Susan Ashley Poet Haiku

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Fire-Water Dance - Haiku

saffron sun flames sky
melted gold joins blue riffles -
sunset swims to shore


Susan Ashley
August 20, 2017


~ Fifth Place ~
Premiere Contest: Best Haiku Ever Old Or New
Sponsor: Chantelle Anne Cooke


~ Second Place ~
Contest: May Premiere 7, Any 1, 2, or 3 Line Form, Any theme
Sponsor: Brian Strand

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Connie Marcum Wong June 20, 2020 at 6:23 AM Outstanding imagery, especially in that last line Susan! This wonderful haiku should be printed on this picture to create a spectacular haiga my friend! Congratulations on your deserving win! I loved this entry. Blessings xxoo Susan Ashley June 20, 2020 at 6:47 PM Thank you, Connie, for your wonderful comments and your heartwarming congrats. Your uplifting presence is so truly appreciated. I agree, that this would make a beautiful haiga! The pic is gorgeous!! Warmest wishes always, my dear friend.. ~Susan

Mohan Chutani June 18, 2020 at 5:29 AM Time for sun to sleep on the lullaby created by waves. Fine imagery Susan. Congrats. Mohan Susan Ashley June 18, 2020 at 7:19 PM Oh, I love the beautiful imagery of your lovely comments, Mohan. Incredibly poetic, my friend! Thank you for sharing your amazing thoughts with me and for your kind congrats, both are truly appreciated. Warmest wishes always.. ~Susan

Aditi Mishra June 18, 2020 at 5:23 AM This is a vibrant haiku Susan. I love how your words paint the picture "melted gold joins blue riffles"...amazing imagery. Congratulations on your win :) Susan Ashley June 18, 2020 at 7:35 PM Thank you, Aditi, for your appreciation of my haiku, and for sharing your treasured thoughts and kind congrats with me. It's a delight to have your presence grace my poetry page.. Warmest wishes always, dear poetess.. ~Susan

Gregory Richard Barden June 18, 2020 at 4:16 AM Oh, I adore your phrasing and word choice here, Susan, to create some gorgeous and unusual imagery and mood - spectacular write! Congrats, My Friend! :o) <3 Susan Ashley June 18, 2020 at 7:33 PM Gregory, it's always such a joy when you grace my poetry page with a visit and share your precious thoughts with me. Thank you for your really beautiful comments and your kind congrats, both are held in my heartfelt appreciation. Warmest wishes always, my friend.. ~Susan

Michelle Faulkner June 17, 2020 at 10:06 PM I left you a comment, but it disappeared! Anyway, loved 'saffron sun flames sky' - this is golden and dazzling, congratulations on your win! Susan Ashley June 18, 2020 at 7:26 PM ..I'm glad this one didn't disappear :)) I'm thrilled to know that you enjoyed my haiku and I relish your sincere words of appreciation, Michelle. Thank you for your uplifting comments and for your heartwarming congrats, my friend. Warmest wishes always.. ~Susan

Tom Cunningham June 17, 2020 at 9:02 PM A beautiful image that I have been lucky enough to witness many times. Congratulations on your win Susan. Tom Susan Ashley June 18, 2020 at 7:15 PM Indeed, Tom, sunsets are truly a wonder.. especially over the water.. and no two are ever the same. Thank you for sharing your lovely thoughts and for your kind congrats. It's so nice to see you here and I hope all is well with you. Warmest wishes, my friend.. ~Susan

Ann Foster August 4, 2019 at 9:31 PM Lovely, and the picture ignites it all. Incredible. A treasure... Ann Tom Cunningham June 17, 2020 at 9:02 PM Susan Ashley August 4, 2019 at 10:02 PM Ann, your heartwarming presence lights my poetry page. Thank you for your precious comments. Warmest wishes always my friend.. ~Susan

Line Gauthier May 25, 2019 at 8:50 AM Beautiful imagery, Susan. Love your title. Congrats on your podium finish win. Susan Ashley May 26, 2019 at 7:40 PM Thank you, Line. The kindness of your lovely comments and heartwarming congrats are so appreciated... My warmest wishes always.. ~Susan

Tania Kitchin May 25, 2019 at 4:24 AM Beautiful imagery, congratulations on your win in the contest! Susan Ashley May 26, 2019 at 7:40 PM Thank you, Tania, for your lovely comment and for the delight of your kind congrats.. Warmest wishes. ~Susan

Ann Gilmour May 25, 2019 at 3:40 AM Exquisite Susan, so many congrats for your most beautiful Haiku and the last line - wow... With kindest thoughts Ann xx Susan Ashley May 26, 2019 at 7:39 PM Ann, I am delighted by your wonderful comments and kind congrats. I'm so pleased you enjoyed my poem. Warmest wishes always.. ~Susan

Kim Rodrigues May 24, 2019 at 9:24 PM I love the blue riffles...cool wording! Congrats! Susan Ashley May 24, 2019 at 9:35 PM Thank you, Kim for your lovely comment and for the delight of your kind congrats.. Warmest wishes. ~Susan

Andrea Dietrich May 24, 2019 at 7:11 PM wow, that last line is utterly fantastic. Congrats on your sweet win. Susan Ashley May 24, 2019 at 9:37 PM Thank you, Andrea. The kindness of your lovely comment and heartwarming congrats are so appreciated... My warmest wishes always.. ~Susan

Tim Peterson April 8, 2018 at 10:05 PM Lovely Susan Ashley April 9, 2018 at 3:08 PM Thank you Tim for your lovely comment and for the delight of your visit.. Warmest wishes. ~Susan

Paul Callus November 17, 2017 at 2:56 PM I love the imagery...and sunset swimming to shore, Susan. This was a though contest where there were many good entries. Regards // paul Susan Ashley November 17, 2017 at 10:32 PM Yes Paul, it was a tough contest and the winning haiku was superb! Thank you very much for your appreciation of my haiku and for sharing your treasured thoughts with me. It's always a delight to have your presence grace my poetry page.. My warmest wishes.. ~Susan

John Michaels November 15, 2017 at 2:08 AM Such a beautiful poem, Susan. Breathtaking imagery captured so succinctly in the form. A travesty that this received an "N/A" - you should definitely enter it in another contest, when the opportunity arises! Kind regards, John. Susan Ashley November 15, 2017 at 7:26 PM John, I so appreciate your sincere words of appreciation. I'm very happy that you thought so highly of my haiku :) Thank you for your uplifting comment and wonderful visit my friend.. ~Susan

Andrea Dietrich November 9, 2017 at 8:28 PM I found it: Sunset Spills Over link: https://www.poetrysoup.com/poem/sunset_spills_over_727625 Susan Ashley November 9, 2017 at 10:16 PM Andrea, I found it and it is gorgeous. I left you a comment :) Thank you for finding it!

Andrea Dietrich November 9, 2017 at 8:26 PM Susan, I am having trouble locating a poem of yours I have not read but I noticed this is still your number one poem and that contest finally WAS judged. Yours was better than the one which won. I saw it and that is MY humble opinion. I can't remember the name of mine, but I will go look it up for you now. Susan Ashley November 9, 2017 at 10:22 PM Andrea, thank you for your awesome comment and I appreciate your shared thoughts with me and your opinion expressed, but as I have to sometimes say.., c'est la vie... even if it didn't win the contest, I'm glad it won your heart, and that to me is even better :) Thank you my friend!

John Michaels October 30, 2017 at 5:24 PM Lovely imagery, Susan. Really good job. Regards, John. Susan Ashley October 30, 2017 at 7:05 PM Thank you John for your beautiful response to my poem. The kindness of your lovely visit and warmhearted words is so appreciated... My warmest regards always.. ~Susan

Jan Allison October 5, 2017 at 6:49 AM Such stunning imagery Susan I have a wonderful sunset picture my hubby took I really should write a poem about it especially as it silhouettes my final resting place!!:-) hugs jan xx Susan Ashley October 5, 2017 at 4:26 PM Hi Jan, thank you for your lovely sentiments and visit. I always appreciate your wonderful comments and I think you should definitely write a poem about your sunset pic and post the pic with it. I would love to read and see it someday! :) Susan

Andrea Dietrich September 30, 2017 at 7:33 PM I see this one of yours I faved has become your number one best poem! I wonder if that Haiku contest will ever get judged!! My entry too was about sunset and I hope we BOTH might win. Yours is divine. Susan Ashley September 30, 2017 at 8:51 PM Hi Andrea, thank you for your wonderful visit and kind words. That would be awesome if we both won and hopefully it gets judged sooner rather than later. Thank you for the compliment about my poem, much appreciated. What's the name of your haiku in the contest? I would love to read it... :)

Christopher Flaherty September 17, 2017 at 9:18 PM Sunset swims to shore Your work warms me to my core. Big numbers say it all

Robert Lindley September 10, 2017 at 4:41 AM This bright gem, my first poem read this fine morn has given light, tho' the darkness outside of my window , attempts to deny it.. So much beauty an thought in such few words. A fav... Susan Ashley September 10, 2017 at 12:40 PM Hi Robert, I'm happy that my haiku brightened your morning! Thank you so very much for your kind and wonderful comment, the fav and for the smile I have reading your lovely words. Much appreciation for your visit and kindness :) Susan

Pandita Sietesantos September 3, 2017 at 6:27 PM What a beautiful picture you have painted with this lovely haiku! The imagery is totally awesome! Love it! Hugs. Pandita Susan Ashley September 3, 2017 at 6:42 PM Hi Pandita, I always love it when you grace my page with your visit. Thank you for your really beautiful compliment. I so appreciate your lovely sentiments. Hugs to you too :) Susan

Sunlite Wanter September 1, 2017 at 6:35 PM This haiku really says a lot. Beauty in only 3 lines. Susan Ashley September 2, 2017 at 12:01 PM Hi Sunlite, thank you so much for your wonderful comment. I'm glad you enjoyed and I SO appreciate your visit:)

Michael Bell August 31, 2017 at 2:09 PM Such delightful insight and vision Sussan - well done Susan Ashley August 31, 2017 at 3:35 PM Hi Michael, what a wonderful and sweet comment! I'm glad you enjoyed my hiaku and I so appreciate your visit. Many thank you's! :)

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