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~ Recognized ... I see you, pitiful ... Bleak as the dust you dwell There is a black flame in your eyes Searing a hole in my recollections, dour Sinews trembling with the weight of broken bets Deafening, the scratch and scrapes of claws on hope The torn flesh of miracles the only witness Hung cold on the hook of hapless horrors Hiding, slithering under this child's bed Waiting for sweet little legs to dangle I am no longer that easy meat So, drink my poison, beast Choke on it. ~

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Andrea Dietrich

Date: 7/28/2019 1:23:00 PM

this one is very deep, Greg. As always, it has great thought put into it and I love the second verse of conquering one's fears (hope I got that right). A very meaningfuly write, buddy.

Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 7/28/2019 4:52:00 PM

Thank you so much, Andrea, I so appreciate the kind comments ... this is about child abuse, and I was a bit angry writing it, (especially the second verse). Thank you for appreciating it - that means a lot to me. <3

John Lawless

Date: 6/14/2019 8:44:00 AM

...some multi-layered metaphor lurking here Gregory. Beautifully written in a sweeping shape that enhances the mystery and darkness

Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 6/15/2019 7:43:00 AM

Indeed, you are correct, John, this one is an onion of sorts, and I'm so pleased you could see some of the layers! I love to write with ambiguity ... not so much that it's just gibberish, but sensible while deep. Blessings, my friend! :-)

Line Gauthier

Date: 6/14/2019 8:09:00 AM

What an irresistibly beautiful shape, Gregory. Loved your poem, Gregory.

Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 6/15/2019 7:42:00 AM

Many kind thanks, Line, I'm pleased you enjoyed it ... it's rather dark, but ultimately a message of overcoming very deep-seated fears. Blessings! :-) <3

Kim Rodrigues

Date: 6/14/2019 6:13:00 AM

Before I even started reading, I said ooh...just based upon the shape! The poem has great images and seems to me like the dark side of beauty and the beast. So well done! You are the Poetmaster!

Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 6/15/2019 7:40:00 AM

Oh, thank you so much, Kim, I greatly appreciate the kind words, and I'm so pleased you liked this rather dark, forboding poem ... lots of layers here, but a victory of sorts in the end. Blessings! :-) <3