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For France- For Contest

Bombs and guns scythe through the innocent
writ in spattered blood evil intent
from youth's garden, saplings gone.
But staunchly rising from the killing floor
Liberty retakes the tricolour
strides a nation, marches on.


25th November 2015
For contest ' For Paris', sponsored by Debbie Guzzi
Written in Rime Couee form.

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Poet Destroyer A

Date: 1/9/2016 2:23:00 PM

Viv, Congratulations on your awesome win. LINDA

Viv Wigley
Date: 1/11/2016 1:18:00 AM

Thanks, Linda. One of the more sombre contests, but good contributions from everyone. Viv x

Teddy Kimathi

Date: 1/6/2016 5:32:00 AM

I like the last two lines - they express stubborn hope.... Congrats for your WIN Viv! ;-)

Viv Wigley
Date: 1/6/2016 6:34:00 AM

Thanks, Teddy. let's hope there are no further such occurences, we can only live in hope. Regards, Viv

Kim Merryman

Date: 1/5/2016 2:14:00 PM

Stunning metaphors, Viv! You packed so much into one stanza! Well done! Congrats on your win! Love, Kim

Viv Wigley
Date: 1/6/2016 6:35:00 AM

Thanks, Kim, I didn't want to dwell on it too much. Happy New year, by the way, to you and yours, Viv x

Sandra Haight

Date: 1/4/2016 3:43:00 PM

Nicely done with great metaphor, Viv. Congrats on your well-deserved podium win. Sandra

Viv Wigley
Date: 1/5/2016 12:27:00 AM

Thanks, Sandra. A terrible shame that we had to compose such verse at all. Viv x

Skat A

Date: 1/4/2016 10:08:00 AM

Viv. CONGRATULATIONS on your win. HugS *SKAT*

Debbie Guzzi

Date: 1/3/2016 7:58:00 PM

Excellent use of metaphor! Thanks for the entry Viv Congrad's Light & Love

Viv Wigley
Date: 1/4/2016 6:33:00 AM

Thanks, Debbie, enjoyed the challenge and the form. Happy new year. Viv x

Barbara Gorelick

Date: 1/3/2016 1:16:00 PM

I like the simple take on this...the last two lines are so important. Congrats Viv on writing such a fine piece. BG

Viv Wigley
Date: 1/4/2016 6:34:00 AM

Thanks, Barbara, I quite like the form. Will use it again, I'm sure. Viv x

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 12/4/2015 7:37:00 PM

I am glad to see a short one like this done for the contest. It's well done and not a lot of description about the actual details of what occurred. VERY nicely done.

Viv Wigley
Date: 12/5/2015 1:22:00 AM

Sometimes things happen that leave one lost for words, as in this case, so I kept it simple. Thamks for the comment, Andrea, Viv x

Lindsay Laurie

Date: 12/1/2015 5:22:00 PM

Hello Viv... the situation is hard to comprehend Viv, so your poem does make a fine tribute to France - Lindsay

Viv Wigley
Date: 12/2/2015 12:34:00 AM

Yes, sadly, this one is going to take some sorting out, if ever. Should you ever win the lotto, stay right where you are. Much safer. Apart from the spiders. Oh, and the Crocs. And the snakes. And... Regards, Viv

Matthew Anish

Date: 11/27/2015 11:29:00 PM

Nice tribute to the French spirit! Peace & Blessings Matthew Anish

Viv Wigley
Date: 11/28/2015 1:07:00 AM

Thanks, Matthew. Regards, Viv

Wilma Neels

Date: 11/25/2015 11:54:00 AM

This is a beautiful tribute of that sad event Viv.. good luck for the contest ;)

James Inman

Date: 11/25/2015 6:01:00 AM

You try to understand how someone can be so disillusioned by life as to want to do something so horrid as to randomly kill innocent people, I can't. Nice write, Viv.

Viv Wigley
Date: 11/25/2015 7:46:00 AM

In this impoerfect world, we will always have evil with us, but we shall never let it become our master. This is what stops us locking ourselves indoors. Thanks for the visit, James, appreciate it. Regards, Viv