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Foreplay melodic love her bangles' symphony sleepless night's moonlight sonata prelude © 2011 kashinath karmakar ========================= Placement:3rd; (September 2011) By:kashinath karmakar Contest:Melody of Cinquain Sponsor:Nette Onclaud

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Chiquitachiamaka Baity

Date: 9/23/2011 3:34:00 AM

wow... very nice Kashinath...hot....smiles...chiquita

Dr.Ram Mehta

Date: 9/12/2011 8:58:00 PM

Congratulations on the win in the contest of nette,kashinath

Charlotte Puddifoot

Date: 9/12/2011 4:37:00 PM

congrats on a great win in the contest, very romantic cinquain, a perfect example of the form :-)

Carol Sunshine Brown

Date: 9/12/2011 9:10:00 AM

Congratulations on your well deserved win in Nette's "Melody Of Cinquain" contest Kashinath. Love, Carol

Debbie Guzzi

Date: 9/11/2011 5:52:00 PM

Ohhhhh MY ..this is my #1 a fav too CONGRAD's light & love

Sara Kendrick

Date: 9/11/2011 3:03:00 PM

Different..Congrats..Sara

Lori Lucas Mcclure

Date: 9/11/2011 2:38:00 PM

Awesome poem!! congratulations on your well deserved win!!!!!!!-----Lori

David Williams

Date: 9/11/2011 3:38:00 AM

hey Kash congrats on your great win..David

Nancy Jones

Date: 9/10/2011 11:54:00 PM

my, my... hot and dead on. nice one, kash, congrats! ~N

Margaret Foster

Date: 9/10/2011 11:39:00 PM

Congratulations Kash, Nice visuals here, love the bangle line. Cheers Marg.

Linda-Marie Sweetheart

Date: 9/10/2011 11:19:00 PM

Congrats Kash on terrific third place win with these brilliant lines of Cinquain my friend.. wow..

Kim Merryman

Date: 9/10/2011 10:32:00 PM

Congrats on your win! Kim

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 9/10/2011 10:29:00 PM

This is SO deserving of a win, my friend. A big congratulations to you. Please post your diazan!!

Lee Ramage

Date: 9/10/2011 9:24:00 PM

Congratulations on your win. Well done. Lee

Jslambert Mister Roboto

Date: 9/10/2011 3:00:00 PM

YummY...Bangles fused with Moonlight Sonata...give me more!==="she tells me in her bedroom voice...cmon Honey...let's go make SOME NOISE! It's just another Manic Monday....Wish it were Sunday...ECT :)

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 9/9/2011 10:32:00 PM

Kash, actually this one is better but not becuase of words or syllable count. You made it go better by the content rule. You made the last word now equal to the first word. And you did what Nette asked you about using each line for a specific purpose. For me, that made the difference. Sure to garner a lot of points!

Margaret Foster

Date: 9/9/2011 9:58:00 PM

I like it , I like it. I hear the music. good luck Kash. cheers Marg.

Elizabeth Wesley

Date: 9/9/2011 8:01:00 PM

The flames rise higher Kashi. Can't get much more passion in this one It has to win!

Natalie The Rogue Rhymer

Date: 9/9/2011 6:48:00 PM

Awesome Kash! She'll love this one, I'm sure. Good luck in the contest and have a great weekend!!

Debbie Guzzi

Date: 9/9/2011 4:24:00 PM

oh lovely I'm sure nette will enjoy it! light & love

Nette Onclaud

Date: 9/9/2011 2:36:00 PM

awhoooo.. this is much, much better, kashi!!.. come visit; got a new one!... :) huggs, nette

Linda-Marie Sweetheart

Date: 9/9/2011 11:57:00 AM

captivating lines so mesmerizing ..intoxicating Kash.. music and romance ..a forever blend like no other.. incredible luv..good luck..

James Fraser

Date: 9/9/2011 11:21:00 AM

An absolute delight to read Kashinath, a fantastic short piece. Thank you for sharing this GEM, have a wonderful weekend :)

Constance La France

Date: 9/9/2011 10:50:00 AM

Oh Kash, how sexy does it get... love it.. "her bangles symphony" and thanks for sending me in the right direction, you know what I mean.. I did the edit, if you care to have a look.. love, dear heart

Neil Mcdonald

Date: 9/9/2011 10:19:00 AM

telling sensuous string... evocative but something feels amiss...the intake of breath...antara kumbhaka!