chance... we are poets there is always poetic licence in a poem:-) hugs Jan cc
Date: 6/3/2018 4:46:00 PM
Get 'em Jan. This poem is a letting go. A getting it off the chest. I have not had the guts to write like this. I hope I can find inspiration in your words.
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JAN ALLISON
Date: 6/3/2018 5:16:00 PM
I wrote my first poem when my hubby had his cancer surgery and I find writing so cathartic whether they are factual or fiction poems. :-) hugs Jan xx
Date: 6/3/2018 4:26:00 PM
oh my, Jan, so heartfelt.. I know this comes from your heart ...
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JAN ALLISON
Date: 6/3/2018 5:14:00 PM
Thanks Eve I am sure you are am amazing sister:-) hugs jan xx
Date: 6/3/2018 1:49:00 PM
- Awesome, Jan :) - ME, ME, ME ... she deserves a glory ... - Good luck in the contest :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
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JAN ALLISON
Date: 6/3/2018 2:12:00 PM
LOL Anne Lise:-) hugs Jan xx
Date: 6/3/2018 1:33:00 PM
So how do you really feel Jan??? Talk about tough love, best wishes in the contest...
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JAN ALLISON
Date: 6/3/2018 1:37:00 PM
ha ha ha Charlie... sometimes the ideas come flowing out lol:-) hugs jan xx