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This was written in collaboration with Rhoda Tripp. The two sonnets were written simultaneously, one by Rhoda and one by myself. They depict the first impressions two people have upon seeing each other for the first time from both the male point of view and the female point of view.

I first saw her sitting at a table,
sipping her coffee at a small café.
Her eyes were brown and her hair was sable
her smile the kind that takes your breath away.

                                        Sitting and minding my own coffee cup,
                                        steam was rising in misty morning air.
                                        His darkened gaze met mine when I looked up;
                                        his smile did curl a face so debonair.

Steam rose from her cup as it met her lips
our eyes convened as I walked down the aisle
this classy lady’s beauty could launch ships
as I passed her by she returned my smile.

                                        Who could not detect his confident air?
                                        his valiant stride like a peacock in plume;
                                        this man with wild wisps of soft windblown hair,
                                        his full lips like tender petals in bloom.

As her smile fades I can’t help but wonder
if her love is pledged to another man
and if we met would lives be asunder
disrupting the balance of life’s own plan.

                                        I chanced a glance; his hand for glints of gold
                                        eyes struggled and suffered a quick debate
                                        a ring on the hand that I longed to hold?
                                        for it would surely determine our fate.

Perhaps I should just admire from afar,
and not let nature’s balance come ajar.

                                        I was lifted without leaving my seat;
                                        it’s easy to love those we never meet.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2018



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Date: 6/16/2018 10:35:00 PM
A very flirty, romantic and compelling collab; congrats on an awesome write to you both!~Che :)
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John Gondolf
Date: 6/17/2018 9:28:00 AM
Thank you, Cheryl, I'm glad you enjoyed it. John
Date: 6/16/2018 9:25:00 PM
Nicely done, John, love the two person tale Hugs Eve ~' *
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John Gondolf
Date: 6/16/2018 10:01:00 PM
Thank you so much, Eve, I’m glad you enjoyed it. John
Date: 6/16/2018 11:07:00 AM
A great collaboration... I bet you are the last line...
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John Gondolf
Date: 6/16/2018 2:16:00 PM
Thanks, Pashang, I appreciate it. John
Date: 6/14/2018 7:14:00 PM
Oh my gosh, it looks like the two will just be ships passing in the night. Darn it. It looks to me like it could become a stunning kind of love. WEll done, you two
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John Gondolf
Date: 6/15/2018 7:03:00 AM
Thank you, Andrea, glad you enjoyed it. I suppose I could have done my final couplet differently but it kind of reflects the person I am. I was always a bit shy. John
Date: 6/14/2018 5:40:00 PM
We usually remember the times when we first see someone this attractive. Rhoda made me giggle when she mentioned checking for a ring. You have written a great collaboration, John and Rhoda! Sonnets are such a delight to read. Hugs, Carolyn
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John Gondolf
Date: 6/15/2018 7:00:00 AM
Thanks, Carolyn, I'm glad you enjoyed it. And btw guys always check for a ring as well, and sometimes they even disregard it if she is wearing a ring. John
Date: 6/13/2018 5:49:00 PM
Terrific write John and Rhoda! Enjoyed the entertaining points of views. Well done.
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John Gondolf
Date: 6/13/2018 7:16:00 PM
Thank you, Cecilia.
Date: 6/13/2018 2:49:00 PM
A brilliant collaboration A masterpiece of words. You work well together. John
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John Gondolf
Date: 6/13/2018 3:05:00 PM
Thanks, Tom, I appreciate it. I enjoyed working with Rhoda on this one. John
Date: 6/13/2018 7:49:00 AM
Excellent ! Both Rhoda and John ! I enjoyed this . Very well done :)
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John Gondolf
Date: 6/13/2018 7:53:00 AM
Thank you so much, Heidi, I appreciate it. John
Date: 6/13/2018 7:47:00 AM
Thank you so much, John, for working with me on this fun collaboration. It was my pleasure. You are very talented.
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John Gondolf
Date: 6/13/2018 7:51:00 AM
Rhoda, It was a pleasure working with you as well. This was my first collaboration and I had no idea how it would work out, but it was quite fun and I enjoyed working with such a talented writer as yourself. John
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