John Hamilton Poet Verse

Foolish Whims Scatter

Foolish whims scatter

I played at life, but life played me harder,
Lived bet to debt, in life's Russian roulette
I place a wager, speed into danger
My foolish whims, scatter in mistral winds
Now tossed by waves, by blind forces of fate
How they orchestrate, time, distance and place

For bite size poetry contest
Line Gautier

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Richard Lamoureux October 19, 2023 at 7:50 AM You are good at these. I enjoyed both bites this morning. John Hamilton October 19, 2023 at 10:52 AM Thanks Rick for your kind visits.

Susan Ashley October 13, 2023 at 6:47 PM Dear John, I recognize this bite size gem! :) Perfect for Line's contest. The imagery in this shorter piece easily stands alone. Congratulations for your wonderful first place win. Warmest wishes my friend.. ~Susan John Hamilton October 13, 2023 at 7:42 PM Thanks Susan yeah the song is pretty recognizable and of course you would catch it. Thanks for seeing it's merit as a stand alone poem.

Joanna Daniel October 13, 2023 at 6:12 PM Small, yet powerful, John, congratulations:) John Hamilton October 13, 2023 at 7:41 PM Thanks Jo nice to have you pass by today thanks for the kind words!

Karen Jones October 12, 2023 at 10:13 PM Congrats on your first place win. John Hamilton October 13, 2023 at 7:40 PM Thanks Karen

Sam Kauffman October 12, 2023 at 4:29 PM Congratulations on your win, John. These lines literally sing as you make such a perceptive commentary on the ways our choices influence our life! Your interior rhymes are so inventive. They really help to carry the cadence of the poem. So happy for your win! Blessings! John Hamilton October 12, 2023 at 6:51 PM Thanks Sam I'm glad you liked it and came by today with your words of support I always appreciate your visits.

Malabika Ray Choudhury October 12, 2023 at 3:23 PM Congratulations, John, on your top win. A stunning poem with deep thoughts and subtle wordplay! John Hamilton October 12, 2023 at 6:50 PM Thanks Malabika for your kind words and visit.

Lin Lane October 12, 2023 at 8:50 AM Hi, JD and congratulations on your winning lines. It's foolish and dangerous to tempt fate when she always has the upper hand. We know the harm of giving in to temptation. I'm delighted to see you posting again. John Hamilton October 12, 2023 at 1:56 PM Thanks Lin yeah feels good to write again, I'm working on a few things but some contests spur on the muse as they say. Nice to have you pass by my way!

Ink Empress October 12, 2023 at 5:17 AM Your opening line is so good! Drew me right in. This feels like a very sincere write and your wordplay is absolutely stunning and so creative! Such profound depth in your lines and i love the line “ Now tossed by waves, by blind forces of fate“ whoa! So good! I can see why this is a top winner! Truly this is soul hitting John Hamilton October 12, 2023 at 1:54 PM Thanks IE, I'm so pleased you liked it enough to visit and leave a great comment, I do appreciate your kind words.

Joseph May October 12, 2023 at 3:26 AM Our actions determine our fate, yet some say it's preordained, Very nicely penned John John Hamilton October 12, 2023 at 1:53 PM Thanks Joseph I agree with you, choices affect outcomes as stressed in the write.

Fading Star Silence October 7, 2023 at 1:09 PM Wow! So many words here that I adore..”mistral” “orchestrate” and the flow and rhymes here so flawlessly woven! The meaning behind your poem to life truly speaks volumes, feeling all your words, the imagery drowns me in the depth and rawness of this piece! A truly unforgettable piece, leaving me awestruck! John Hamilton October 7, 2023 at 1:58 PM Wow I don't know what's better the poem or your enthusiastic comment. Coming from you means a lot. I'm more a songwriter so poetry is harder for me but I enjoy these contests so I give it a try. Thanks so much for your kind words and first visit.

Charlotte Puddifoot October 6, 2023 at 2:11 PM great use of internal rhyme in this; a strong entry for the contest..thanks for your comments on my work, always nice to hear from you :) John Hamilton October 6, 2023 at 2:52 PM Thanks Charlotte for passing by, yes I like rhyme, makes the write feel more melodic. I appreciate your kind words and visit it means more than you know!

Silent One October 6, 2023 at 12:06 PM Great use of words here John, nice to see you post a poem that is not a song... deep thoughts here. John Hamilton October 6, 2023 at 2:50 PM Secret...this is an excerpt from a song, so I guess it's a poem. Thanks for your kind visit and comment it means a lot to me!

Sandra Adams October 5, 2023 at 5:57 PM i really like this one John... life is a gamble, everything in life, everything we do has an outcome, sometimes fate helps us win, sometimes it's a lesson that breaks us... best wishes in the contest! I think it's a great entry! hugs John Hamilton October 6, 2023 at 2:49 PM Thanks Sandy glad you enjoyed it, and thanks for your kind visit and comment.