First Time, Last Fling

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6/24/2024 for Double Double Words to Bubble 2 Poetry Contest sponsored by Joseph May

First time I saw you - I don't recalL. I do remember the light of lunA Radiating upon your lovelinesS, Seeming, like in a picture, to make time halT. Then, years later, the eternal image oF The somber shrinking last trace of you, girL, In a slowly disappearing taxI - Maybe, it will always feel too sooN... Everything must have an endinG.

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Crystol Woods

Date: 6/26/2024 10:02:00 PM

Ah! You wound me with words! Assassinate me with acrostics! You made it seem so easy and effortless to write such a challenging form. I love the 4 words rather than two and you were able to get your point and emotions across in such few words and tight strictures! Amazed... this is enviable. Xo

Crystol Woods
Date: 6/30/2024 8:48:00 AM

Nice!! :)

David Crandall
Date: 6/27/2024 8:49:00 AM

Thanks so much Crystol! I do not mean to do you harm, Though your comments do disarm. Rather, what I'd like to say Is that your praises make my day.

Hilda Greenhough

Date: 6/25/2024 9:30:00 AM

You nailed the acrostic style. The story is enchanting.

David Crandall
Date: 6/25/2024 11:48:00 AM

Thanks Hilda, matching the first and last letters was a challenge, especially the last letters, not that many seem to end in "i"!

Kim Rodrigues

Date: 6/24/2024 11:13:00 AM

Nicely done acrostic, David. The light of luna…the shrinking trace…slowly disappearing.

David Crandall
Date: 6/25/2024 11:49:00 AM

Thanks Kim!