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For the last time but as if for the first time, let blaze a five alarm thrill to burn my woe; I'll shiver with a tingle like your wind chime, and forget the lonely nights you left me fallow. For the last time but as if for the first time, let passion’s kiss charm the tremble from my lips. Woo me with your physical rhythm and rhyme, I'll let the pain, by the pleasure, be eclipsed. For the last time but as if for the first time, let pour your hot choc’late voice and spill my name. as we entwine, your body and mine, sublime, such a shame your straying flame I could not tame. For the last time but as if for the first time, wander with wonder my hazel green eyes.. tell me your love wasn't just satiric mime, say you still love me; your prettiest of lies. Susan Ashley October 9, 2017 ~ Third Place ~ For: Best Rhyming Poem September - October 2017 Sponsor: John Hamilton ~ Poem of the Week ~ beginning week of Sunday, October 15, 2017

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Lindsay Laurie

Date: 9/18/2018 7:30:00 PM

G'day Susan … not only did your beaut poem great, but each time I read it, very lyrical - wonderful - Lindsay

Susan Ashley
Date: 9/19/2018 12:02:00 PM

Thank you so much, Lindsay, for your beautiful comments. I'm so pleased that you enjoyed my poem. Your precious thoughts and delightful visit are both deeply appreciated. Warmest wishes. ~Susan

Joe Dimino

Date: 4/26/2018 9:16:00 PM

Sad and heartbreaking in ways it may be, but we either take from people what they can give, or go elsewhere. And elsewhere, as you know, may be nowhere. So, I guess this is where unconditional love enters. As you say, it is not always entirely fulfilling for both. Great writing, Susan. Amazing insight.

Susan Ashley
Date: 4/28/2018 9:48:00 PM

Hi Joe, I agree with your wonderful comments but there's such a fine line between giving unconditional love and being taken advantage of.. I think the speaker of this poem's love was being badly taken advantage of, so the cad does not deserve unconditional love, in my humble opinion.. I think she should dry her tears and dump him lol! Thank you for your insightful comments. Your visit is always a delight. Warmest wishes. ~Susan

Faraz Ajmal

Date: 3/8/2018 6:29:00 AM

Oh it s a really beautiful poem,a really beautiful one and an enjoyable one to read, congrats on your well deserve win, it s indeed a beauty

Susan Ashley
Date: 3/9/2018 7:35:00 PM

Thank you so much Faraz for your beautiful comments. Your precious thoughts and delightful visit are both deeply appreciated. warmest wishes. ~Susan

Arturo Michael

Date: 12/5/2017 4:38:00 AM

Passion galore...Once shared can go on forever...How are you today?All the best Susan.Sending positive vibrations...with lots of sunshine

Susan Ashley
Date: 12/5/2017 5:31:00 AM

Oh Arturo, thank you for your generous gifts of positive vibes and abundant sunshine that's given from your golden heart and soul. Let me beam bright wishes back to you as I reflect in your joyous glow. Thank you mon ami for your inspiring words and lovely visit, I appreciate your friendship greatly. Warmest wishes and hugs today and always. ~Susan

Paul Callus

Date: 11/25/2017 2:22:00 PM

Your pen never lets you down, Susan...but how can it...it's hard for a real poet to go astray! ~ That first time is still very vivid in the mind; is she really ready to let go? Lovely rhyming, as usual it comes very natural to you. Congratulations on this deserved win. Warm regards // paul

Susan Ashley
Date: 11/25/2017 7:14:00 PM

Paul, I appreciate your thoughtful and poetic musings always... Your gracious words of praise and congrats is heartwarming coming from a poet I so admire and they are received with a joyful heart.. warmest wishes ~Susan

Gregory Richard Barden

Date: 11/7/2017 5:54:00 AM

Congratulations on your well-deserved win, Susan - nicely done, my friend! :-)

Susan Ashley
Date: 11/25/2017 4:55:00 PM

Gregory, I apologize for my delay in responding.. Thank you, kind friend, for your warm congratulations and your wonderful comment. I always appreciate your lovely visits. My warmest regards ~Susan

Vijay Pandit

Date: 11/7/2017 5:41:00 AM

Congrats Susan on your well deserved top win!

Susan Ashley
Date: 11/7/2017 7:54:00 PM

Thank you so much Vijay. Your kindness is so appreciated! ~Susan

Janice Canerdy

Date: 11/6/2017 10:17:00 PM

Congratulations on your win with this expressive, bittersweet poem, Susan! Janice

Susan Ashley
Date: 11/7/2017 7:54:00 PM

Thank you Janice. I'm happy your enjoyed my poem and I appreciate your kind words.. ~Susan

John Gondolf

Date: 11/6/2017 8:42:00 PM

Susan, congrats on this beautiful, sensual, sad love story. John

Susan Ashley
Date: 11/6/2017 9:07:00 PM

John, thank you for your lovely comment and warm congrats! ~Susan

Dale Gregory Cozart

Date: 11/6/2017 8:25:00 PM

Congrats, Susan!

Susan Ashley
Date: 11/6/2017 8:32:00 PM

Thank you Dale! ~Susan

John Hamilton

Date: 11/6/2017 7:59:00 PM

I loved this the first time I read it, better the second read, congrats Susan on a fine win!

Susan Ashley
Date: 11/6/2017 8:06:00 PM

Thank you John for such a fine placement. It's a thrill for me to be among the other fine poets on your winners' list and for you to think so highly of my poem. It was a joy to compete in your contest.. ~Susan

Eve Roper

Date: 11/6/2017 7:54:00 PM

Susan, congratulations on your win! Hugs Eve ~`*

Susan Ashley
Date: 11/6/2017 8:00:00 PM

Thank you so much Eve for your kind visit and congrats. Hugs to you.. ~Susan

Elizabeth Kinch

Date: 11/6/2017 8:33:00 AM

Am coming back to PS after a while. Really enjoyed this write of yours and so glad you got POTW with it, well deserved.

Susan Ashley
Date: 11/6/2017 8:09:00 PM

Elizabeth, thank you for your wonderful visit and kind comment. Your warmhearted words are so appreciated and it's such a pleasure to see you on my poetry page. My very warmest regards.. ~Susan

Darlene De Beaulieu

Date: 10/25/2017 9:05:00 PM

Susan, this is a great poem of sadness is what i read. I am glad that you won. have a nice evening my friend.

Susan Ashley
Date: 10/25/2017 9:25:00 PM

Thank you so much Darlene for your appreciation of my sad lost love poem. Your very warm words and kind congrats mean a lot to me. Thank you for sharing your wonderful thoughts... and please have a lovely evening also my friend! ~Susan

John Hamilton

Date: 10/23/2017 12:46:00 AM

Back with belated congrats on POTW, a great honor, and you deserve it Susan!

Susan Ashley
Date: 10/23/2017 6:49:00 PM

Thank you so much John. I appreciate your time and your very warmhearted words. I felt extremely honored, especially because I never expected it. I was really quite thrilled.., actually I still am..lol! Thank you my friend, for being so encouraging and supportive of my poetry and always giving me a reason to smile when you visit my page :) ~Susan

Connie Marcum Wong

Date: 10/22/2017 12:37:00 PM

This is amazing Susan! Congratulations on your Poet of the Week honor! : )

Susan Ashley
Date: 10/22/2017 5:45:00 PM

Connie, thank you so very much for your very kind and warmhearted comment and congrats. I appreciate your wonderful visit and your thoughtful words. ~Susan

Sheila Sacks

Date: 10/22/2017 4:13:00 AM

Susan, the last verse blew me away...such pain and hurt expressed! I felt it deeply. It was such a pleasure to read your wonderful poem and congrats on the well-deserved POTW!

Susan Ashley
Date: 10/22/2017 5:50:00 PM

Sheila, thank you for your very warmhearted response to my poem. I'm so happy you enjoyed it. I so appreciate your wonderful comment and kind congrats and I thank you for sharing your time and thoughts with me. ~Susan

Maria Williams

Date: 10/20/2017 2:33:00 AM

Susan you have such a way with words and your unique poetic flair that us poets can take a cue from. I love the sensual nostalgia that runs through it. Congratulations on POTW, the honours well deserved...Maria

Susan Ashley
Date: 10/20/2017 8:20:00 AM

Maria, you can't imagine how much your wonderful words mean to me. I hold you and your poetry in such high regard and I appreciate so very much you taking the time to read and comment so positively about my poetry. My sincerest thank you for your beautiful comment and warmhearted congrats. My very warmest regards always... ~Susan

Alexis Y.

Date: 10/19/2017 12:24:00 PM

Hi Susan, I see why you got such an honor. It was so well written. And your content and rhymes were excellent. Congratulations on getting the poem of week. It was well deserved:-) Alexis

Susan Ashley
Date: 10/20/2017 8:16:00 AM

Alexis, my deepest appreciation for you taking the time to read my poem and comment so kindly and beautifully about it. Thank you so much for your wonderful feedback and sincere congrats. My warmest regards always... ~Susan

Janis Thompson

Date: 10/19/2017 10:55:00 AM

Very deep thoughts Susan with a haunting refrain. Congratulations on your honor.

Susan Ashley
Date: 10/20/2017 8:12:00 AM

Janis, your wonderfully kind words and sincere congrats are so appreciated and I thank you for taking the time to read my poem and share your thoughts with me. Warmest regards always... ~Susan

Silent One

Date: 10/19/2017 6:38:00 AM

You are one of the best wordsmiths on Poetry Soup, your poetry should be read by many others, it will help people to develop their poetry skills.. To me poetry is about how words are combined, and you to that perfectly... You are one of my most favourite poets..

Susan Ashley
Date: 10/20/2017 8:09:00 AM

Humbly, I thank you Silent One for your appreciation of my poetry, your high praise and for sharing your treasured thoughts with me. I am astounded, pleased and so honored to know that I am on your list of your most favorite poets... You, most definitely are one of my most favorite poets as well! My warmest and sincerest regards always... ~Susan

Silent One

Date: 10/18/2017 2:21:00 PM

An excellent flowing rhyming poem.. Congrats on POTW..

Susan Ashley
Date: 10/18/2017 8:38:00 PM

Silent One, I was so surprised (shocked...) when I saw that I was awarded POTW honors... Thank you for the warmhearted congrats, your wonderful visit and your lovely comment. Your visits are always so appreciated! ~Susan

Daniel Turner

Date: 10/16/2017 2:57:00 PM

Wonderful write, Susan. Yes, the things we do for love. I think, when two people are really in love, every time is like the first time. Congratulations on POTW:)

Susan Ashley
Date: 10/16/2017 7:41:00 PM

Hi Daniel, thank you for your kind visit, your wonderful comment and your warmhearted congrats. I truly appreciate you sharing your thoughts with me. Warmest regards :) ~Susan

Carole Duet

Date: 10/15/2017 9:23:00 PM

Hi Susan! I love this one...so sensual, so honest, so real. How many "last times" have we said "for the last time"? Another FAV for my collection. :)

Susan Ashley
Date: 10/15/2017 9:53:00 PM

Hi Carole, it such a pleasure to receive your wonderful compliments. I'm thrilled that you enjoyed my poem. Thank you so very much for your kind visit, warmhearted comment and the fav. Much appreciation for your time and for sharing your thoughts with me. ~Susan

Jan Allison

Date: 10/15/2017 12:14:00 PM

such bittersweet love Susan the sad ending reminds me of sweet little lies by Fleetwood Mac. Many congrats on POTW:-) hugs jan xx

Susan Ashley
Date: 10/15/2017 6:30:00 PM

Thank you Jan for your kind visit and lovely words of praise for my poem as well as a warm congrats for POTW. I was so surprised! I appreciate your warmhearted comment very much and, yes, I do remember 'Sweet Little Lies', I was in high school when that song was a hit lol! Long time ago..... wow! :) ~Susan