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Forbidden Castle

Crows gather around the mysterious, abandoned castle, Its bastions and towers drowning within a mournful silence. Ghostly shadows loom within the dungeons and the murder holes, Screams of perished souls are locked within the castle walls. Long it has stood there upon a mountain of tempestuous winds, Withholding a secret from haunting years passed. Stones big, dark and looming, an ancient evil lurks inside, Creeping through each room, an eeriness unexplained. Each corridor discloses a tale of bloodshed on that dreaded night, when the devil sent his descendants to run havoc amongst the mortals. The bitter queen who summoned them did not live to confess the tragedy, She took her life, witnessing all before her slaughtered including the adulterous king. As a child, I had heard countless legends of the forbidden castle, Of the torture chambers and the merciless beheading of the accused innocent. Many have warned, “Beware…stay away…” and now I stand before the entrance, The devilish crows watching knowingly, as if they foresee my fate. “Beware the snares in the dark, for Death grins, awaiting your coming…” A special collaberation with The Silent One Thanks for the opportunity! :)

Copyright © | Year Posted 2015




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Date: 3/21/2016 1:13:00 AM
When I clicked on this poem I was prepared to say, "Forbidden? How dare you keep me out ... I want in!" Now I seem to be eating my words, as I see the content ... haunting and nightmarish. Hate to say it Laura, but while you may succeed with flying colors as a poet, I'm afraid I have to crush any upcoming dreams you may have of becoming a Real Estate Agent. It just wouldn't work out.
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Laura Breidenthal
Date: 3/21/2016 1:38:00 AM
XD hahaha! I guess I'll just stick to writing poetry :P I've always wanted to explore a supposed haunted place, just for the thrill of it. But knowing me, I'll find trouble. Thanks for readin! We had a lot of fun writing this. Silent has a great imagination - another thing I love about that poet! ~Laura
Date: 9/16/2015 9:12:00 AM
Oh soooo Goth!
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Laura Breidenthal
Date: 9/16/2015 2:06:00 PM
Indeed...this one was a blast to write! ~Laura
Date: 9/12/2015 12:48:00 PM
This is a really interesting and wonderful piece that is well written. Well deserved POTD! Well done! Would you care to take a look at my Facebook community page all about Gothic. https://www.facebook.com/Raven3.gothic?ref=tn_tnmn Many Thanks!
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Max Corvus
Date: 9/16/2015 9:15:00 AM
Add me please! My FB name is Max Corvus Tenebrosus, but write me a message when you do so that I may accept you. Love the way you write.
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Laura Breidenthal
Date: 9/12/2015 1:34:00 PM
Thanks Tony! I'll check it out soon! ~Laura
Date: 8/17/2015 10:28:00 AM
Congratulations on this being chosen POTD, Laura! I have already read this on Silent One's page, so will post an identical comment here: A forbidden castle waiting for our arrival....is the curiosity too big to overcome?! Can fate be tempted?! ~ A haunting collaboration!!! // paul
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Laura Breidenthal
Date: 8/17/2015 1:01:00 PM
Many thanks, Paul! You are very kind. ~Laura
Date: 8/16/2015 4:42:00 PM
Hello Laura, I unfortunately missed your and Silent One's POTD selection here the other day. Please accept my belated, but most deserved congratulations on this quite eerie, evil write. Ditto with emphasis my previous comments on this poem too in the continuing blog below!! This super dark tales ROCKS!! Cheers and Best Always, Gary
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Laura Breidenthal
Date: 8/16/2015 5:25:00 PM
Thanks so much! Means a lot coming from you! ~Laura
Date: 8/15/2015 11:12:00 PM
You direct the reader's vision and soul into a landscape of foreboding captivation, leading the heart to a powerful symbol which the castle sternly represents, the fortified yet often desolate and dilapidated storehouse of our hearts' fears, the demons of rage. You and Silent One give great dimension to this castle of woe, the senses really get involved...J.A.B.
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Laura Breidenthal
Date: 8/16/2015 12:32:00 AM
Hello dearest! Thanks for stopping by to leave your sweet and intriguing words... always appreciated very much Justin! ~Laura
Date: 8/15/2015 9:33:00 PM
Great job on getting the poem of the day. It's a great one. :)
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Laura Breidenthal
Date: 8/16/2015 12:02:00 AM
Thanks Janet! I appreciate your compliment. ~Laura
Date: 8/15/2015 2:53:00 PM
Oh what a wonderful mix of two talented and skillful poets!! Grats on poem of the day and big applause to you both!!!
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Laura Breidenthal
Date: 8/16/2015 12:00:00 AM
Many many thanks! ~Laura
Date: 8/15/2015 9:29:00 AM
This poem makes my day. It's so beautiful and creative.
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Laura Breidenthal
Date: 8/15/2015 1:00:00 PM
Hurray! This makes me really happy, Christopher. Can't wait to check out your poetry! ~Laura
Date: 8/15/2015 9:11:00 AM
Laura, this is a very powerful write, filled foreboding omens. You and Silent One did a great collab together. It is seamless. Good luck in the contest.
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Laura Breidenthal
Date: 8/15/2015 12:59:00 PM
Many thanks, Eileen. You're very kind! Silent One and I had a blast. He is a very sweet and thoughtful poet and inspires me greatly. It was an honor to collaborate with him again. ~Laura
Date: 8/15/2015 8:53:00 AM
Laura, I enjoyed reading this collaboration. You and Silent One did a great job! Congrats on getting the poem of the day. :-)Alexis
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Laura Breidenthal
Date: 8/15/2015 12:56:00 PM
Thanks Alexis!! It is always a joy to receive such positive feedback. Thank you for readin! ~Laura
Date: 8/15/2015 7:50:00 AM
Love the collaboration, congratulations on poem of the day hugs eve
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Laura Breidenthal
Date: 8/15/2015 12:54:00 PM
Hello Eve! Thanks for the love! : )~Laura
Date: 8/14/2015 10:07:00 PM
Castles are special places. They were the homes of the royal class. They were built on the backs of the serfs whose work supported them. As for what happened inside, your imagination and words ring true. And so, today we all do stand at the entrance of a proverbial castle--there is no doubt at all. We have choices to make all the time. Many of them are dark choices and even those which appear not to be...who knows for sure. Will history repeat for each of us? This is very good Laura!!
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Laura Breidenthal
Date: 8/15/2015 12:53:00 PM
Thanks! I always appreciate your thoughts. Silent One and I had a lot of fun writing this. I'm glad it appealed to you. :) ~Laura
Date: 8/13/2015 6:54:00 AM
Okay Laura . . . I already read this one from Silent One's post (and marked it a 7 + FAV). (You should read my comments there in toto!!) Suffice it to say, you two very talented poets together have hit another magnificent home run with this eerie dark tale. Best of Luck in the contest. An extraordinary collaboration again!! A 7 + FAV again here in my book!! Cheers and Best Wishes Always, Gary
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Laura Breidenthal
Date: 8/14/2015 7:53:00 PM
I am truly looking forward to it! ~Laura
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Gary Bateman
Date: 8/14/2015 5:47:00 AM
Hello Laura, As Halloween approaches I will start posting over time some gems of horror similar to what I did last year during Sept-Oct. I'll have to see what kind of Fangoria I can come up with for Halloween 2015!! I'm presently sharpening my Fangs and Talons for this budding creative experience!! Get Ready!! Best Always, Gary
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Laura Breidenthal
Date: 8/13/2015 6:11:00 PM
Thank you for such sweet support Gary. By the way, I absolutely love your spooky poems!!! I can't wait to read more from your page today! ~Laura