Flapping Away

Flapping Away

Ron said he needed a new place to stay.
From his apartment, he’d be cast away.

I offered my couch, thought he’d stay a week,
not settle down like a well-worn antique.

It wasn’t long before complaints ensued;
my cooking, my clothing – what’s with this dude?

His cigar smell filtered throughout the house;
when drunk each night, he became quite a louse.

Worse yet, Ron spoke of joining in marriage!
Perhaps he sought more cause to disparage.

One morning he woke; all my things were gone.
My support he could no longer count on.

My note on the fridge made my feelings clear;
it was my time to leave, my time to jeer.

I’d have paid money just to see Ron’s face
when he learned his habits I’d not embrace!

“I put YOUR name on the lease. Rent’s due NOW.
To your inane whims, I will not kowtow.

“I gave all I could – feathers in my cap.
This jig’s up; I’ll spread my feathers and flap.”




*Written April 26, 2015 for Tammy’s contest.
Copyright © | Year Posted 2015


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Date: 3/2/2016 7:56:00 AM
What a lovely page with a profound group of words. I am loving every aspect of this piece. Thumbs up friend and a definite 7
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Date: 6/1/2015 8:05:00 PM
I think you were wise to re-group and find a new suitor to share your coop !!! Cute poem, Carolyn !!
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Date: 6/1/2015 11:43:00 AM
Once he got his feet under the table looks like he thought he had found a cosy nest - love the brilliant ending Carolyn - congrats on your win:-) hugs Jan xx
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Date: 5/2/2015 10:05:00 AM
YOU "Do It To It" this is so KQQL
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Date: 4/29/2015 8:12:00 PM
Beautifully expressed an emotional poem. Good luck in the contest. Loved always,my lovely friend,bl
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Date: 4/29/2015 7:59:00 PM
Carolyn, your words were both funny and in places intense, The words "like a well worn antique" had me laughing, well done 7, and thanks for visiting my poem, nearly the same and leaving that very nice comment
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Date: 4/28/2015 11:13:00 PM
Your second stanza made me eager to read on...loved where you took this and how you ended it. I can imagine the look of shock on his face when reading rhe rent was due!
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Carolyn Devonshire
Date: 5/3/2015 12:02:00 PM
Wish I'd been a fly on the wall to see that look, Connie. Thanks for reading.
Date: 4/28/2015 9:10:00 AM
Fly away sweet bird...Feathers in your cap is quite appropriate here. Hilarious my friend! Tim
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Carolyn Devonshire
Date: 5/3/2015 12:07:00 PM
The air's clearer up here. Still flapping :D
Date: 4/27/2015 8:56:00 PM
The descriptive wording and the great imagery bring this piece to life. Your word choices are clever, descriptive, and imaginative. Emile.
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Date: 4/27/2015 6:13:00 PM
Make the louse pay..lovely Tim
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