Folds of Green Brocade

An interval of quietude; she sleeps,
caressed by copper curls in silk cascade.
Observing beauty in her calm, he weeps,
remorseful of impassioned hands he laid.

From searching eyes, secluded pain she hides,
within her mind, love's solemn vow replayed.
Through purest skin, dark cast of anger rides,
wrapped safely 'neath soft folds of green brocade.

Breath falls, as into endless void she slips,
unable to withstand the next tirade.
A tear-stained note in resting hand she grips,
'My love, forgive the final choice I made'





03/20/2009
I decided to resurrect this write after reading The Highlander's excellent poem 'She Internally Weeps'.
A similar theme but quite a different outcome.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2010



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Date: 8/30/2010 3:55:00 PM
ahhhhhhhh romance! lovely! sad Ophelia. Light & Love
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Date: 7/3/2010 5:52:00 PM
Reading this has been like reading it for the first time--that last line of yours definitely stabs at the heart--wow yet again! I still could picture the painting that inspired this write--- and hmmm that's really fishy that your writes keep missing--I bet you they're all going to the Land of Lost Writes--maybe the Enchanted Tree will go there this week ;) thanks btw for your comments on my double etheree -smiles as I read it--it's really great to find wonderful friends here as well :D-- nikko:)
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Date: 7/2/2010 9:42:00 PM
Excellent very Excellent! Congratulations on being featured. Rhonda Hero
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Date: 7/2/2010 3:00:00 AM
Congratulations on your poem being featured on homepage this week...Excellent work..I could go several ways with the conclusion...Sara
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Date: 6/29/2010 11:25:00 AM
Congratulations on your terrific poetry being featured this week Sharon. Love, Carol
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Date: 6/28/2010 8:00:00 PM
Congrats Sharon on your featured poem this week on the Soup.. an excellent choice to share with us ...with luv from the "Sweetheart" in Hawaii..
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Date: 6/28/2010 11:00:00 AM
Hey, this is a wonderful piece; enjoy the honor of having your poem being featured this week. Please, keep your pen alive and keep up the great work!. You are great! Love, ~Adeleke.
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Date: 6/28/2010 10:47:00 AM
Many congrats on your wonderful feature this week. Rgds Janette
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Date: 6/27/2010 1:51:00 AM
Heartbreaking yet so beautiful. .deep indeed!
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Date: 6/25/2010 2:30:00 PM
Sharon, the poems title is "Terrific" and the write that follows it is excellent. Blimey, it's good to see I am useful and my poem resurrected this masterpiece. Am I glad you posted this, you bet >> James,xx
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Date: 6/25/2010 2:09:00 PM
Sad that there is abuse in relationships and unhappiness in relationships that cause suicide sometimes and death at the hand of the abuser...Many more suffer emotional and mental abuse of a worse kind...Great write ..Sara
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Date: 6/25/2010 10:01:00 AM
sharon, I'm in a rush to get off now. I appreciate you reading my sijo. There is one other without u,m or e. Could you check it out and tell me the better one? With just these simple entries, I know I stand little chance of placing high,but I hope to at least submit the better of the two. thanks! andrea
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Date: 6/25/2010 9:22:00 AM
What a way with words you have, Sharon. The story is a sad one, but so beautifully expressed. The last line made me teary-eyed. Well done! So glad you decided to share your talent with the Soup community. Love, Carolyn
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Date: 6/25/2010 8:06:00 AM
wow, this is very sad and beautiful. I can think of two interpretations for what I am reading. But I believe she killed herself? My other thought was that the note contained HIS words in her hand. But they are hers, right? I love the imagery of the green brocade, hiding her anger! Glad you caught the fact I remember the "feeling" and not the beast (in my memory )I just can't decide if I saw a wolf or a boar! Probably something else entirely. I've chalked that memory up to my morbid curiosity!
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Date: 6/25/2010 7:50:00 AM
Another beauty from your talented pen, Sharon. This is wonderful, as if watching a tragic yet beautiful play. Nicely done! Love, Carrie
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Date: 6/25/2010 4:21:00 AM
You described their pain so delicately...excellent writing Sharon! Kisses, Emily
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Date: 6/25/2010 2:26:00 AM
This is just beautiful Sharon. It creates the image and conveys the helplessness brilliantly. Best Regards Paul
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