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              ~  
       Recognized ...
   I see you, pitiful ...
 Bleak as the dust you dwell
There is a black flame in your eyes
 Searing a hole in my recollections, dour
   Sinews trembling with the weight of broken bets
       Deafening, the scratch and scrapes of claws on hope

            The torn flesh of miracles the only witness
                Hung cold on the hook of hapless horrors
                  Hiding, slithering under this child's bed
                   Waiting for sweet little legs to dangle
                  I am no longer that easy meat
                So, drink my poison, beast
            Choke on it.
                  ~




Written and submitted on June 14, 2019
For the "What Makes You Flinch" Poetry Contest
Julie Leigh Rodeheaver, Sponsor.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2019




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Date: 7/28/2019 1:23:00 PM
this one is very deep, Greg. As always, it has great thought put into it and I love the second verse of conquering one's fears (hope I got that right). A very meaningfuly write, buddy.
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Gregory R Barden
Date: 7/28/2019 4:52:00 PM
Thank you so much, Andrea, I so appreciate the kind comments ... this is about child abuse, and I was a bit angry writing it, (especially the second verse). Thank you for appreciating it - that means a lot to me. <3
Date: 6/14/2019 8:44:00 AM
...some multi-layered metaphor lurking here Gregory. Beautifully written in a sweeping shape that enhances the mystery and darkness
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Gregory R Barden
Date: 6/15/2019 7:43:00 AM
Indeed, you are correct, John, this one is an onion of sorts, and I'm so pleased you could see some of the layers! I love to write with ambiguity ... not so much that it's just gibberish, but sensible while deep. Blessings, my friend! :-)
Date: 6/14/2019 8:09:00 AM
What an irresistibly beautiful shape, Gregory. Loved your poem, Gregory.
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Gregory R Barden
Date: 6/15/2019 7:42:00 AM
Many kind thanks, Line, I'm pleased you enjoyed it ... it's rather dark, but ultimately a message of overcoming very deep-seated fears. Blessings! :-) <3
Date: 6/14/2019 6:13:00 AM
Before I even started reading, I said ooh...just based upon the shape! The poem has great images and seems to me like the dark side of beauty and the beast. So well done! You are the Poetmaster!
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Gregory R Barden
Date: 6/15/2019 7:40:00 AM
Oh, thank you so much, Kim, I greatly appreciate the kind words, and I'm so pleased you liked this rather dark, forboding poem ... lots of layers here, but a victory of sorts in the end. Blessings! :-) <3