Jan Allison Poet Free verse

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Forgiveness Feels Like a Rotted Grave

We were sisters, but more like Cinderella and the ugly sister variety ...
and of course you always made me feel like I am the ugly one!

I’ve done so much for our parents for years
but you got all the glory ... and the privileges
A house, private college education, a car 
Enough money to open a bank!
You weren’t born with a silver spoon in your mouth
More like a solid gold coal shovel!

Everything I own I’ve worked my butt off to get -
holding down 5 part time jobs to buy my first car
I appreciate every single thing we own

You’ve lived on benefits for over 30 years
Oh and of course of bank of mummy and daddy
Yet when dad died
You lied and cheated and only thought of ME ME ME
Perhaps you should get an Oscar for your performance!
Believe me I wouldn’t swap places with you for the world
 
Forgiveness feels like a rotted grave ... you can rot in yours forever

Free verse only Contest Sponsored by Laura Loo

6/3/18

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Line Gauthier June 16, 2018 at 10:37 PM Wow. Exquisitely penned. Wow. Superbly done, Jan. Wow. Congrats on your well earned win!

Curtis Moorman June 8, 2018 at 11:42 PM Deep within the recesses of our heart lie our emotions. Sometimes, they surface so others can see the feelings we harbor. It produces a type of cleansing to vent occasionally even though the feelings remain. Your words may sound venomous to others but are a balm of relief for you. Congratulations on your win.

James Inman June 8, 2018 at 11:20 AM My, my, my Jan, how appropriately vicious.

Heidi Sands June 8, 2018 at 9:01 AM Congratulations for your win Jan! :)

Anne-Lise Andresen June 8, 2018 at 8:13 AM - A short greeting and congratulations on your great winning poem, Jan :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)

Beautiful Scars June 8, 2018 at 7:36 AM harsh words! but sometimes we must get the anger off our chest. great poem sweet Jan! thank you and congratulations on your placement :)-luloo

Winged Warrior June 4, 2018 at 9:35 AM Testy...are we...forgiveness is the first step toward deliverance of the soul...BUT! lol...love and light...^WW^ Winged Warrior June 4, 2018 at 11:56 AM ...BUT!...sometimes we just can't help it...dog nag it! lol...much love my friend...^WW^ Jan Allison June 4, 2018 at 9:44 AM Moi testy no no no I am actually incredibly patient - working with kids and elderly people sure gives you the patience of a saint at times! You can choose your friends not your relations - will say no more but I still have mum and my own family and am truly blessed:-) :-) hugs jan xx

Mike Gentile June 4, 2018 at 8:51 AM WOW, I see from below that you understand about forgiveness so no lecture here! It must be really difficult and don't you wonder sometimes, why things are the way they are. Life is truly baffling. Well done rant Jan xxxooo Jan Allison June 4, 2018 at 9:07 AM There is some poetic licence ... it is allowed Mike lol but the only thing I feel for her is pity - she told the lawyer she hated me and wanted nothing to do with me - but I was giving my share of the inheritance to her lol ... I know from my hubbies cancer that material things mean little - she is welcome to everything she has got which she has never had to work for. I have made my own way in life and am much the better person for it:-) hugs jan xx

Janice Canerdy June 3, 2018 at 9:24 PM Whew! I hope this is fiction. Well done, Jan. Janice Jan Allison June 4, 2018 at 3:10 AM There is a good deal of poetic licence Janice :-):-) hugs Jan xx

Kim Rodrigues June 3, 2018 at 8:31 PM Wow! Phew! What a feud! Jan Allison June 4, 2018 at 3:09 AM Thanks Kim:-) hugs Jan xx

Lyric Man June 3, 2018 at 8:20 PM Yikes! Remind me to stay on your good side Jan. Love your potent pen! Jan Allison June 4, 2018 at 3:09 AM LOL Chance... we are poets there is always poetic licence in a poem:-) hugs Jan cc

Richard Evans June 3, 2018 at 4:46 PM Get 'em Jan. This poem is a letting go. A getting it off the chest. I have not had the guts to write like this. I hope I can find inspiration in your words. Jan Allison June 3, 2018 at 5:16 PM I wrote my first poem when my hubby had his cancer surgery and I find writing so cathartic whether they are factual or fiction poems. :-) hugs Jan xx

Eve Roper June 3, 2018 at 4:26 PM oh my, Jan, so heartfelt.. I know this comes from your heart ... Jan Allison June 3, 2018 at 5:14 PM Thanks Eve I am sure you are am amazing sister:-) hugs jan xx

Anne-Lise Andresen June 3, 2018 at 1:49 PM - Awesome, Jan :) - ME, ME, ME ... she deserves a glory ... - Good luck in the contest :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :) Jan Allison June 3, 2018 at 2:12 PM LOL Anne Lise:-) hugs Jan xx

Charlie Smith June 3, 2018 at 1:33 PM So how do you really feel Jan??? Talk about tough love, best wishes in the contest... Jan Allison June 3, 2018 at 1:37 PM ha ha ha Charlie... sometimes the ideas come flowing out lol:-) hugs jan xx