'fire Snuffed Out'

I came across you as I stumbled through a darkened alley shadows of the makeshift fire shed light on your face I wasn't sure if you were smiling or just trying to unnerve me after all it was late and I was alone there I stood almost like I was glued to the spot reluctant to move just in case the shadow of you disappear so I held my pose waiting on you to make the first move you never did, the fire finally snuffed out as it started to rain.. You never said a word, just took off your jacket and covered me with it there I stood as you turned around and walked away
*inspired by the rainy weather in Cape Town* ©150720122100
Copyright © | Year Posted 2012


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Date: 7/21/2012 10:09:00 PM
Dear Wilma, great story telling. Enjoyed this.
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Date: 7/18/2012 2:50:00 AM
wilma i you took me straight to the plot . Every sentance painted a part of the story . Beautiful . Love it. *smiles* RON
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Date: 7/16/2012 9:32:00 AM
how engaging, wilms...your words sends a "sigh" in my heart!... i like how this ended.. great stuff!..:) winning wishes and huggs!
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Date: 7/15/2012 1:35:00 PM
Wow, what an emotional Topsy-turvy event here! Your poem flowed so very nicely; I enjoyed the feel of the write a lot! What a wonderful piece! Great Work!!
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Date: 7/15/2012 1:18:00 PM
Wilma, I love how you switch from fear to hero, very cool...David
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Date: 7/15/2012 1:03:00 PM
Warm muggy and uncomfortable here CTH. But your piece puts the reader right next to you. I like that. Cook for you anytime luv. Xoxo Michael
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