For Now

In a melancholic haze slow moving breath is laboured through this time heavy days that are numbered till by this thick air between us I am unencumbered till I can love you my passion present you my zenith before you I will bloom with the power of Venus

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Tom Rutherford

Date: 10/23/2017 6:18:00 PM

Wonderfully written Maureen, I can feel the tension, the longing, the passion. Nicely done!

Maureen McGreavy The Insolent Rib
Date: 10/23/2017 8:55:00 PM

Thank you Tom :) xomo!

Winged Warrior

Date: 10/22/2017 10:06:00 AM

Well penned my lady friend...for now lol...god bless...^WW^

Maureen McGreavy The Insolent Rib
Date: 10/22/2017 10:48:00 PM

Lol! ;p Thankya xomo!

Chuck Melugin

Date: 10/22/2017 8:21:00 AM

And bloom you did! I am in awe of your "Moment" My best to you, chuck

Maureen McGreavy The Insolent Rib
Date: 10/22/2017 8:29:00 AM

Thank you so much Chuck, a lovely day to you! xomo :)

Mike Hauser

Date: 10/21/2017 8:07:00 AM

Beautiful!

Maureen McGreavy The Insolent Rib
Date: 10/21/2017 8:38:00 AM

Thank you Mike :) xomo!

Demetrios Trifiatis

Date: 10/21/2017 7:55:00 AM

Venus emerges from the sea of beauty when the worthy one appears! Excellent writing my friend, Maureen! I am certain he will appreciate what he would see!

Maureen McGreavy The Insolent Rib
Date: 10/21/2017 8:38:00 AM

Thank you so much Demetrios, bless! xomo <3

Russell Sivey

Date: 10/21/2017 7:09:00 AM

This is an exciting write, full of the zenith of words and love! Passion carries this poem through the haze and will someday reach its destination! What a beautifully written piece, Great Work!!

Maureen McGreavy The Insolent Rib
Date: 10/21/2017 7:41:00 AM

Destination passion rabbit hole, only the poetry survived :) Thank you so much Russell, a wonderful day to you! xomo

James Swartz

Date: 10/20/2017 11:04:00 PM

This is a wonderful piece Maureen. The wants of the heart play tricks on the mind. Or is it the other way around? Maybe one day someone will have an answer I can believe. For now I'm satisfied reading your words.

Maureen McGreavy The Insolent Rib
Date: 10/21/2017 6:51:00 AM

Oh the tricks, so well stated James; this s an older poem and so much of the emotional chaos of that time can be summed up in your question. Theses words what I've got to show for it. :) Thank you James, I really appreciate your words xomo!