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Fluidic Flight

Flying around so dextrously Her wee heart beating rapidly Humming about excitedly O sweet water levitate me Her wings impossible to see Form a blurry consistency On whim of a scent she will flee O sweet water levitate me Slow motion will reveal esprit Sideways or three sixty degree Her nuanced bluffs forever free O sweet water levitate me Overcoming earths gravity Light as a summer breeze is she My thirst now slaked subjectively O sweet nectar levitate me A KYRIELLE ABOUT WATER Poetry Contest Sponsored by: Kim Rodrigues How many syllables 16x8 08/25/22

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Sam Kauffman

Date: 10/3/2022 10:08:00 AM

What a lovely poem of lyrical flight David. Congratulations! I have a hummingbird feeder outside my office window and delight in watching these acrobats feed. If this feeder gets empty, the hummingbirds in our yard sit on top of the birch trees and scold me! Thank you for this most delightful picture of hummingbirds! Cheers!

David Kavanagh
Date: 10/3/2022 12:09:00 PM

Who’d of thought the hummingbirds would ever get grumpy Sam, they really must enjoy the cuisine you’re feeding them lol, I was watching them on tv flying in super slow motion through a rain shower, the pictures were incredible, it gave me the idea for this one, thank you so much for stopping by, cheers David

Christuraj Alex

Date: 9/25/2022 10:10:00 PM

"Her wings impossible to see Form a blurry consistency" - Beautifully written. Congratulations!

David Kavanagh
Date: 9/30/2022 3:33:00 AM

Thank you Chris, your beautiful comments are always appreciated and welcome, cheers David

Linda Alice Fowler

Date: 9/24/2022 7:45:00 AM

Ooh, I really like this one David. Congratulations on your win! Linda

David Kavanagh
Date: 9/30/2022 3:32:00 AM

Thank you Linda, the hummingbird showing off her flying prowess in the rain, cheers David

Kim Rodrigues

Date: 9/24/2022 7:15:00 AM

Loved the whimsy so uplifing… Sideways or three sixty degree! Congratulations, David!

David Kavanagh
Date: 9/30/2022 3:30:00 AM

Thank you Kim I’m delighted with the placement in your wonderful contest, cheers David

Unseeking Seeker

Date: 8/31/2022 8:02:00 PM

‘levitate me’ ~ a fluidic flight ethereal!

David Kavanagh
Date: 9/1/2022 12:27:00 AM

Watching the hummingbird is even better in slow motion, an uplifting ethereal experience, cheers David

Michael Tor

Date: 8/28/2022 8:01:00 PM

Love your descriptions of Fluidic flight David. Nicely written incorporating unique visual actions of flying. Thanks for sharing...

David Kavanagh
Date: 8/29/2022 2:07:00 AM

Not my usual style Michael but every now and then I try a challenge outside my comfort zone, Kim’s contest seemed like a good one to attempt, cheers David