Floating Candies

In the aquamarine tranquil sea,
a  huge torpedo ,shot right at me,
super King was its size,
stinky scent of  dead mice,
Brown spots on my new  white bikini.


Charma

(Not for the contest,inspired by Caroline's limerick's  sea contest..and by a true 
story,twisted to a tale:)


Ps.I don't know if this passes for a limerick,If it does,this would be my first:)


(I could see the relief on the red cheeked boy's face and feel his Victory over
my death:)

Copyright © | Year Posted 2010



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Date: 2/28/2010 6:50:00 AM
Kool Limerick Charmaine, made me chuckle >> James
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Date: 2/27/2010 7:43:00 PM
Thankxxx my dear friend Charma for your blog comments about the winter weather.. I have a new blog tonight about SOUP SITE WOES ..last night getting knocked off in the middle of their maintenance project.. it was very annoying too.. lots of poets complained on the blog.. so feel free to chime in and thankxxx...luv.. Linda-Marie.. glad u like my latest new photo.. Ron took it when he was here to have for his own personal stuff.. luv.."Sweetheart" of P.S.
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Date: 2/27/2010 6:22:00 PM
Charma I get it and it's hilarious!!! LOL Yes it's a wonderful Limerick...Marty
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Date: 2/27/2010 11:04:00 AM
Underlying meaning my sweet friend Charma.. and I get it.. a great Limerick and u should enter it in the contest for u are extremely talented... thankxxx for your so special comments on my poetry and congrats on my winnings this week on Soup... my dear treasured friend.. luv.. Linda-Marie..
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Date: 2/27/2010 10:16:00 AM
Recomment Dear Doris;),it was about two summers ago,the wind was coming towards me,i was swimming and floating poo passed in front of my nose..geeeeeeee,bad experience indeed..few metres away allthere was,was a boy and his mum,so i bet it was him:)Charma
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Date: 2/27/2010 8:21:00 AM
Charma, this is quite the "true" tale. My goodness! And yes, I would say this is a limerick. You have the meter pretty good, correct number of syllables and the rhyming pattern all in place. You have done your first limerick! Glad you liked my Charle one. Luv, Andrea
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Date: 2/27/2010 7:50:00 AM
enjoyed reading today!! funny, did you get hit with a toy?
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Date: 2/27/2010 6:20:00 AM
I enjoyed that.
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Date: 2/27/2010 5:53:00 AM
hmm sounds like a jellyfish swam on the shore:) cute limerick Charma. I'm having trouble grasping who the red cheeked boy is and how he fits in all of this...
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Date: 2/27/2010 5:42:00 AM
You do make me smile lady Thanks Daniel
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Date: 2/27/2010 3:41:00 AM
Nice work Charma, this one made me laugh...Raul
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