First Halloween

children's laughter... a boy and girl carve out a jack-o-lantern Deep orange pumpkin gutted The scent of roasted brown seeds gasps... the small lantern's grin and eyes are lit by flickering candle light The eerie light's shadow danced A coyote howled in tune an owl hoots... the moon emerges from clouds as bats flap across the sky Full moon reveals surprise Ghosts' wispy gown races shrieks and giggles... little fingers drop candy and point towards the sky A tiny night rider floats Little eyelids close softly
Written by Jack Horne and Sara Kendrick For Diane's collaborative poem contest Jack Horne the Haiku Sara Kendrick the couplets
Copyright © | Year Posted 2014


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Date: 11/6/2014 12:02:00 PM
- A little late .....But, I will congratulate you with a 2nd place Sara and Jack - a great winning poems! - oxox // Anne-Lise :)
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Date: 11/5/2014 3:14:00 PM
A top7 rating for this awesome write Sara!! A great write coming from two talented writers. Love the innocent pleasures of a young child enjoying its first Halloween...especially the gasps of excitement....and finally the contented falling off to sleep. Congratulations on your merited win. // paul
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Date: 11/5/2014 7:22:00 AM
Wonderful co-write Sara and Jack, great to see this a winner :)
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Date: 11/4/2014 6:16:00 PM
Congratulations on your win Sara. A remarkable magical poem.
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Date: 11/4/2014 1:27:00 PM
Many congratulations Jack and Sara:-) Hugs Jan xx
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Date: 11/4/2014 1:11:00 PM
This is a great combination of two forms to create images. I really enjoyed reading it. Congratulations on your second place!
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Date: 10/24/2014 7:37:00 AM
love the light take of this poem about holloween.. :) sweet!
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Date: 10/21/2014 2:43:00 PM
Wonderful Sara. Your rendition of Halloween is peaceful. Put me right there in the middle of it all. Thanks
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Date: 10/19/2014 4:46:00 AM
- A nice Halloween night for small and large witches and goblins, Sara - Good luck in the contest - Have a lovely Sunday - oxox // Anne-Lise :)
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Date: 10/19/2014 4:13:00 AM
Wow that's amazing Sara n Jack! Gl in contest!
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Date: 10/18/2014 3:00:00 PM
Wow a lovely descrptive piece that paints an awesome picture about Halloween. Love those seeds roasting and the children's laughter and little eyelids close! All of your descriptions are awesome.
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Date: 10/18/2014 12:23:00 PM
The two of you did a great job with this. Children carving Jack o lanterns is so magical. I can well picture the scene as I read this.
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Date: 10/18/2014 11:59:00 AM
Well done you two..A sweet picture...BG
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