Forbidden Fruit

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                                        A nice cool breeze blew, 
                                  across the lush green landscape.
                                Under the blistering heat of the sun,
                               laying beneath a great big willow tree.
                              A wicked snake slowly slithered my way,
                              as it approached it began to tell a story.
                               About a future with unimaginable gifts,
                                filled with limitless power and wealth.  
                                 The snake said it would all be mine,
                                   only after  renouncing  my faith. 
                                     By eating the forbidden fruit,
                                       I sell my soul to the devil.
                                          God's warm embrace,
                                              lost for eternity.

                                                 5/25/2017

Copyright © | Year Posted 2017



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Date: 7/3/2017 3:37:00 AM
You are a master of this form already!
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Jeremy Smith
Date: 7/3/2017 3:39:00 AM
Thank you :) I have a lot of fun with concrete poetry!
Date: 6/3/2017 12:15:00 AM
This is a wonderful piece.. I love the theme and the shape to complement your poem. I also like concrete. I have a few poems in that form.
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Jeremy Smith
Date: 6/3/2017 12:19:00 AM
Thank you Eve :) And, I will definitely take a look.
Date: 5/30/2017 7:12:00 AM
Wow!!! That's a marvelous art!!! Congrats Jeremy, for your placement in the contest!!! ;-)
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Jeremy Smith
Date: 5/30/2017 10:40:00 AM
Thank you, very much Teddy:)
Date: 5/29/2017 4:43:00 PM
Perfectly shaped--not to mention moving and profound! Congrats on your win, Jeremy! Janice
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Jeremy Smith
Date: 5/29/2017 4:45:00 PM
Thank you, very much Janice :)
Date: 5/26/2017 9:02:00 PM
Fabulous poem and shape, expertly crafted Jeremy
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Jeremy Smith
Date: 5/26/2017 9:12:00 PM
Thank you, Elizabeth :)
Date: 5/26/2017 1:27:00 AM
Jeremy! This is wonderful :) I love both the shape and the poem a lot. Great work!
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Jeremy Smith
Date: 5/26/2017 1:42:00 AM
Thanks a lot Darren! I'm a bigger fan of the words.
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