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Flight 4u 9525

(tragic flight 4U 9525)

banging on a door
in vain; in desperation
cries rose franticly; 
deaf to all, beyond the door, 
he slowly aimed the nose down

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Contest: One New Tanka
Sponsor: Rick Parise
2nd April, 2015

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Andrea Dietrich

April 28, 2015 at 4:12 PM

Like the crash itself, this poem leaves an IMPACT. Strong stuff. I really like it, Paul.

Paul Callus

April 29, 2015 at 3:25 PM

Glad you liked this one, Andrea. // Still making my way back slowly to Soup:) All the best. // paul

James Fraser

April 5, 2015 at 2:21 PM

I still can't believe how calculated this person was to have done what he did. So so sad :( All the best in Rick's contest, reads like another winner // James....

Paul Callus

April 5, 2015 at 3:06 PM

You are correct, James. A person's mind is a complicated thing; hard to understand how it reacts under pressure. A calculated move does not necessarily imply that it is a clear move. (Thank you for the faith you show in my Tanka, but I'm not expecting to be on the winners' list....) // paul

Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser

April 5, 2015 at 1:55 AM

that's a horrible tragic sad even that I 'm praying I;'ll never be in.. great!//olive eloisa

Paul Callus

April 5, 2015 at 10:04 AM

Yes, it was a very tragic incident that effected the lives of many; we'll be flying with an uneasy feeling:( hugs // paul

Viv Wigley

April 4, 2015 at 2:06 AM

Just when I think that your work can't get any more gooderer, Paul, it gets gooderer. One of your gooderest. Difficult to encapsulate terror and hold the moment in 5 lines, but you pulled it off. Good luck, not that you need it. Regards, Viv. Ps- my grammar is improving slowerer but suriest.

Viv Wigley

April 4, 2015 at 8:44 AM

You mean it's getting 'grammerer'. Come on, Paul, get in the groove. Or get grooverer :)

Paul Callus

April 4, 2015 at 8:19 AM

Thank you Viv! You are too kind! Better 'gooderest' than 'badderest'! see, even my grammar is improving:) // paul